Rain Pours
free verse - feelings of longing and heartache19 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
This had to be one of the most heart wrenching feelings of loss and despair in the past of what could have been but did not materialized.
The loss can be profound and the feelings of remorse and regret will haunt for days on end.
Perhaps, tomorrow will be the day the sorrow ends with news of a new pregnancy, smiles.
A woman needs to be healthy and happy in order to conceive. Worries and sadness can upset the period timing and the hormonal balances.
Stay calm and relax and the laws of nature will bring in the off-springs soon enough.
Great write and good luck.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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This had to be one of the most heart wrenching feelings of loss and despair in the past of what could have been but did not materialized.
The loss can be profound and the feelings of remorse and regret will haunt for days on end.
Perhaps, tomorrow will be the day the sorrow ends with news of a new pregnancy, smiles.
A woman needs to be healthy and happy in order to conceive. Worries and sadness can upset the period timing and the hormonal balances.
Stay calm and relax and the laws of nature will bring in the off-springs soon enough.
Great write and good luck.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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It's not about a pregnancy - I have adult children and grandchildren. It is the children that have chosen to be estranged from me and therefore I no longer get to see my grandchildren and I miss them terribly. Thanks Ritchie for the concern and great review.
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Smiles. :))
Cheerio, have a great day, Ritchie. :))
Comment from adewpearl
excellent alliteration in tiny toes and consonance in candy sticky kisses
I just love boo-boo whimpering
from a rainbow dream to a tornado rhyme - such a bittersweet poem, emotionally-charged and filled with vivid imagery
Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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excellent alliteration in tiny toes and consonance in candy sticky kisses
I just love boo-boo whimpering
from a rainbow dream to a tornado rhyme - such a bittersweet poem, emotionally-charged and filled with vivid imagery
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke:)
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow this is a heart wrenching piece could feel the longing for a child lost and the storm of emotion left behind thanks and good luck xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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wow this is a heart wrenching piece could feel the longing for a child lost and the storm of emotion left behind thanks and good luck xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the review and good luck wishes.
Comment from Kingsland
The opening stanza for this poem really draws the reader in to see what more will transpire. The entire poem is well written and flows freely through its thoughts and phrases. I enjoyed reading the excellent piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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The opening stanza for this poem really draws the reader in to see what more will transpire. The entire poem is well written and flows freely through its thoughts and phrases. I enjoyed reading the excellent piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you John for the great review.
Comment from BeasPeas
I love your piece. So descriptive and heartfelt. Using lower case all the way through emphasizes the smallness of self and the hugeness of the loss--almost a humbling in the face of the challenge of acceptance. Second stanza, especially powerful.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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I love your piece. So descriptive and heartfelt. Using lower case all the way through emphasizes the smallness of self and the hugeness of the loss--almost a humbling in the face of the challenge of acceptance. Second stanza, especially powerful.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for the awesome gift of 6 stars!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one is hypnotic as I am taken back to those happy days of being a parent and having everything be a new experience for everyone. First steps for my baby boy and for his father. Miss those times. This work sounds like it has a bigger backstory than that. Hope for happy days.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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This one is hypnotic as I am taken back to those happy days of being a parent and having everything be a new experience for everyone. First steps for my baby boy and for his father. Miss those times. This work sounds like it has a bigger backstory than that. Hope for happy days.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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thank you Bill for your review.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Great message of longing and heartache for a child.
This could use a picture to enhance the feeling more.
Thank You for sharing this wonderful write. Good luck with contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Great message of longing and heartache for a child.
This could use a picture to enhance the feeling more.
Thank You for sharing this wonderful write. Good luck with contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the great review and good luck withes.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi
This is a really good poem about feelings. IMO it would have a lot of impact if you complimented it with some artwork, or a pix of your child/children.
Just a thought, so use or lose - enjoyed it.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Hi
This is a really good poem about feelings. IMO it would have a lot of impact if you complimented it with some artwork, or a pix of your child/children.
Just a thought, so use or lose - enjoyed it.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thanks Jax for the great review.
Comment from royowen
A very positive poem in this feelings contest! It's beautifully expressed in a nice easy flow to the narrative! It is descriptively good, the language you use is articulate and easy to understand! Good one, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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A very positive poem in this feelings contest! It's beautifully expressed in a nice easy flow to the narrative! It is descriptively good, the language you use is articulate and easy to understand! Good one, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you Roy.
Comment from Bryan G
This is a moving poem. I am assuming that you have suffered the loss of a child or children. You have captured the heartache of separation from your children in the worst way possible. I hope that you can find comfort that these little ones are in the arms of the Savior.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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This is a moving poem. I am assuming that you have suffered the loss of a child or children. You have captured the heartache of separation from your children in the worst way possible. I hope that you can find comfort that these little ones are in the arms of the Savior.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you Bryan for the great review.
