From our soul.
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Comment from Seancuig
Hey,
I just found this. I was sorting through unread messages and realized I had overlooked it (Bad Fan....slaps his wrist...)
I'm glad I found it. I love the idea. I really wish I could set me free from me sometimes. I'm too damn restricting..:-)
Thanks for the great read.
Sean
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Hey,
I just found this. I was sorting through unread messages and realized I had overlooked it (Bad Fan....slaps his wrist...)
I'm glad I found it. I love the idea. I really wish I could set me free from me sometimes. I'm too damn restricting..:-)
Thanks for the great read.
Sean
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from Permelia
I think this is what bothers most of us, as we face old age- knowing the heart ache we will be leaving behind us. Some of our family is more fragile than others, and you wish you could protect them. Lovely poem, expressing how I feel.
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I think this is what bothers most of us, as we face old age- knowing the heart ache we will be leaving behind us. Some of our family is more fragile than others, and you wish you could protect them. Lovely poem, expressing how I feel.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from spazmasterr
What a great sense of peace. A topic I have been thinking more of in the past 8 months.
You deliver first utter truth...and supply a hope.
Probably a necessary step in making it through the idea.
Nicely done.
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What a great sense of peace. A topic I have been thinking more of in the past 8 months.
You deliver first utter truth...and supply a hope.
Probably a necessary step in making it through the idea.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from Diny
The clouds went well with the floating theme in this one... I would have liked for you toelaborate a bit longer on the torment of leaving...
Also free me from me... was a bit repetitive...
But I hope for the sake of poetry IT will be a long while before you have to worry about that!
Blessings Di
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The clouds went well with the floating theme in this one... I would have liked for you toelaborate a bit longer on the torment of leaving...
Also free me from me... was a bit repetitive...
But I hope for the sake of poetry IT will be a long while before you have to worry about that!
Blessings Di
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from Michael Firewalker
How this does speak to my soul, dear Pili---- I hear your heart so clearly----it is good to be able to detach, methinks----you describe that well here, "gently detaching, all distress leaves my consciousness''----I sense your deep, inner peace, hard won, and well deserved----it speaks of the uprightness, and the deeply ingrained honor of your being----you have spent your life pouring strength into weak places, you have lifted up those that were falling, you have comforted the weeping ones, and fed the hungry ones too----you have done all these things countless times, over many, many years, and done them unassumingly, asking for nothing in return----you have not thought of yourself, nor have you desired to increase yourself with riches, or with other forms of human power----therefore, you are seen to be what you truly are----you are rich, and increased with goods, and have need of nothing----for with your life, you have bought from God finest gold, gold tried in the fires of suffering and sacrifice, and you are therefore now clothed in His whitest raiment----your eyes have been anointed with His own eyesalve, for you have seen the truth, and done it, and are ready to enter into the rest that has been prepared for you, oh thou blessed daughter of the most high, the holy One of Israel.
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How this does speak to my soul, dear Pili---- I hear your heart so clearly----it is good to be able to detach, methinks----you describe that well here, "gently detaching, all distress leaves my consciousness''----I sense your deep, inner peace, hard won, and well deserved----it speaks of the uprightness, and the deeply ingrained honor of your being----you have spent your life pouring strength into weak places, you have lifted up those that were falling, you have comforted the weeping ones, and fed the hungry ones too----you have done all these things countless times, over many, many years, and done them unassumingly, asking for nothing in return----you have not thought of yourself, nor have you desired to increase yourself with riches, or with other forms of human power----therefore, you are seen to be what you truly are----you are rich, and increased with goods, and have need of nothing----for with your life, you have bought from God finest gold, gold tried in the fires of suffering and sacrifice, and you are therefore now clothed in His whitest raiment----your eyes have been anointed with His own eyesalve, for you have seen the truth, and done it, and are ready to enter into the rest that has been prepared for you, oh thou blessed daughter of the most high, the holy One of Israel.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from sengwriter
Pili how your realizations always brings forth ideas for newer & newer poems of your heart and always a unique one. So let me first add a feather to your cap of proficiency as a specialist of describing your mood.
For example, this time you uttered your words from a state, a sort of seclusion, a sort of self exile. But you did bother to help others till you leave. At this point you may be cautioned that you must always remember death can't be foreseen, so don't count any days for anyone, whether the person who adores or the adorable ones.
Now some small change as request or suggestion:
gently detaching
until slowly,
all distress
leaves
my consciousness.
[ remove that ',' from until slowly, then the meaning will be more effective and compact. ]
Another thing, "a floating nonchalance sets me free from me." How do you like it?
Another beautiful addition to your credential. Bravo.
chchb
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Pili how your realizations always brings forth ideas for newer & newer poems of your heart and always a unique one. So let me first add a feather to your cap of proficiency as a specialist of describing your mood.
For example, this time you uttered your words from a state, a sort of seclusion, a sort of self exile. But you did bother to help others till you leave. At this point you may be cautioned that you must always remember death can't be foreseen, so don't count any days for anyone, whether the person who adores or the adorable ones.
Now some small change as request or suggestion:
gently detaching
until slowly,
all distress
leaves
my consciousness.
[ remove that ',' from until slowly, then the meaning will be more effective and compact. ]
Another thing, "a floating nonchalance sets me free from me." How do you like it?
Another beautiful addition to your credential. Bravo.
chchb
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from AuroraSky
Beautiful poem Pili...but considering the floating experience...it allows you to be fully you...perhaps a change:
'sets me free
from me.'
'sets me free
from my
temple.'
One spot for you: 'adore.../adores...'
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Beautiful poem Pili...but considering the floating experience...it allows you to be fully you...perhaps a change:
'sets me free
from me.'
'sets me free
from my
temple.'
One spot for you: 'adore.../adores...'
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from Dyan J. Cocchi
Wow! This poem leaves me with so many different emotions. You have done an excellent job at carefully placing your thoughts to make such a smooth read. The picture completes the message with beautiful imagery.
This is great:
Disconnecting
from my
surroundings,
a floating
nothingness,
sets me free
from me.
Touches a nerve in me.
Dyan Hi Archie!
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Wow! This poem leaves me with so many different emotions. You have done an excellent job at carefully placing your thoughts to make such a smooth read. The picture completes the message with beautiful imagery.
This is great:
Disconnecting
from my
surroundings,
a floating
nothingness,
sets me free
from me.
Touches a nerve in me.
Dyan Hi Archie!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
very cool!
imaginative and creative
excellent flow and rhythm
great word choice
loved this part......
"Disconnecting
from my
surroundings,
a floating
nothingness,
sets me free
from me."
thanx for sharing :-)
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very cool!
imaginative and creative
excellent flow and rhythm
great word choice
loved this part......
"Disconnecting
from my
surroundings,
a floating
nothingness,
sets me free
from me."
thanx for sharing :-)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
Comment from ladywriter39
This is awesome....How many times have I thought about the effect of my possible death on those who love me.....It's almost too hard to even think about.....The line...sets me free from me.....How wonderful it would be if I could just be free from me.....Great Job...Rhonda
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This is awesome....How many times have I thought about the effect of my possible death on those who love me.....It's almost too hard to even think about.....The line...sets me free from me.....How wonderful it would be if I could just be free from me.....Great Job...Rhonda
Comment Written 16-Aug-2005
