Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Nicely written triolet and beautiful photo. Clever wording. Line six seems awkward; is a wording missing? - just wondering. Nice progression and rhythm. Thanks for sharing, Deb

 Comment Written 15-May-2014

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reply by the author on 19-May-2014

I added a comma and think it reads better now. The prose poem walks a thin line between poetry and prose. It became popular with poets like Charles Baudelaire, Oscar Wilde and Robert Bly because it offered freedom from structure and form. Prose poetry does not use poetic meter, rhyme, line breaks or stanzas. But it does retain the repetition, language and imagery of poetry. Unlike prose, the prose poem is not as concerned with plot or narrative and its point of view is more reflective and turned inward. The prose poem can be a paragraph, three paragraphs, a page or many pages.
Difficulty: Moderate
Instructions
1.Know that you won't have to worry about rules of form. Rhyme schemes, meter, stanza and line breaks don't apply.
2. Consider the structure of prose. Prose poems take the shape of paragraphs and contain sentences and sentences fragments.
3. Think about a time where you were struck by a particular image, how you came upon that image, how that image made you feel and what went through your mind when you saw it.
4. Write about that experience. Pay particular attention to describing the image and your emotions in detail. Use poetic devices like consonance, assonance, simile, metaphor, repetition and symbol. You can tell a story in your poem, but it comes second to the language (or how you tell the story).
5. Don't worry about correct punctuation right now. You may be writing a prose poem, but you still want to keep the effects of poetry. Sometimes correct punctuation can hurt the rhythm you've established. Your prose poem can contain sentence fragments and very long sentences.
6. Read over your prose poem. Take note of the language you've used. See if you can add more detail. Take note of the story or the thoughts you've expressed. See if anything needs to be added or revised.
7. See if you have an epiphany. Not all poems need epiphanies, but some really benefit from them. See if the poem's train of thought naturally leads to an epiphany or a closing thought or image to leave with the reader.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Oh such a tender poem. I really enjoyed reading your wonderfully written poem. It flowed so nicely and was extremely loving, yet not ranching. Just perfect.

 Comment Written 13-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Debbie - a lovely post on love blooming. That tender touch is the greatest gift of all. I enjoyed this one - well penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Hi there, it's good to see another one of your fine poems. I, as of yet, have still not written a triolet. Someday soon, in the near future.
Looking to the future with you, I feel tenderness in our touch.
Nicely done, :-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

They scared me at first--now, not so much. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Simple and forthright. No covering or fancy decoration, just told as it is , as it needs to be, and as it should be.
Lovey image,.
Best wishes,
RG

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from JW

Excellent

This is a very romantic poem.

I've notice recently that most of your work is in the same genre as Gungalo. She writes mainly romantic poetry, as well.

Thanks for sharing it. JW

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

I go through phases. Who knows what next week will bring. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Hi Debbie,

A nice romantic poem. The only place I stumbled was with the line Our souls now one had once been two, but as I pasted it here, I finally get it.

By the way, according to my postal receipt, you should get your copy of my book today!

Hugs,
Lois

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

Thank you, my friend. Yes that line is not the best. I'm loving your book. Hugs~Debbie

reply by mumsyone on 14-May-2014

Thanks, Debbie, for buying my book and for enjoying it!

Hugs,
Lois

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Lovely sentiment and it's really nice to have that "tender touch" that my hubby has. He loves me completely, and to this day I still have no idea why. But it's good to know that I'm not alone. Others are not as lucky at my age.

The colors were very hard to read... for me, anyway.

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

You are so fortunate. The colors look fine on my laptop, but are hard to read on my desktop. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from judester

Excellent

A romantic poem, heartfelt and pure. To have found someone to share life's journey, with anticipation and a tender touch,makes a joyful poem, cheers and bless you both. Judester

 Comment Written 12-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

A lovely poem of loving devotion - nicely done :-)

Two quick thoughts to ponder:

re: Our souls now one had once been two I recommend a comma after one
re: Finding about you, I care so much This is the one line that reads a little off key - you might consider
Finding out all about you....or discovering you.....

:-)

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 14-May-2014

Thank you. I did add the comma as I wasn't happy with that line. The last line has to be a repeat of the second line in a triolet, but a good suggestion. Thank you, my friend~Debbie