She Stood Alone
justice or mercy?45 total reviews
Comment from ujbhurtah
Excellent piece showing how loneliness can be a heavy burden into our lives when you are especially far away from your dearest ones. This is a good job!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Excellent piece showing how loneliness can be a heavy burden into our lives when you are especially far away from your dearest ones. This is a good job!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Karen B.
This is well written and an interesting read that left me with many questions of how and why she ended up where she is and what happens next. Excellent writing that makes me want more.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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This is well written and an interesting read that left me with many questions of how and why she ended up where she is and what happens next. Excellent writing that makes me want more.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Karen for your kind and thoughtful review. Long story short - I left a 30 year marriage when my children were grown and on their own. Since I had done such a good job covering up the bad part of the marriage my children had a hard time accepting my decision. In time, my daughter came back and we have a good relationship and I enjoy her 3 sons. My other child, a son, has never accepted my decision. It has been 20 years, he now as 8 children that I never see and I am still shunned by them all. But, I have found happiness and count my blessings. I try to dwell on what I do have and not what I don't. Thank you for your interest in my poem.
I said I dwell on what is good in my life but obviously, the losses still haunt me otherwise I wouldn't have written the poem.
Blessings
Janet
Blessings
Janet
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Thanks, Janet, your poem makes a lot more sense to me now. Sometimes we do what is right for us but others simply can't see it. I have siblings who have nothing to do with me over things that go back to our parents' divorce. Hopefully your son and his family will find their way back to you. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was one of those poems that made you want to know more. I want to know how she lost her family. I want to understand what she sees as she stares at the sky. Great imagery and flow to this. Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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This was one of those poems that made you want to know more. I want to know how she lost her family. I want to understand what she sees as she stares at the sky. Great imagery and flow to this. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. Long story short - I left a 30 year marriage when my children were grown and on their own. Since I had done such a good job covering up the bad part of the marriage my children had a hard time accepting my decision. In time, my daughter came back and we have a good relationship and I enjoy her 3 sons. My other child, a son, has never accepted my decision. It has been 20 years, he now as 8 children that I never see and I am still shunned by them all. But, I have found happiness and count my blessings. I try to dwell on what I do have and not what I don't.
I said I dwell on what is good in my life but obviously, the losses still haunt me otherwise I wouldn't have written the poem.
Blessings
Janet
Thank you for your interest in my poem.
Comment from royowen
I was just thinking of that this short poem so tied up with my activities on fanstory, forgetting that I am normally meeting on a Thursday morning with a pastor friend, this being a years long early morning appointment! Your poem brought this to mind. So you're not the only one in this place! I found this work to be empathetic in nature, it was even metered, beautifully articulate, nicely rhymed in abcb scheme, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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I was just thinking of that this short poem so tied up with my activities on fanstory, forgetting that I am normally meeting on a Thursday morning with a pastor friend, this being a years long early morning appointment! Your poem brought this to mind. So you're not the only one in this place! I found this work to be empathetic in nature, it was even metered, beautifully articulate, nicely rhymed in abcb scheme, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Roy for your kind and empathetic review. Hope you didn't miss your appointment. FanStory can really be addicting.
Blessings
Janet
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You're right about that, Janet, Roy.
Comment from ravenblack
Really, I think it depends on what she is looking for- judgement or mercy. Standing alone atop the hill lost gazing at the cosmos in all their glory- my vote is for mercy.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Really, I think it depends on what she is looking for- judgement or mercy. Standing alone atop the hill lost gazing at the cosmos in all their glory- my vote is for mercy.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you for you kind and thoughtful review.
Mercy it is -- I certainly don't want judgment.
blessings
Janet
Comment from Alan K Pease
There are some points of doubt measured in the nature of her character ( not the poem) for she may have brought the situation on herself and more obviously did. Good poetics and abcb rhyme.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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There are some points of doubt measured in the nature of her character ( not the poem) for she may have brought the situation on herself and more obviously did. Good poetics and abcb rhyme.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you Alan for your thoughtful review.
Janet
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Not sure what happened to children but it makes me think that they died or something which makes me super sad. If that were the case I can certainly see yourself asking these questions, in which case I hope there is some peace in the end.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Not sure what happened to children but it makes me think that they died or something which makes me super sad. If that were the case I can certainly see yourself asking these questions, in which case I hope there is some peace in the end.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. It's been 20 years and obviously I'm still haunted by the rejection of one of my children but most of the time I am at peace at this point in my life.
Janet
Comment from amahra
When life throws you a curve, grab your baseball glove and mask and get behind home plate. Smile. I love the poem that spoke of troubled person who's life style cost them something precious. I loved the way you penned this. Also, I think that's a 'cat eye nubula' in your art work.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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When life throws you a curve, grab your baseball glove and mask and get behind home plate. Smile. I love the poem that spoke of troubled person who's life style cost them something precious. I loved the way you penned this. Also, I think that's a 'cat eye nubula' in your art work.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your kind review. I love your advice. My family is a about sports but...me...not so much. I remember a time playing catch with my young grandson when the sun got in my eyes and the ball hit my nose...crack...and I had a black eye.
Janet
Comment from DR DIP
Her children of another home
were precious memories so fair
along the peaks of cherished times
She counted costs too cruel to bear.
what about
Her children of another home
precious memories out there
along the peaks of cherished times
Counting costs too cruel to bear.
It has an ET phone home feel about it? unless I have totally misconstrued the theme
well done and thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Her children of another home
were precious memories so fair
along the peaks of cherished times
She counted costs too cruel to bear.
what about
Her children of another home
precious memories out there
along the peaks of cherished times
Counting costs too cruel to bear.
It has an ET phone home feel about it? unless I have totally misconstrued the theme
well done and thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your kind review. I will take another look at the second stanza.
Janet
Comment from Lacy Mariah
I really like this poem. Maybe just because I can relate to it right now, it i thought there was a clear story, beautiful words, much inspiration. :)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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I really like this poem. Maybe just because I can relate to it right now, it i thought there was a clear story, beautiful words, much inspiration. :)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. Life does get better but I'm learning there are still consequences.
Blessings
Janet :)
