Sand In My Eyes
For all our veterans.74 total reviews
Comment from Joyce Long
WOW! This says it all. We just watched a Veterans Day parade here in our small town. My husband wore his navy uniform. My grandson is a Major in the Army Reserve and he is deployed. We need to keep all these men and women in our prayers.
This poem is certainly worth reposting.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 11-11-15
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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WOW! This says it all. We just watched a Veterans Day parade here in our small town. My husband wore his navy uniform. My grandson is a Major in the Army Reserve and he is deployed. We need to keep all these men and women in our prayers.
This poem is certainly worth reposting.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 11-11-15
Comment Written 11-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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You can certainly relate to how military personnel feel. Veterans Day has a lot of meaning for your family. Thank you for reading and for your comments.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Excellent. So many truths in this poem. Thanks for sharing on this day. Very moving. I would recommend this poem to everyone, especially politicians.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Excellent. So many truths in this poem. Thanks for sharing on this day. Very moving. I would recommend this poem to everyone, especially politicians.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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The politicians wouldn't get it. Thank you for the great review and your kind comments.
Comment from LIJ Red
Contest winner, muchly reviewed and approved, excellent.
The nation doesn't want a soldier with a conscience, nor does it want soldiers without them. Sad.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
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Contest winner, muchly reviewed and approved, excellent.
The nation doesn't want a soldier with a conscience, nor does it want soldiers without them. Sad.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
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Red,
Thank you very much, I just posted for Veterans Day.
Ward
Comment from nancyjam
Congratulations on this win.
War puts our soldiers in a difficult situation both
physically and mentally and spiritually for some.
You express this doubt beautifully in your poem.
Strong rhyme and meter carry it along smoothly.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
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Congratulations on this win.
War puts our soldiers in a difficult situation both
physically and mentally and spiritually for some.
You express this doubt beautifully in your poem.
Strong rhyme and meter carry it along smoothly.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much for you kind review and feedback.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Ward - Very well written and interesting soldier's story. Mixed rhyme - couplets and abab. A worthy winner for the spiritual contest, congratulations! A good title - and I like your final stanza. Glad you said soldiers don't SHOW pain or fear, because I'm sure they feel it under the conditions they work under. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Hi Ward - Very well written and interesting soldier's story. Mixed rhyme - couplets and abab. A worthy winner for the spiritual contest, congratulations! A good title - and I like your final stanza. Glad you said soldiers don't SHOW pain or fear, because I'm sure they feel it under the conditions they work under. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate the feedback.
Ward
Comment from flamingstar
Damn, I wish I had a 6 for this one. What a message and great description of a soldier's turmoil for those of us who will never stand where you were and face what you've faced. The most I can ever do is pray for you and your brothers...with the utmost respect.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Damn, I wish I had a 6 for this one. What a message and great description of a soldier's turmoil for those of us who will never stand where you were and face what you've faced. The most I can ever do is pray for you and your brothers...with the utmost respect.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Flamingstar,
Thank you for your review and your comments.
Ward
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Flamingstar,
Thank you for your review and your comments.
Ward
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
If your a soldier and see tears in your eyes I'll just assume they thought of something so horrifying you wish you could forget. I haven't been in war but I have a past and sometimes just thinking about the things that were done makes me want to cry. I can't imagine being in war and seeing the things they see. Great job with this, not sure if this is about you or not but you wrote it so well I would think it was. Great, great job
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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If your a soldier and see tears in your eyes I'll just assume they thought of something so horrifying you wish you could forget. I haven't been in war but I have a past and sometimes just thinking about the things that were done makes me want to cry. I can't imagine being in war and seeing the things they see. Great job with this, not sure if this is about you or not but you wrote it so well I would think it was. Great, great job
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback.
Ward
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a beautiful piece of spiritual poetry and I can understand why it won the contest.
What's on my face may look like tears
But you know that's just a lie
Soldiers don't show pain or even fears
It's just the sand that's in my eyes
Wonderfully poignant.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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This is a beautiful piece of spiritual poetry and I can understand why it won the contest.
What's on my face may look like tears
But you know that's just a lie
Soldiers don't show pain or even fears
It's just the sand that's in my eyes
Wonderfully poignant.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Wendyanne,
Thank you for your review and your feed back.
Ward
Comment from Kingsland
Soldiers do their duty in the wake of being harmed. They are to be commended for their bravery. Maybe one day in the future we can look back and say. This is what happened when the world was in discord, but we have gone past that now. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Soldiers do their duty in the wake of being harmed. They are to be commended for their bravery. Maybe one day in the future we can look back and say. This is what happened when the world was in discord, but we have gone past that now. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Kingsland,
Thank you for your review and your feed back.
Ward
Comment from Dustybones
Great, you've won a contest. I like this line the best.Is that a bedouin beggar here. Had to look up the word Bedouin, now I see your thinking, and it's crafty.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Great, you've won a contest. I like this line the best.Is that a bedouin beggar here. Had to look up the word Bedouin, now I see your thinking, and it's crafty.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Dusty,
Thanks for the review. This is one of the pieces that I think could make a good song. At this time it's on the news everyday
and night.
Ward
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Seem that I never write the lyrics before I have a guitar, a few chords and a melody all at the same time. Somehow that how it works for me. I can reuse the same lyrics in another song though. I always do that when the music is old and in the way.
