Sand In My Eyes
For all our veterans.74 total reviews
Comment from Cmelton
I love the word choice as well as the simple rhyming scheme. I can see why you won the contest. I love your message and your choice of words. It was a very wonderful poem all the way through is why you deserved the six stars.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I love the word choice as well as the simple rhyming scheme. I can see why you won the contest. I love your message and your choice of words. It was a very wonderful poem all the way through is why you deserved the six stars.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your review. I appreciate the generous rating and your encouraging words about my writing.
Comment from nucleate
Excellent poem expressing the feelings of an American soldier in the midst of a very tough situation in the Middle East. I enjoyed this poem and its flow. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Excellent poem expressing the feelings of an American soldier in the midst of a very tough situation in the Middle East. I enjoyed this poem and its flow. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback. My war was in a jungle but I believe soldiers today may feel something similar to what we went through.
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Thank you for your service! Happy Memorial Day.
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Thank you.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The best of America is off fighting in a foreign land. It's past time that we bring them home. The countries of the Middle East have been fighting for thousands of years. Let them have it.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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The best of America is off fighting in a foreign land. It's past time that we bring them home. The countries of the Middle East have been fighting for thousands of years. Let them have it.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I agree. It seems impossible to have peace in the middle east. I don't know if it will ever happen. Thank you for reading and for your feedback.
Comment from Pantygynt
Every soldier serving in a foreign land has this stanza of your poem in the back of his mind:
"It's three a.m. here, yesterday back home
Is she still waiting or has her life moved on
Am I fighting for freedom or the freedom to fight
How many wrongs will make what we do right"
Two important issues in the one stanza. Trouble is whatever the truthful answers the soldier is not in control. He's in the grip of fate. The third line of the quote above is superb.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Every soldier serving in a foreign land has this stanza of your poem in the back of his mind:
"It's three a.m. here, yesterday back home
Is she still waiting or has her life moved on
Am I fighting for freedom or the freedom to fight
How many wrongs will make what we do right"
Two important issues in the one stanza. Trouble is whatever the truthful answers the soldier is not in control. He's in the grip of fate. The third line of the quote above is superb.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Thank you for your insightful review. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from zanya
OH how this poem touches the heart strings while inviting us to reflect on the nature and purpose of our human wars and battles - profound and insightful and with a superb photo
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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OH how this poem touches the heart strings while inviting us to reflect on the nature and purpose of our human wars and battles - profound and insightful and with a superb photo
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from LanceHill
Very nicely written. Congratulations on the win. These men and women go through so much for our freedoms. We need to let them know we are here. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Very nicely written. Congratulations on the win. These men and women go through so much for our freedoms. We need to let them know we are here. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Thank you for reading and for your review.
Comment from Irish Goat
Nice spiritual tribute piece to America's service members. Cites the Middle East campaigns and gives a poignant and emotionally evocative account of questioning ones mission and morality. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Nice spiritual tribute piece to America's service members. Cites the Middle East campaigns and gives a poignant and emotionally evocative account of questioning ones mission and morality. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Thank you for reading and for your comments.
Comment from MacMhuirich
A very well written and interesting poem. Nicely crafted piece of work, a lot of doubts in the soldiers tale. A worthy winner for the spiritual contest and a poignant read. Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
john
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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A very well written and interesting poem. Nicely crafted piece of work, a lot of doubts in the soldiers tale. A worthy winner for the spiritual contest and a poignant read. Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
john
Comment Written 12-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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Thank you for reading and for your comment. With all soldiers see it is probably inevitable that they would begin to wonder what it was all about.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
I can see why your poem won the contest and has awards, it is very well written with well chosen words that convey deep emotion of sadness and loss. Great honor for veterans of war. Good job!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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Hello :)
I can see why your poem won the contest and has awards, it is very well written with well chosen words that convey deep emotion of sadness and loss. Great honor for veterans of war. Good job!
Gypsy
Comment Written 11-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for reading my resurrected poem.I appreciate your encouraging review.
Comment from ericawrites
This is a beautiful poem, a worthy tribute to all
who serve their country.
I love the last two lines. The whole poem touched
me and the picture complements it perfectly.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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This is a beautiful poem, a worthy tribute to all
who serve their country.
I love the last two lines. The whole poem touched
me and the picture complements it perfectly.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm glad you liked it.
