Afraid of my Competition
a sobering brush with terror24 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A neat fantasy, Ingrid. Anytime you can figure out how to make it reality - minus having to deal with utility repairmen - I definitely want to know. Scary possibilities abound with the ending. What horrors have entered the author's life?
:) nancy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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A neat fantasy, Ingrid. Anytime you can figure out how to make it reality - minus having to deal with utility repairmen - I definitely want to know. Scary possibilities abound with the ending. What horrors have entered the author's life?
:) nancy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Just read Dean's post or MichaelK's story in this contest--brain-eating zombies and a knife-wielding daughter were brought into my brain.
I was just having fun with the whole thing.
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Zombies? REALLY? Aren't they getting old? Of course, based on your story, you won't have anything to worry about after that, will you? :D Nancy
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was very funny. You started it out like you do with some of your non fiction essays and I thought all this was really happening to you. I did raise an eyebrow when you fell into the arms of the UPS driver, so that is when I checked. Damn, you had me going. LOL. Great prompt. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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This was very funny. You started it out like you do with some of your non fiction essays and I thought all this was really happening to you. I did raise an eyebrow when you fell into the arms of the UPS driver, so that is when I checked. Damn, you had me going. LOL. Great prompt. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Was never intended to be a serious contender. I take my hat off to Dean Kuch, probably one of the best horror writers on site and no-doubt the winner in this contest. Sunday boredom put me into this head space.
I had one of the other contestants get annoyed with me, saying this has no 'scream factor,' well trust me, if I conjured up some of Dean's characters in my real world, you'd hear me screaming all the way to China.
It's also one of the first contests where supposedly FS is monitoring to see if entries qualify and as I wasn't ousted, either my story fills the criteria or they just grabbed an extra fifty cents for this 'added feature' and are paying lip service.
Glad I gotchya. Tnaks for coming to my party.
Comment from jmdg1954
Hey, it's your story. Take as much poetic liscense as you want/need/desire!
Wouldn't it be amazing if you were able to have that power for even a few minutes.... Hmmm... Awesome.
Great story and best of luck in the contest. John
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Hey, it's your story. Take as much poetic liscense as you want/need/desire!
Wouldn't it be amazing if you were able to have that power for even a few minutes.... Hmmm... Awesome.
Great story and best of luck in the contest. John
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Having some fun with Mr. Kuch, our consummate horror story teller.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hey there~!
Great Job with this one..That last line..it was amazing..lol...maybe I shouldn't be laughing, but for some reason I'm finding that last line scary and humorous at the same time..
Well anyway, great job...
Good Luck with the contest and God Bless~!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Hey there~!
Great Job with this one..That last line..it was amazing..lol...maybe I shouldn't be laughing, but for some reason I'm finding that last line scary and humorous at the same time..
Well anyway, great job...
Good Luck with the contest and God Bless~!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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It was all meant to play with the other horror writers in this contest and bow to their talent. Yes, it was meant to be funny. Thanks.
Comment from Carole Rosa
Ingrid, I thought that you were actually writing a real episode about a real electrical problem. THEN.....OMG, what a crazy ending. Where is your mind my friend? Ha! Good job. Carole
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Ingrid, I thought that you were actually writing a real episode about a real electrical problem. THEN.....OMG, what a crazy ending. Where is your mind my friend? Ha! Good job. Carole
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Playing with Dean Kuch, the soon to be proclaimed winner of this contest. My ending was in direct response to his entry and no, there's not a chance in hell I'm a contender--just having fun.
Anyway, this is supposed to be one of the first FS monitored contest where for 50 cents extra the entries can be disqualified by Tom. I guess my scream was loud enough to satisfy the requirements or it's all BS.
For a better time, read my post on flatulence. It's not in any contest.
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Ingrid, Loved your reply and especially your BS remark. I have the same thought!! In the first place, all of the Tom's in the monitored committee would NEVER disqualify you. You are such a honored writer, they wouldn't dare. Smiles to you. Carole
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Ingrid, He has had 14 views and only seven votes, so everybody didn't vote for him. YOU GOT A CHANCE. Carole
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Are you kidding? LOL...I was in #5 position two or three years ago and they suspended me. HAHA, no they don't like me very much at all. I've been suspended three times, probably deserved it once, the second time, not a chance, but they wouldn't let me back until I offered a deceitful grovel--my fingers were crossed. The first time, I had a house guest, of a tender age, and a rebellious nature--he sent all my customers and FS fan list a personal not, telling them all to F-off. I suppose it was my computer and my responsibility.
Kind thought, but--oh yes, they would definitely have fun disqualifying me.
