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A Collection Of Short Form Poetry

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Comment from Ben Colder
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I thought Haiku was not to use capital letters. I was disqualified once for doing so. You have a very nice contest piece. You might wish to check it out.

 Comment Written 07-May-2014


reply by the author on 07-May-2014
    Yes, the haiku people can be strict! True, capitals are to be avoided. There are exceptions. I will quote the rule: "There are two exceptions to the rules that govern when to capitalize seasons. The first is when a season starts a sentence. When this happens, normal sentence capitalization rules apply. The other exception is when a season is personified, as if often done in poetry for stylistic reasons. When a season is personified, it is given human qualities." It's funny, I think I spend more time trying to figure out these little three line pieces than I do everything else combined!! I am pleased that you enjoyed this. I hope my explanation helps. It helped me to look it up! Hahaha.
Comment from nordicgirl
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This work has reached the exceptional level

I don't often give a six for a haiku, but wow that second line is just wonderful. What a perfect autumn image as the last memories of Spring fade away and signs of Winter begin to show themselves. This has to be the winner. NG

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from Njorgensen
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Fine example of a 5-7-5 poem. I definitely like the subject matter. I happen to think Autumn is the most beautiful of all the seasons, so this poem is right up my alley. The picture is beautiful.

Njorgensen

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from skye
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Autumn reverie
colors drip-- leaves float on sighs
remembering spring

What lovely imagery. Drip... that is such a gret word when looking at the weather and the leaves.
Excellent.

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from kiwijenny
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Haiku (Autumn Reverie)


Autumn reverie
colors drip-- leaves float on sighs
remembering spring
Exquisite imagery...and I love the artwork
Well dome
God bless

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from Cedar
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This is a very beautiful Ode to my favorite time of the year. I really like the way you blended your colors in the presentation. I wish you good luck. Bill

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from Domino 2
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Very clever entry, and I particularly like your choices of 'colours drip' and 'float on sighs' - terrific and apt metaphors.

Good luck and best wishes, Ted.

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from Jackarrie
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Autumn reverie
colors drip-- leaves float on sighs
remembering spring

I like this Haiku poem, it says a lot for so few words. I like. Leaves float on sighs.

Well done, good luck in the contest. Mary

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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You call this a haiku - I'm not an expert on haiku, but the prompt asks for a 5/7/5 which is what you have produced. It is very good and personalises leaves, remembering spring. Also good metaphor - floating on sighs. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

Comment from royowen
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This is qualifying entry in this 5-7-5 ode to winter contest! Nice artwork to compliment the narrative. A nicely worded worthy entry! I like the theme of this poem! Well done, blessings Roy.

 Comment Written 07-May-2014