Sand In My Eyes
For all our veterans.74 total reviews
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Congratulations on your win, very well deserved.
A wonderful spiritual read that flows effortlessly with some fantastic lines within.
Have a great day
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Congratulations on your win, very well deserved.
A wonderful spiritual read that flows effortlessly with some fantastic lines within.
Have a great day
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
It is no wonder you won the Spiritual contest. This is a GREAT poem. So well stated, so heart-felt. You wrote my sentiments exactly. Thank you for writing and sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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It is no wonder you won the Spiritual contest. This is a GREAT poem. So well stated, so heart-felt. You wrote my sentiments exactly. Thank you for writing and sharing this poem.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for reading my poem and for your very generous review. I'm glad you enjoyed my effort. I think many soldiers have questions and doubts about why they are in certain places and what they are doing there. For me, it was in a jungle, now it is in a desert but I think the sentiment would be similar.
Comment from rjuselius
this is such a well-deserved win dear delahay! the wording is near genius and the imagery tragic yet with a subtle hope in the air.
thank you so much for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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this is such a well-deserved win dear delahay! the wording is near genius and the imagery tragic yet with a subtle hope in the air.
thank you so much for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and for your very generous review. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from lyenochka
Well said. Thank you for this wonderful tribute for our military men and women. I'm sure they are wonderful about the true motives of their daily sacrifices so far from home.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Well said. Thank you for this wonderful tribute for our military men and women. I'm sure they are wonderful about the true motives of their daily sacrifices so far from home.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your review. I appreciate your feedback. I believe most servicemen and women posted to areas of conflict begin to contemplate the reason for why they are there.
Comment from Leena
A brilliant piece of work! No wonder you won the contest. Congratulations! This is a serious concern; how is war ever going to bring peace or set things right? How helpless is a warrior; to maintain all toughness when everything on the inside is shaking him up!
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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A brilliant piece of work! No wonder you won the contest. Congratulations! This is a serious concern; how is war ever going to bring peace or set things right? How helpless is a warrior; to maintain all toughness when everything on the inside is shaking him up!
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments,
DeLaHay
Comment from Rasmine
This is a good poem. I like the title and how it plays in with the end of the poem.
I hope to God, we don't have any more wars -- I know that it won't happen but I can wish.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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This is a good poem. I like the title and how it plays in with the end of the poem.
I hope to God, we don't have any more wars -- I know that it won't happen but I can wish.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments,
DeLaHay
Comment from Mark Valentine
This is a great homage to soldiers - it really seems to get inside their experience - particularly for those who serve in the Middle East. It has a real feel to it - not caricatured like so many poems about veterans My nephew served in Iraq and commented how disturbing it was that the locals were so afraid of him - your fifth stanza captures that feeling as well as the sense of the soldier always having a part of his mind back home.
Thanks for this one!
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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This is a great homage to soldiers - it really seems to get inside their experience - particularly for those who serve in the Middle East. It has a real feel to it - not caricatured like so many poems about veterans My nephew served in Iraq and commented how disturbing it was that the locals were so afraid of him - your fifth stanza captures that feeling as well as the sense of the soldier always having a part of his mind back home.
Thanks for this one!
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments,
DeLaHay
Comment from Kazzawin
Not surprised this was the contest winner.
What I like about it is the vulnerability.
Thoughts of the Holy Land and its history make for an awesome read as this soldier battles with his conscience and his own fears.
You have given us an insight into how it actually feels to be there. Your descriptions of the vehicles, the beggars ( who may be something else) and the pain of separation from home.
God bless all of those in service and well done on a remarkable poem : )
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Not surprised this was the contest winner.
What I like about it is the vulnerability.
Thoughts of the Holy Land and its history make for an awesome read as this soldier battles with his conscience and his own fears.
You have given us an insight into how it actually feels to be there. Your descriptions of the vehicles, the beggars ( who may be something else) and the pain of separation from home.
God bless all of those in service and well done on a remarkable poem : )
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments,
DeLaHay
Comment from Ricky1024
As the son of a Naval Vet and grandson of an Army Vet from the first war, this would bring a tear to the she's of who lost.
I lost a son in...
"The War of Life" but won the battle as he saved four with His organs.
A nobel sacrifice for this holiday.
Ricky1024.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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As the son of a Naval Vet and grandson of an Army Vet from the first war, this would bring a tear to the she's of who lost.
I lost a son in...
"The War of Life" but won the battle as he saved four with His organs.
A nobel sacrifice for this holiday.
Ricky1024.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments, It was very noble for him to give his body to his comrade.
DeLaHay
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks and views the duty and commitment of a soldier, a conscious of sin stands on duty like Jesus unlike anything of mighty Jesus, not to confess lies but play silent; I liked.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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This speaks and views the duty and commitment of a soldier, a conscious of sin stands on duty like Jesus unlike anything of mighty Jesus, not to confess lies but play silent; I liked.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments,
Delahay
