On a Day Alive with Promise
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7177 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have captured the brilliance of morning glory and the dew drops beautifully, Brooke, I think every garden should grow them, their colour brightens any dull spot. I think you have found the perfect illustration, too. LOL, how hard was that? I must get my daughter-in-law to start sending me some, or nip over and take my own. Really lovely, and a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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You have captured the brilliance of morning glory and the dew drops beautifully, Brooke, I think every garden should grow them, their colour brightens any dull spot. I think you have found the perfect illustration, too. LOL, how hard was that? I must get my daughter-in-law to start sending me some, or nip over and take my own. Really lovely, and a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Lucky for me, my daughter loves to take photos of Sawyer, even without my prompting. Dressing him and photographing him, her official hobbies. LOL Thanks so much, Sandra :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good proximate rhyming with vine/time...arise/prize. Good alliteration with world/was...glories/grow...suggested/search...took/time...sparks/sunlight...dark's/descending...dew/drops. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good proximate rhyming with vine/time...arise/prize. Good alliteration with world/was...glories/grow...suggested/search...took/time...sparks/sunlight...dark's/descending...dew/drops. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ruzu27
Setting out to find a moonbeam... way a lovely and poetic idea.
The kind of story people having bad dreams should read before going to bed!
Your daughter is a good photographer...
Well done, thank you for sharing, Brooke.
:) Ruth
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Setting out to find a moonbeam... way a lovely and poetic idea.
The kind of story people having bad dreams should read before going to bed!
Your daughter is a good photographer...
Well done, thank you for sharing, Brooke.
:) Ruth
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Ruth, and yes, I am very proud of Miranda's photography :-) Brooke
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A very refreshing and delightful poem with a lovely cadence and inherent
Appeal.
The beauty of morning glories is often overlooked but when blooming as a mass display they are quite eye catching.
Very clever and thoughtful and thoughtfulis sure to appeal to all ages.
Sawyer sure looks proud with his lovely bloom.
Perfect quatrains in the stated rhyme and meter.
A virtual six for I am sorry I once again have no sixes.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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A very refreshing and delightful poem with a lovely cadence and inherent
Appeal.
The beauty of morning glories is often overlooked but when blooming as a mass display they are quite eye catching.
Very clever and thoughtful and thoughtfulis sure to appeal to all ages.
Sawyer sure looks proud with his lovely bloom.
Perfect quatrains in the stated rhyme and meter.
A virtual six for I am sorry I once again have no sixes.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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seken, thank you so much - Sawyer and his mom take their hour walk every morning just in the neighborhood, and I couldn't tell you which one has the most fun :-) Brooke
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What beautiful memories they will have.
Comment from Quire's Gal
Hi Brooke,
This is so simply charming. I love the way you used bedtime terms when you refer to the moonbeam...Like "slumber" and "tucked""
But the moon had left to slumber
and had tucked her beams away,
My favorite is actually the title/opening line...
"On a day alive with promise" Very unique.
Sawyer's bunny picture put such a smile on my face this morning too so thanks for sharing and be well,
Katherine
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is so simply charming. I love the way you used bedtime terms when you refer to the moonbeam...Like "slumber" and "tucked""
But the moon had left to slumber
and had tucked her beams away,
My favorite is actually the title/opening line...
"On a day alive with promise" Very unique.
Sawyer's bunny picture put such a smile on my face this morning too so thanks for sharing and be well,
Katherine
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Katherine, for your thoughtful comments and generous rating. He is just one little cutie, isn't he? :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
I didn't know you had daDum feet - how exclusive! Sniffing a morning glory? Looks like he is stuffing it up his nose! Your poem is so well constructed and a learning tool for those interested in taking the time to find the structure. I liked it, I thought it was most delightful, colourful and told a great little story. Well done Hon.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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I didn't know you had daDum feet - how exclusive! Sniffing a morning glory? Looks like he is stuffing it up his nose! Your poem is so well constructed and a learning tool for those interested in taking the time to find the structure. I liked it, I thought it was most delightful, colourful and told a great little story. Well done Hon.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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LOL - I have a great picture of him stuffing a marker up his nose. LOL Thanks so much, Kay :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem is very playful and gives the reader the sense of discovery. When what we want is unavailable, there are other wonders to be considered. Nice message and a fun poem.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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This poem is very playful and gives the reader the sense of discovery. When what we want is unavailable, there are other wonders to be considered. Nice message and a fun poem.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Zue65
I love the fun play of getting the moonbeams and searching for a dew instead, when moonbeams failed to show up. The poetic lines carry well your message, God bless.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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I love the fun play of getting the moonbeams and searching for a dew instead, when moonbeams failed to show up. The poetic lines carry well your message, God bless.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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nassus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another beautiful poem with Sawyer as the poster boy that the author has created with this piece of writing. Every day is alive with promise. We just need to realise that promise. Well done again.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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This is yet another beautiful poem with Sawyer as the poster boy that the author has created with this piece of writing. Every day is alive with promise. We just need to realise that promise. Well done again.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from RGstar
And the dew was found, and how beautiful a subject to write about.
A nice presentation, full of the wonder of nature, told in a personal manner as if the essence belonged only to those who can feel or see it.
Lovely write,
RGstar
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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And the dew was found, and how beautiful a subject to write about.
A nice presentation, full of the wonder of nature, told in a personal manner as if the essence belonged only to those who can feel or see it.
Lovely write,
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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RG, thank you so much :-) Brooke
