If I Could Just...
Could we?47 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
A lovely poetic ponder. It bonds us with nature and is appreciative of it too. It drew me in.
I particularly like this verse, with its intricate in- line/end-line rhyme:
If I could be just like a gust
of soothing breeze so hushed with song.
I'd listen to the changing crust
as Earth and Ocean forge along.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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A lovely poetic ponder. It bonds us with nature and is appreciative of it too. It drew me in.
I particularly like this verse, with its intricate in- line/end-line rhyme:
If I could be just like a gust
of soothing breeze so hushed with song.
I'd listen to the changing crust
as Earth and Ocean forge along.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Tom. I am pleased you like it! :) sandra
Comment from Hadria
This is one for my bookcase. I love the whole idea, it is beautifully expressed, lovely rhythm and rhyme, the words flow along carry you with them. There is a wonderful sense of the structure of things, from molecules to winds to earth, ocean and trees all connecting with the rhyming of the Ancients. Thank you for a great poem. Hadria
PS Not forgetting the perfect picture- just right!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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This is one for my bookcase. I love the whole idea, it is beautifully expressed, lovely rhythm and rhyme, the words flow along carry you with them. There is a wonderful sense of the structure of things, from molecules to winds to earth, ocean and trees all connecting with the rhyming of the Ancients. Thank you for a great poem. Hadria
PS Not forgetting the perfect picture- just right!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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What a lovely review, Hadria, thank you so very much, and a big thank you for the shiny 6 stars! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from heyjude
Sandra, very well written poem for ABAB poetry
contest. Great job on the rhyming and I really
like the last verse. We should remember it is
God who blesses us and created all things for us
to enjoy.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Sandra, very well written poem for ABAB poetry
contest. Great job on the rhyming and I really
like the last verse. We should remember it is
God who blesses us and created all things for us
to enjoy.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Judy! I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Hope you are having a wonderful Easter! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from sibhus
Great thoughts that we all should stop and contemplate. Seems that the world today has lost sight of the fact that everything is provided by God, and we in our stupidity haven't a clue. Good poem.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Great thoughts that we all should stop and contemplate. Seems that the world today has lost sight of the fact that everything is provided by God, and we in our stupidity haven't a clue. Good poem.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, sibhus, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Sandra:)
If I could dream about the ends of the universe and see all God's wonders in an instant, I would still like poetry like this to tweak my imagination and make think about what is and what more could be. Great entry for the ABAB Poetry Contest.
I send my love and Irish Hugs for good luck.
Roger
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Hi Sandra:)
If I could dream about the ends of the universe and see all God's wonders in an instant, I would still like poetry like this to tweak my imagination and make think about what is and what more could be. Great entry for the ABAB Poetry Contest.
I send my love and Irish Hugs for good luck.
Roger
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Aw, thank you, Roger, you are always so nice, I really appreciate your love and wonderful Irish Hugs for good luck, I will win in one way, if not the competition! :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from w.j.debi
Beautiful and inspirational. Your verse makes one pause to think and then consider the possibilities, and all the blessings we take for granted. Excellent abab rhyme scheme. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Beautiful and inspirational. Your verse makes one pause to think and then consider the possibilities, and all the blessings we take for granted. Excellent abab rhyme scheme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and good luck wishes, you are very kind! :) Sandra
Comment from visionary1234
a pleasure to read something with flawless meter (finally!) Sandra! love the gentle wisdom that runs through this deceptively simple little write - you have a subtle and understated write here, which I REALLY appreciate!
big hugs,
Sharyn
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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a pleasure to read something with flawless meter (finally!) Sandra! love the gentle wisdom that runs through this deceptively simple little write - you have a subtle and understated write here, which I REALLY appreciate!
big hugs,
Sharyn
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Aww, Sharyn, you wonderful lady, thank you so much! :) Sandra.
Comment from ELumpkins
This is a very good poem. I like the idea if I could just. I am sure that the world would be bethat would make a lot of changes in the world. I wonder what I would see if I could just. ver think about that?
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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This is a very good poem. I like the idea if I could just. I am sure that the world would be bethat would make a lot of changes in the world. I wonder what I would see if I could just. ver think about that?
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I think it would be an eye opener for most people, goodness knows how I'd come out of it! Thank you so much for your wonderful review! :) Sandra
Comment from Selina Stambi
If everyone could see all things,
would we begin to understand
the gifts we share that Nature brings,
are handed down from God's own hand .. so true, Sandra.
Happy Easter, my lovely friend. God bless you and yours.
Jesus is risen - hallelujah!
xxx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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If everyone could see all things,
would we begin to understand
the gifts we share that Nature brings,
are handed down from God's own hand .. so true, Sandra.
Happy Easter, my lovely friend. God bless you and yours.
Jesus is risen - hallelujah!
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Dear Sonali, thank you so much for your lovely review. Happy Easter to you and your family! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from seaglass
The understanding described in this poem would solve many issues, especially hate and prejudice. I especially like the lines that refer yo seeing self as others do.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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The understanding described in this poem would solve many issues, especially hate and prejudice. I especially like the lines that refer yo seeing self as others do.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, seaglass. :) Sandra xsx
