Pride
Equating breeding, grace and status in life by labels.......43 total reviews
Comment from Prezze
Theme of the poem is great and makes a total connect with liberals.
However, I could not well relate to the last phrase 'signature pride fades'. Most probably it was tried to be comprehended as a person gets older, his/her pride which was once the part of their attitude goes away.
Well, it took a little more effort to understand just this bit.
Well tried though !
Thanks.
The painting is quite interesting and goes deeply with your idea.
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
Theme of the poem is great and makes a total connect with liberals.
However, I could not well relate to the last phrase 'signature pride fades'. Most probably it was tried to be comprehended as a person gets older, his/her pride which was once the part of their attitude goes away.
Well, it took a little more effort to understand just this bit.
Well tried though !
Thanks.
The painting is quite interesting and goes deeply with your idea.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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My friend signature refers to the signature brands and the pride we get from wearing them is shallow and never permanent. They fade with time but character never does.
Comment from Jean Lutz
I look for the "name brands" in second-hand stores. What is never second hand is the love in my heart that is renewed constantly by my Savior.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
I look for the "name brands" in second-hand stores. What is never second hand is the love in my heart that is renewed constantly by my Savior.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks and that's true, the love for our Savior is never second hand. God bless.
Comment from c_lucas
Most people wear the mask of false pride. Afraid to show their true selves. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
Most people wear the mask of false pride. Afraid to show their true selves. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Yes, I agree with false pride is what we get in signature brands. Thanks a lot for reading this poem.
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You're welcome.
Comment from kiwijenny
I buy all my stuff at the thrift store. Only criteria is if it looks good and fits . I don't have any pride in labels ...It's very freeing..I agree with your poem labels cannot delete age.
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
I buy all my stuff at the thrift store. Only criteria is if it looks good and fits . I don't have any pride in labels ...It's very freeing..I agree with your poem labels cannot delete age.
God bless
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks my friend for resonating with the message of the poem. god bless.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count and uses the brand names well to fit into the syllable count
strong social commentary
Last week on Celebrity Wife Swap Jermaine Jackson, one of the older brothers of Michael, was featured. Here is this older man hoarding clothes and jewelry and cologne, rooms filled entirely with nothing but clothes. It was rather pathetic to see him doing what your poem is about, trying to keep his pride by possessing ludicrous amounts of high-end "stuff." Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count and uses the brand names well to fit into the syllable count
strong social commentary
Last week on Celebrity Wife Swap Jermaine Jackson, one of the older brothers of Michael, was featured. Here is this older man hoarding clothes and jewelry and cologne, rooms filled entirely with nothing but clothes. It was rather pathetic to see him doing what your poem is about, trying to keep his pride by possessing ludicrous amounts of high-end "stuff." Brooke
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks a lot Brooke, I agree with you, it is pathetic how people can go to such insensible idea of maintaining pride by piling closets upon closets of expensive clothes and perfumes that he can't take anyway to heaven when he dies. Thanks you for enjoying my poem. god bless.
Comment from Willowsong
It's a sad truth you speak. I once thought it was only led by blind and shallow youth but even as an adult, I run into the same stigmata. Age has brought me wisdom though, and I know now that it's but a cover for the pain those people chain deep within their souls, a pain they never learned to express other than buy flashing that credit card of gold. Nice depiction by 5-7-5.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
It's a sad truth you speak. I once thought it was only led by blind and shallow youth but even as an adult, I run into the same stigmata. Age has brought me wisdom though, and I know now that it's but a cover for the pain those people chain deep within their souls, a pain they never learned to express other than buy flashing that credit card of gold. Nice depiction by 5-7-5.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thnaks again for a wonderful review of my work. Your interpretation is spot on. Thanks a lot.
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You're most welcome :-)
Comment from Zenith Regulus
I agree with what had been said in that poem. In school it happen too (luckily it's not the school that I'm in). The 'popular' group look down on the 'nerds'. Sadly, it happen among adults. I can never understand why a lot of people judge others by their appearance. In my opinion, what matters is the good in each person. Great job on the poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
-Zenith Regulus
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
I agree with what had been said in that poem. In school it happen too (luckily it's not the school that I'm in). The 'popular' group look down on the 'nerds'. Sadly, it happen among adults. I can never understand why a lot of people judge others by their appearance. In my opinion, what matters is the good in each person. Great job on the poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
-Zenith Regulus
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks, that's correct, the nerds are bullied by the popular group in schools and we, humans are guilty of judging people by the clothes they wear. Thanks for enjoying my poem, God bless.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Prada, Hermes Guess
labels cannot delete age
signature pride fades
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is spot on. Clear message that is short, simple and to the point. Good work.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
Prada, Hermes Guess
labels cannot delete age
signature pride fades
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is spot on. Clear message that is short, simple and to the point. Good work.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks again for the warm, five stars, God bless.
Comment from Domino 2
How right you are about how shallow people can be swayed by meaningless presentation.
I refuse to join in and only wear a black sack with cut-outs for my head, arms and legs. Mind you, I haven't impressed any more deep-thinking ladies so far. :-)
Nice one.
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
How right you are about how shallow people can be swayed by meaningless presentation.
I refuse to join in and only wear a black sack with cut-outs for my head, arms and legs. Mind you, I haven't impressed any more deep-thinking ladies so far. :-)
Nice one.
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks a lot Ted, that's a mouthful, you'll impress deep-thinking ladies, who knows, just pray, LOL. God bless, friend.
Comment from Jackarrie
Prada, Hermes, Guess
labels cannot delete age
signature pride fades
To judge people on the clothes they wear and the bags they buy with the labels,is superficial. We may hide behind these masks, but we cannot hide from ourselves.
well done. Mary
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
Prada, Hermes, Guess
labels cannot delete age
signature pride fades
To judge people on the clothes they wear and the bags they buy with the labels,is superficial. We may hide behind these masks, but we cannot hide from ourselves.
well done. Mary
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Yes, it is superficial and thanks a lot for resonating with the message of the poem and the five stars too.