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Ingrid, Amazing. I have a drug addict daughter who did the same thing to my friends in my Franklin Planner. Amazing! Well, we survived didn't we? Love you. Carole
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You're sweet. The struggle with your daughter is a tough journey.
My customers weren't all amused, some were others were pretty miffed, but hey, we did indeed survive.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Clever. I'll allow you your poetic licence. I use mine constantly. :)
So, you opened Dean's submission, I take it? It would be nice, in some cases, to write a character and have him standing on the doorstep a short time later.
Shit. I'd never leave the house.
Av
"What power(?)" I replied.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Clever. I'll allow you your poetic licence. I use mine constantly. :)
So, you opened Dean's submission, I take it? It would be nice, in some cases, to write a character and have him standing on the doorstep a short time later.
Shit. I'd never leave the house.
Av
"What power(?)" I replied.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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I was actually having fun with Dean's entry and with him. Probably THE horror writer on this site.
Are you still here or in Myrtle Beach?
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I haven't read Dean's post, but I guessed that's who you were referring to. Still here - we leave on Wednesday. :)
Av
Comment from forestport12
Have you heard about the stellar story you submitted that was nominated story of the month? I've been wondering if that will find a publisher. Very memorable one of many.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Have you heard about the stellar story you submitted that was nominated story of the month? I've been wondering if that will find a publisher. Very memorable one of many.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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They would have notified me by April 12th. radio/phone/computer silence, so no, I didn't get a winning spot. But I love that story. I'm mot going to let that one sit dormant. As a matter of fact, I think I'll send it to Sun Magazine--this week, on account of you giving me a wink-wink reminder. thanks.
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Yes, please do that. What is Sun-magazine known for?
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It is straight literature...check out the web site. They pay very healthy, but I've never submitted. This week, for sure. Think everything needs to be mailed, though no reading fee.
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I will take a look.
Comment from Michaelk
I hope you didn't open any of mine...Mu ha ha ha...(Sorry about that, my mad scientist laugh needs work)
Great story, very inventive. I was hooked from moment one. i liked the way you integrated the fanstory life with real life, adding a slice of bizarre. Nice twist, I wouldn't want to live out some of the stories on this site either. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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I hope you didn't open any of mine...Mu ha ha ha...(Sorry about that, my mad scientist laugh needs work)
Great story, very inventive. I was hooked from moment one. i liked the way you integrated the fanstory life with real life, adding a slice of bizarre. Nice twist, I wouldn't want to live out some of the stories on this site either. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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I have my 'also ran' speech all dusted off and ready, but I do admit to having some fun with this.
your mad scientist laugh needs no work. You scared the shit right out of me. Don't--repeat--DON'T let Dean Kuch record it.
Comment from AnonymousWisdom
Fourth paragraph down: remember to start a new paragraph when a different character starts speaking.
"What power," I replied.
Should be "What power?" I replied.
Even with the ending, this was a little lacking in the "scream making" department for me.
Good job and good luck in the contest :)
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Fourth paragraph down: remember to start a new paragraph when a different character starts speaking.
"What power," I replied.
Should be "What power?" I replied.
Even with the ending, this was a little lacking in the "scream making" department for me.
Good job and good luck in the contest :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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I think I was having more fun with the other writers who are well received horror writers. I meant it as a satire, but you're right, it would be a feeble scream unless you read the other entries and realized I had both the feral woman/werewolf in the room or the butcher knife slinging daughter.
Comment from rod007
This is a well written story but where is the "screaming horror" that this prompt calls for. I suppose the prompt doesn't need to be adhered to. I should write a story about a scary poodle.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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This is a well written story but where is the "screaming horror" that this prompt calls for. I suppose the prompt doesn't need to be adhered to. I should write a story about a scary poodle.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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I was having some fun with the actual entries of my competitors, at least two of which are scream inducing.
In my entry, I suddenly could create in real-life what my mind imagined. Ergo--when I read my competitors submissions, butcher-knife slinger and the woman werewolf came into existence.
Do I expect to win? No just having fun.
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I wish you the best of luck. You are right we should lighten up this whole competition-prompt thing, your writing was great by the way. Have fun.
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Really, meant no disrespect. What the heck, isn't this one of the 'monitored contests' where FS charges us 50 cents more for their 'qualifying' stories?
It's 500 words exactly so they could rule there was no scream factor and I wouldn't be offended.
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You are right. I take these prompts too seriously, silly bloody fool that I am. To hell with the scream factor, who cares!
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Well the least you can do is vote for yourself. Or didn't you know the rule was changed? No, well I stated that there shoul be an announcement, but all this happened in the forum. I am a peeper not a participant. But you CAN vote for yourself. That's why I have a vote,likely the only one.
