On a Day Alive with Promise
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7177 total reviews
Comment from Ekim777
Am I wrong in saying that cadence is the magical core of all your poetry. Most often when I begin a poem I am influenced by something by Yeats. "I shall arise and go now/ And go to Innes free/And a small cabin build there of clay and wattles made..." This was inspired by the Xmas decorations in a shop window/ And Yeats was inspired by Byron, I think. "I'll go no more a roving away into the night/ Though my heart was full of loving...?
Of course I am being presumptuous. You have long found your own voice as demonstrated by your latest poem. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Am I wrong in saying that cadence is the magical core of all your poetry. Most often when I begin a poem I am influenced by something by Yeats. "I shall arise and go now/ And go to Innes free/And a small cabin build there of clay and wattles made..." This was inspired by the Xmas decorations in a shop window/ And Yeats was inspired by Byron, I think. "I'll go no more a roving away into the night/ Though my heart was full of loving...?
Of course I am being presumptuous. You have long found your own voice as demonstrated by your latest poem. -Ekim777
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Ekim, thank you so much for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Ola Awakan
This poem is filled with a message of hope and identifying the right key to unlock the right path. I have thrilled by the diction and poetic flow! Great one!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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This poem is filled with a message of hope and identifying the right key to unlock the right path. I have thrilled by the diction and poetic flow! Great one!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Ola, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bryan G
This is a beautiful poem that is a great contrast of the gifts of the day and night. I took a message of overcoming disappointment from your work. I enjoyed learning about rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7. Poets like yourself are a real inspiration for a novice like me.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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This is a beautiful poem that is a great contrast of the gifts of the day and night. I took a message of overcoming disappointment from your work. I enjoyed learning about rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7. Poets like yourself are a real inspiration for a novice like me.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Bryan, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from annp
This is lovely poetry to read
the subtle message, when one door closes another opens,springs to my mind
it is perfect for children (of all ages)
love the picture
regards
annp
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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This is lovely poetry to read
the subtle message, when one door closes another opens,springs to my mind
it is perfect for children (of all ages)
love the picture
regards
annp
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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annp, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dennis0530
This writing has the themes of substitution and second choice, of right timing, and optimism.
In missing to catch our main objective, something to remind us of it will suffice for the moment - until the next appropriate encounter. The character just missed the opportune moment of catching the "moonbeam" because of being off-timed. Instead of being disappointed at missing the goal, the character looked for a second option encouraged by a promising day.
A very fitting metaphor in our daily lives. Frustration sometimes weigh us down when we fail to meet our goals. But somehow, an inner voice urges us on holding on to our hope for a better next time.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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This writing has the themes of substitution and second choice, of right timing, and optimism.
In missing to catch our main objective, something to remind us of it will suffice for the moment - until the next appropriate encounter. The character just missed the opportune moment of catching the "moonbeam" because of being off-timed. Instead of being disappointed at missing the goal, the character looked for a second option encouraged by a promising day.
A very fitting metaphor in our daily lives. Frustration sometimes weigh us down when we fail to meet our goals. But somehow, an inner voice urges us on holding on to our hope for a better next time.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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dennis, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Hi Brook! Nicely done job. Your poem has good imagery and descriptive scheme. This picture of Sawyer is so cute, I wonder if he is not allergic to flowers...
Have a nice week-end!
:)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Hi Brook! Nicely done job. Your poem has good imagery and descriptive scheme. This picture of Sawyer is so cute, I wonder if he is not allergic to flowers...
Have a nice week-end!
:)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Aurora, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
Yes, I gathered the Da Da Dum rhythm through out. I love your creative mind when it comes to your poems. You write so beautifully about things people hardly even notice until they read you.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Yes, I gathered the Da Da Dum rhythm through out. I love your creative mind when it comes to your poems. You write so beautifully about things people hardly even notice until they read you.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
You'll never have enough cute pictures of Sawyer to inspire you or illustrate your poems so well.
There are treasures to collect from every part of the day and night. Beauty and hope are everywhere around us. We just have to see it and embrace it.
Well written and metered poem.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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You'll never have enough cute pictures of Sawyer to inspire you or illustrate your poems so well.
There are treasures to collect from every part of the day and night. Beauty and hope are everywhere around us. We just have to see it and embrace it.
Well written and metered poem.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from Rubylou
Your quatrains are a wonderful reminder of how each phase of day has wonderful exhibits for us to view. I like the reminder of nature holds prizes for us if we take the time to pause and view its display. Rubylou
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Your quatrains are a wonderful reminder of how each phase of day has wonderful exhibits for us to view. I like the reminder of nature holds prizes for us if we take the time to pause and view its display. Rubylou
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Rubylou, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry beautifully giving the message 'Fully enjoy whatever is in your hand at present and don't let it slip for any other thought'!
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"I was sorely disappointed
that the moon had gone to bed,
till a hummingbird suggested
that I search for dew instead."
Excellent!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry beautifully giving the message 'Fully enjoy whatever is in your hand at present and don't let it slip for any other thought'!
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"I was sorely disappointed
that the moon had gone to bed,
till a hummingbird suggested
that I search for dew instead."
Excellent!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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RP, thank you so much :-) Brooke
