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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Winds of change."Mostly romance.
19 total reviews
Comment from Swagman
This is a very good poem which seems similar in structure to my poem titled 'Hello, Goodbye', I always say I prefer short poems because I think they accentuate the writing more.
bewildered
in love,
I ignore
my intuition.
These are great lines.
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This is a very good poem which seems similar in structure to my poem titled 'Hello, Goodbye', I always say I prefer short poems because I think they accentuate the writing more.
bewildered
in love,
I ignore
my intuition.
These are great lines.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2005
Comment from AuroraSky
And the winds of change produce a world of mesmeric thought in a poet's mind...amazing how simple things can create inspiration and the winds of change are but part of the flow.
A good write Pili...yep, I'm in thinker's land again! LOL
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And the winds of change produce a world of mesmeric thought in a poet's mind...amazing how simple things can create inspiration and the winds of change are but part of the flow.
A good write Pili...yep, I'm in thinker's land again! LOL
Comment Written 18-Aug-2005
Comment from Permelia
The picture you chose to go with this remarkable poem is one of the most beautiful I have seen- and never let go of your dreams! Hold tight to them, and help them come true.
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The picture you chose to go with this remarkable poem is one of the most beautiful I have seen- and never let go of your dreams! Hold tight to them, and help them come true.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from sengwriter
Winds of changes just knocking at the doors, let it be. But in this poem the fantasies of you gets disturbed as you open the door, look at the realities biting and fade out your dreams. Fantasies need a sole attention, may be sometimes those are far away from a reality. But they are also a great part of a dreaming life.
As the theme of your poem ends that's what I felt that your nice fantasy is getting hurt by the stern reality. Reality is always there to fade your dreams and fantasies out. So before you let your doors open to reality, cover them in the treasure box, they are to be kept, to be preserved for ever...dreams are your own treasure, never let it loose its color, never let it fade away.
So far as your style and writing is concerned, you're equally strong here to establish your logic and to reach your message perfectly.
Good work and liked very much.
chchbb
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Winds of changes just knocking at the doors, let it be. But in this poem the fantasies of you gets disturbed as you open the door, look at the realities biting and fade out your dreams. Fantasies need a sole attention, may be sometimes those are far away from a reality. But they are also a great part of a dreaming life.
As the theme of your poem ends that's what I felt that your nice fantasy is getting hurt by the stern reality. Reality is always there to fade your dreams and fantasies out. So before you let your doors open to reality, cover them in the treasure box, they are to be kept, to be preserved for ever...dreams are your own treasure, never let it loose its color, never let it fade away.
So far as your style and writing is concerned, you're equally strong here to establish your logic and to reach your message perfectly.
Good work and liked very much.
chchbb
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from Thomas Raine
I am beginning to like the style of your poetry a lot. It has this fast, quick feel to it, but at the same time conveys a lot of emotion. Great work.
- TR
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I am beginning to like the style of your poetry a lot. It has this fast, quick feel to it, but at the same time conveys a lot of emotion. Great work.
- TR
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from Lisloh
Okay...... Never, never ignore intuition!
Got it? Get it! Got it!
This is lovely Pili.
It so touches where I am now....
Should I or shouldn't I ?
Me thinks me will...:)
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
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Okay...... Never, never ignore intuition!
Got it? Get it! Got it!
This is lovely Pili.
It so touches where I am now....
Should I or shouldn't I ?
Me thinks me will...:)
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from clhutchinson
The title is very fitting as the poem clearly expresses the changes from happiness to sadness from not following intuition. Great metaphor usage to bring across the mood.
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The title is very fitting as the poem clearly expresses the changes from happiness to sadness from not following intuition. Great metaphor usage to bring across the mood.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I let
my dreams
fade slowly
in silent
gentleness, } Silent gentleness just doesn't seem right here... Possible
'gentle silence'? hmmm now that sounds pretty good!
riding
on the winds
of change,
into the
eternal sea.
Nice thoughts, Pili.
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I let
my dreams
fade slowly
in silent
gentleness, } Silent gentleness just doesn't seem right here... Possible
'gentle silence'? hmmm now that sounds pretty good!
riding
on the winds
of change,
into the
eternal sea.
Nice thoughts, Pili.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from suneagle
Very nicely written, Pili. This poem flows smoothly and couples well with the chosen picture.
Winds of change
calling
at the door
of my trembling
heart,
for so long now...
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Very nicely written, Pili. This poem flows smoothly and couples well with the chosen picture.
Winds of change
calling
at the door
of my trembling
heart,
for so long now...
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
Comment from tjewing
This is another great poem. Sometimes we should have our doubts. There are certain things that just aren't right about a person. tjewing
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This is another great poem. Sometimes we should have our doubts. There are certain things that just aren't right about a person. tjewing
Comment Written 17-Aug-2005
