Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This was a very good story I liked the use of pictures it sent a chill right up my spine good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thank you, dmt1967, chills up the spine is about as good a compliment as a story of this kind could receive, my friend. Much obliged!

Comment from mfowler

Exceptional

Brilliant flash fiction here! You have that wonderful blend of the demonic supernatural and the reality of life. Your use of dialogue is on song and your characterisations thinly, but effectively sketched. The hanging is suitably gharish and the entire story is very inventive. You'r ein good form in this oned.

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks, Mark, that's so kind of you to say, my friend. As a writer of a great deal of prose yourself, and successfully so, I take that as the highest compliment. I had hoped the dialogue wasn't too "over the top", and based upon your review, at least, I'm satisfied that it was just enough.

Thanks so much again for your fantastic feedback and wonderful review!

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Fine yarn, But was he Juible or Jubile? And just for effect the "it" in the last line should be the vermin's full and formal-not to say Christian-name, in my unschooled opinion.

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 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Well, thank you, LIJ Red, and no opinion or suggestion should be overlooked in my book, my friend. I will certainly consider changing that "it" to Jebediah. As for Juible/Jubile, that change has already been corrected and made.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Wow! That is some story. It reads almost like a graphic novel, with all the artwork you have to support it.

The colloquial speech surprisingly works well in this.

Good job.

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 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks very much for affirming what I attempted to achieve here, Jay. I wanted to convey a graphic novel feel to this, to spice up what had to be a very short story. I'm so happy to hear that you felt I pulled that off. I've read many of your Trining tales, so I have no doubts you know exactly what you're taking about. I really appreciate your encouraging review.