NaPoWriMo 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "The Diner"30 Days of Poetry
10 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your tercets form and learning a new vocabulary word with "genu". You made me hungry with all the food items, in the same way a recipe does! lol -Joan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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I enjoyed your tercets form and learning a new vocabulary word with "genu". You made me hungry with all the food items, in the same way a recipe does! lol -Joan
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Sorry... Well, have something good to eat. Thank you :)
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I had some pecans! Yum- Joan
Comment from Treischel
A good try, but you really stretched on this one. Some of the rhyming was pretty bad, some verses made no sense to me, and the meter is all over the place. Sorry, it just didn't do it for me.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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A good try, but you really stretched on this one. Some of the rhyming was pretty bad, some verses made no sense to me, and the meter is all over the place. Sorry, it just didn't do it for me.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I was attempting writing the 'recipe' all day. It was awful. The Diner was an I give up on NaPoWriMo for today. It's really just a scribble.
Thank you :)
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Ah, that explains it.
Comment from 9999pool
Go check out the diners and what do we find? Well, we can see life passing us by.
They came to eat or to dine but some unwilling followers just pass the time doing mundane things. The cook looks out the window hoping there will be some sales today for the home-made goodies.
A typical scene at the diners which we could find on the streets as well, perhaps.
Interesting write and entertaining to read, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Go check out the diners and what do we find? Well, we can see life passing us by.
They came to eat or to dine but some unwilling followers just pass the time doing mundane things. The cook looks out the window hoping there will be some sales today for the home-made goodies.
A typical scene at the diners which we could find on the streets as well, perhaps.
Interesting write and entertaining to read, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Have a good day :)
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Smiles. :))
H&K, Ritchie. ;))
Comment from NicciFaye
I like the scene you painted in this poem with the dinner and the people that make the diner lively. Nicely written for this continued writing endeavor and passion to write about any and everything. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I like the scene you painted in this poem with the dinner and the people that make the diner lively. Nicely written for this continued writing endeavor and passion to write about any and everything. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Have a good day :)
Comment from country ranch writer
Eating in the diner brings back memories of the old diners like they show in the old movies on wheels always busy on the weekends selling roo beers
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Eating in the diner brings back memories of the old diners like they show in the old movies on wheels always busy on the weekends selling roo beers
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I live by a few diners, but like Denny's best. Thank you.
Goodnite :)
Comment from krys123
Sunni, I enjoy the practicality where you've captured the essence and the time with the variety of happenings during a diner's feeding. The difference of everyone and their quirks fit very well for your poem. Your poem was very illuminative and stimulating shows your inventiveness and creativeness.
This is an excellent free verse poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting it. May the Lord be with you.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Sunni, I enjoy the practicality where you've captured the essence and the time with the variety of happenings during a diner's feeding. The difference of everyone and their quirks fit very well for your poem. Your poem was very illuminative and stimulating shows your inventiveness and creativeness.
This is an excellent free verse poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting it. May the Lord be with you.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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thank you
goodnite. peace :)
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You are so welcome Sunni
Comment from Irish Rain
I love this diner poem! All the different situations, described so accurately! Funny, just tonight, I remembered that used to be my dream when I was a kid...to work in a diner, ha ha! (I had simple wants)...Blessings tonight!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I love this diner poem! All the different situations, described so accurately! Funny, just tonight, I remembered that used to be my dream when I was a kid...to work in a diner, ha ha! (I had simple wants)...Blessings tonight!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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It was probably because of that 70's sitcom... Alice and Mel. They made it look good. So I wanted to be a Charlie's Angel; Jacqueline Smith and WonderWoman's Lynda Carter. Dreams...
Thank you :)
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I loved Jacqueline Smith! I think you're right! and Happy Days, ha ha!
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I forgot about Happy Days.... Remember, LoveBoat. Well, goodnite :)
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Loved this clip, ha ha! Good old Flo! And poor Vera...she was my favorite...so very dumb, ha ha!Thanks for the clip!!!!!
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Loveboat! I can't believe I'd sit there for an hour watching that! and Sonny and Cher...oh man, I am so old! ha ha...night!
Comment from Glasstruth
This has that nostalgic feel of days gone by. I know, been there, done that. Nice rhyming throughout. You paint a very vivid picture of that diner. Well done! Les
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This has that nostalgic feel of days gone by. I know, been there, done that. Nice rhyming throughout. You paint a very vivid picture of that diner. Well done! Les
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Goodnite. Peace :)
Comment from Atul Saxena
I never thought that a poem could be framed for such a normal situation and you proved me wrong. I'm happy to be wrong for the first time. This poem characterized your level headedness and your love towords poem. Keep it up...
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I never thought that a poem could be framed for such a normal situation and you proved me wrong. I'm happy to be wrong for the first time. This poem characterized your level headedness and your love towords poem. Keep it up...
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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You are very kind. Thank you.
Goodnite. Peace :)
Comment from Lysa Schuler
This is an interesting write. I found it strange in places, though. How can Cobb salad cheer? and at the end, what did you mean by, "Hold the cheese, and frown?" Other than that, this poem was well written. Good work, and God bless.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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This is an interesting write. I found it strange in places, though. How can Cobb salad cheer? and at the end, what did you mean by, "Hold the cheese, and frown?" Other than that, this poem was well written. Good work, and God bless.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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The actress did not order the waffles. She ordered cobb salad. Imagine... a college vegan placing his order. Emotional/facial response received.
Thank you
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Thank you for explaining, and sharing. God bless.
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God bless you too. Peace.
