The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Welcome to Olvera Street"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
15 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Good work matey. haven't done anything with that info you gave me a day or two ago. Gonna see what I can do tomorrow probably. No Spags surprise surprise.
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Good work matey. haven't done anything with that info you gave me a day or two ago. Gonna see what I can do tomorrow probably. No Spags surprise surprise.
Comment Written 06-May-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this one is cohesive and starts to bring things together for the reader. (Nice quip at the Dems, LOL) The details of the city and area give it authenticity. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this one is cohesive and starts to bring things together for the reader. (Nice quip at the Dems, LOL) The details of the city and area give it authenticity. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-May-2014
Comment from CR Delport
So they made it to the bus station and nobody else yet knows that Blackwell is alive. For a crazy guy the bard is quite resourceful :) This is another great chapter.
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So they made it to the bus station and nobody else yet knows that Blackwell is alive. For a crazy guy the bard is quite resourceful :) This is another great chapter.
Comment Written 05-May-2014
Comment from Showboat
What a stunning chapter, Mike, absolutely riveting and since this is the first chapter I've read, I'm lost in the woods, but I'll be rectifying that soon.
Great dialogue, very real and 'you are there' and engaging. Heck, I liked everything about this one. This is a sixer, I'm just out!
Great,
Gayle
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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What a stunning chapter, Mike, absolutely riveting and since this is the first chapter I've read, I'm lost in the woods, but I'll be rectifying that soon.
Great dialogue, very real and 'you are there' and engaging. Heck, I liked everything about this one. This is a sixer, I'm just out!
Great,
Gayle
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Hi! Wow. This really makes my week. I am delighted you liked this. I am fairly new to prose and getting a lot of help and advice. Thrilled to hear that a top of the line writer likes what I'm doing. Smiles!! mikey
Comment from seaglass
The truth is coming to light. All will be happy endings eventually but there's lots to do to bring it safely to pass.
"The Bard (new) the streets of Los Angeles and that is where they were."--(knew)
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The truth is coming to light. All will be happy endings eventually but there's lots to do to bring it safely to pass.
"The Bard (new) the streets of Los Angeles and that is where they were."--(knew)
Comment Written 04-May-2014
Comment from l.raven
OK Michael, the boys are back in town...or getting closer...Harpster says he has no kids...so who is the six toed dame??? LOL...Lucy is still watch the nest...and Juniors head is spinning on his shoulders like a top...my money...let's see what is next...ya know I love it...Luff Linda xxoo
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OK Michael, the boys are back in town...or getting closer...Harpster says he has no kids...so who is the six toed dame??? LOL...Lucy is still watch the nest...and Juniors head is spinning on his shoulders like a top...my money...let's see what is next...ya know I love it...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-May-2014
Comment from Nosha17
That was a very interesting chapter, lots happened and they are now all coming together. The characters in this chapter seem to be on the same wavelength which is helpful for the plot unravelling. Great write, Faye
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That was a very interesting chapter, lots happened and they are now all coming together. The characters in this chapter seem to be on the same wavelength which is helpful for the plot unravelling. Great write, Faye
Comment Written 04-May-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This really deserves a 5 1/2, I think. Very nicely written, with just the right amount of dialogue and narrative to keep the story moving along in an intriguing manner. It's hard no to wonder what's going to happen next, and that is the basis of any good story, right? I still see this on TV in some way - series, etc.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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This really deserves a 5 1/2, I think. Very nicely written, with just the right amount of dialogue and narrative to keep the story moving along in an intriguing manner. It's hard no to wonder what's going to happen next, and that is the basis of any good story, right? I still see this on TV in some way - series, etc.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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So pleased you are enjoying this! I do love the Bard. He is so much fun to write. Maybe a T.V. series would be good. He could comment on current events while solving crimes with the two ladies. I finally have everyone in close proximity! mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yep, it seems it is all coming to a head. The Harpster was very happy to hear that Ruby was his daughter. But I agree that the fact they are alive should be with held from Winston. He is a dangerous man. Write on my friend. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Yep, it seems it is all coming to a head. The Harpster was very happy to hear that Ruby was his daughter. But I agree that the fact they are alive should be with held from Winston. He is a dangerous man. Write on my friend. Nancy
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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It is a strange situation, but nobody knows what anybody else knows. Yes, the fear is that if Winston knew that his plan was on the brink of being exposed there is no telling what he might do. mikey
Comment from Michaelk
Great chapter as always. This one moved along quickly, maybe a little too quickly. The characters seemed almost frantic, yet all they were really ended up doing was meeting at a restaurant. We've come to expect little rants from bard, but that one that started about taxes was one breathless paragraph.
A little SPAG. 'The bard (k)new the streets of LA...'
Great chapter, can't wait for the next one.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Great chapter as always. This one moved along quickly, maybe a little too quickly. The characters seemed almost frantic, yet all they were really ended up doing was meeting at a restaurant. We've come to expect little rants from bard, but that one that started about taxes was one breathless paragraph.
A little SPAG. 'The bard (k)new the streets of LA...'
Great chapter, can't wait for the next one.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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I have to remember that it is a story and not an excuse for me to say anything I feel like. Hahaha. I'm have been in a hurry to get everyone closer together. I had them a little scattered around. Now they are all freeway close! More to come. Way behind so I'm going backwards answering these. I do read every one of these with great interest and appreciate them. I am just buried! Thank you much. mikey
