This Cold Beach
memories rekindled ... travelling in Tasmania89 total reviews
Comment from pattipac
Your word choice and descriptive phrases paint a beautiful picture of "dimpled afternoons" a little girl shared with her father.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Your word choice and descriptive phrases paint a beautiful picture of "dimpled afternoons" a little girl shared with her father.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you for your lovely reading and, of course, for your marvelous six patti! :)Sharyn
Comment from CollinSmith
Loved this! Although, I do wonder what you mean by "dimpled afternoons". Did you mean that you were smiling all the time and you have dimples? Or did your father have dimples? Anyways, this is beautiful!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Loved this! Although, I do wonder what you mean by "dimpled afternoons". Did you mean that you were smiling all the time and you have dimples? Or did your father have dimples? Anyways, this is beautiful!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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"Aloha" Colin - 'dimpled' is up to your own interpretation of course ... I think of it as almost equivalent to 'smiling' - father, daughter, beach goers ... and just the atmosphere generally ...
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Oh, that makes sense! Thanks for the reply!
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
how you doin? Hope you got things sorted and every one's traveling well... I guess you returned to Australia to visit your Mother... is she in Tasmania?
Still haven't been there yet... but one day!
Now on to this wonderfully visual poem... you definitely took me on the journey. I could see every word with clarity. This is one beautifully written set of reflection, it reminded me a bit of a paragraph out of a Tim Winton novel... and I do love the way he writes as well. Loved this journey to the beach, so rich with sight.
Bet your glad to be back in the warmth?
With our thoughts we create,
a visual memory,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Hi Sharyn,
how you doin? Hope you got things sorted and every one's traveling well... I guess you returned to Australia to visit your Mother... is she in Tasmania?
Still haven't been there yet... but one day!
Now on to this wonderfully visual poem... you definitely took me on the journey. I could see every word with clarity. This is one beautifully written set of reflection, it reminded me a bit of a paragraph out of a Tim Winton novel... and I do love the way he writes as well. Loved this journey to the beach, so rich with sight.
Bet your glad to be back in the warmth?
With our thoughts we create,
a visual memory,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Yes, she's in Tassie James - a lovely, but BLOODY COLD place a LOT of the time. I really avoid doing down there in winter if I can. Tim Winton, hmm? I'll have to search him out.
Unfortunately I was only in Oz a few weeks and just in Tassie ... next time round, I hope to be more relaxed and come knocking on your door!
:)Sharyn
Comment from DonandVicki
A fun poetic verse about the memories of youth. It is quite exciting to know that a warm heart and hand can warm the chill of a cold beach. Don
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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A fun poetic verse about the memories of youth. It is quite exciting to know that a warm heart and hand can warm the chill of a cold beach. Don
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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thx so much Don! :)Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Sharyn, welcome back, I hope everything is ok now? This is a lovely poem to grab our attention, letting us know you are home. Beautiful imagery for us to join in the trip to the sea. Cold? I don't do cold! LOL. Lovely one, Sharyn! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hi Sharyn, welcome back, I hope everything is ok now? This is a lovely poem to grab our attention, letting us know you are home. Beautiful imagery for us to join in the trip to the sea. Cold? I don't do cold! LOL. Lovely one, Sharyn! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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"Aloha" Sandra - my mother is physically much better, but not mentally - unfortunately. I have a strange feeling I'll be back in Tassie sooner rather than later. I don't do cold either! It was a difficult trip - lots of food for thought and writing ... all coming up ... when I have time. How about you? How are you doing back in cool England?
:)S
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Actually it is rather nice here at the moment, but, Easter is coming, so that means rain! LOL, I love it being back home. I am pleased your mother is feeling better, I know the strain of the 'mental' side. My late husband's mother is in a nursing home and I am visiting her twice a week, her memory of things many years passed is amazing, but what she had for dinner today has totally gone. I go along with whichever era she is in. Yesterday I came away 40 years younger! LOL, she thought my sons were still toddlers. I wish!!! It is not nice growing old, is it. Anyway, enough doom and gloom, at least your mother is physically better. Take care of yourself, mind, because if you overdo the worrying, you could fall ill, I know these things!! :) xsx
Comment from simplyteresa
The beach and mountains are two of my favorite places to write. This is a lovely reflective poem. I enjoyed the flow and sentiment very much.
Teresa
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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The beach and mountains are two of my favorite places to write. This is a lovely reflective poem. I enjoyed the flow and sentiment very much.
Teresa
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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thx so much Teresa! :)Sharyn
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great imagery in this. I loved "as butterfly boats glide". I didn't quite get "Saturday husbands" though but it was a beautiful poem.
Teresa
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Great imagery in this. I loved "as butterfly boats glide". I didn't quite get "Saturday husbands" though but it was a beautiful poem.
Teresa
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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meaning relaxed weekend husbands Teresa, the work week over ... :)S
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ah..ok, thanks:)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Welcome back, Sharyn, and I must say, you've returned with a BANG! rather than a whisper with this lovely poetic stroll along the beaches of your childhood.
My dad is my ultimate hero as well, and your vivid imagery and carefully chosen words here signify, in perfect poetic phonetics, just how important those bygone days were for you.
A lovely write, Sharyn, and welcome back...
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Welcome back, Sharyn, and I must say, you've returned with a BANG! rather than a whisper with this lovely poetic stroll along the beaches of your childhood.
My dad is my ultimate hero as well, and your vivid imagery and carefully chosen words here signify, in perfect poetic phonetics, just how important those bygone days were for you.
A lovely write, Sharyn, and welcome back...
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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thx so much Dean! :)S
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You're very welcome. I hope all is well with you & yours.
Comment from Pegcook
This poem is full and running over with tenderness. Love the innovative use of words "dimpled" afternoons; autumn's watered sunlight: "lollipopped houses" and many more. This reader suspects that the author likes the way words roll off the tongue sending "designer" images tumbling left and right!
The alliteration butterfly/boats silent/spinnakers/set adds to the charm of this work.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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This poem is full and running over with tenderness. Love the innovative use of words "dimpled" afternoons; autumn's watered sunlight: "lollipopped houses" and many more. This reader suspects that the author likes the way words roll off the tongue sending "designer" images tumbling left and right!
The alliteration butterfly/boats silent/spinnakers/set adds to the charm of this work.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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you've found out my secret Peg! Yes, I do love the way words roll off the tongue when they're the right words, don't you? So glad you enjoyed this one, and a huge 'mahalo' to you for your wonderful sixer!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Kingsland
Did you see any devils there? I liked the poetic verve you found to write in this verse. The lines reads smoothly and have a good poetic feel to them. Here's my favorite two lines in this poem...
lollipoped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands ...
I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic artistry... john
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Did you see any devils there? I liked the poetic verve you found to write in this verse. The lines reads smoothly and have a good poetic feel to them. Here's my favorite two lines in this poem...
lollipoped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands ...
I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic artistry... john
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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No devils this time John - only stuffed, in the museum! So glad you enjoyed this - thank you!
:)Sharyn
