This Cold Beach
memories rekindled ... travelling in Tasmania89 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
What lovely visions your poem throws up, Sharon. I was in Tasmania in 06 and 07... loved it, and have wonderful memories of the holiday. Did you originally live in Tasmania? Because it sounds like you have memories of your father on the beach. Loved it, Giddy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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What lovely visions your poem throws up, Sharon. I was in Tasmania in 06 and 07... loved it, and have wonderful memories of the holiday. Did you originally live in Tasmania? Because it sounds like you have memories of your father on the beach. Loved it, Giddy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Giddy! I'm actually a Queenslander by birth, but my parents moved to Tassie after I left home, so I'm very familiar with it (as is my warm blood!) But I can appreciate its beauty, even though I have to wear five layers!
:)Sharyn
Comment from akulkumol
Beautiful memories of child hood. How blessed you were to be with of your father on that beach,
I specially loved last stanza
I still feel his hand at rest upon my shoulder
ablaze with love enough to warm this whole, cold beach--
giving
one little girl
a forever world
of
dimpled
afternoons
reflecting deep affections.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Beautiful memories of child hood. How blessed you were to be with of your father on that beach,
I specially loved last stanza
I still feel his hand at rest upon my shoulder
ablaze with love enough to warm this whole, cold beach--
giving
one little girl
a forever world
of
dimpled
afternoons
reflecting deep affections.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much akulkumol! So glad you enjoyed my piece. :)Sharyn
Comment from Glasstruth
Free verse that is truly free. Beautiful descriptions of the ocean and your father standing there. Love the use of: "Saturday children & Saturday husbands" which represents a day off with such wonderful lines as:
"heading for home
as butterfly boats glide, silent, spinnakers set,
rainbow-bellied with the racing tide; skiffs skipping by
lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands ..."
Awesome!!!! Les
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Free verse that is truly free. Beautiful descriptions of the ocean and your father standing there. Love the use of: "Saturday children & Saturday husbands" which represents a day off with such wonderful lines as:
"heading for home
as butterfly boats glide, silent, spinnakers set,
rainbow-bellied with the racing tide; skiffs skipping by
lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands ..."
Awesome!!!! Les
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Well a sixer from you is always a pleasure (and an honor) Les, as I love and appreciate your work so much. Thank you so much my dear!
Big hugs
Sharyn
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You welcome :)
Comment from madhatter1977
An excellent poem about the beach - I like the lollipop house image! It seems to paint a timeless picture too, although beach holidays have been around only for a few hundred years in the UK so I learned and were initially medicinal. I really like this! Best wishes, Pete :)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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An excellent poem about the beach - I like the lollipop house image! It seems to paint a timeless picture too, although beach holidays have been around only for a few hundred years in the UK so I learned and were initially medicinal. I really like this! Best wishes, Pete :)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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thx so much Pete! Beach holidays are pretty cold in the UK! :)S
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi V...
~ What a lovely recall of your father and special times now past... Very touching at the end,and the pix has a nostalgic feel to it...
~ Easy to see why it was recognized...
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Hi V...
~ What a lovely recall of your father and special times now past... Very touching at the end,and the pix has a nostalgic feel to it...
~ Easy to see why it was recognized...
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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thx so much Jax! :)Sharyn
Comment from Karen B.
What beautiful memories of times spent with your dad. I especially love "I still feel his hand at rest upon my shoulder ablaze with love enough to warm this whole, cold beach". So much comes thru about your relationship in these few words. How blessed you were! Wonderful poem! thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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What beautiful memories of times spent with your dad. I especially love "I still feel his hand at rest upon my shoulder ablaze with love enough to warm this whole, cold beach". So much comes thru about your relationship in these few words. How blessed you were! Wonderful poem! thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you Karen - thank you so much!
:)Sharyn
Comment from kiwijenny
This is adorable ....it reminded me of dancing on my fathers shoes and how he made the whole world warm like your daddy did...
Love is an amazing thing...it makes a cold beach a sunny day
God bless
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is adorable ....it reminded me of dancing on my fathers shoes and how he made the whole world warm like your daddy did...
Love is an amazing thing...it makes a cold beach a sunny day
God bless
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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and bless you back Jen - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from chasennov
This Cold Beach.' You speak of a country I guess was once known to you, reminiscing about the good old days gone by. I didn't know it was already that cold down under. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This Cold Beach.' You speak of a country I guess was once known to you, reminiscing about the good old days gone by. I didn't know it was already that cold down under. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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thx so much chas! :)S
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It was my pleasure, Sharyn. Sorry for the delay, I did not see this one.
Comment from Zue65
I did enjoy your fond memories of your father on that beach he used to frequent, now full of lovers and children playing on the beach, with young mothers holding hands with Saturday husbands, the boats going back to the cozy lollipoped houses. Yes, you recalled that day your father loved to watch this cold beach with his arms over your shoulder, enough to warm the dimpled afternoons of once a little girl. An excellent write indeed.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I did enjoy your fond memories of your father on that beach he used to frequent, now full of lovers and children playing on the beach, with young mothers holding hands with Saturday husbands, the boats going back to the cozy lollipoped houses. Yes, you recalled that day your father loved to watch this cold beach with his arms over your shoulder, enough to warm the dimpled afternoons of once a little girl. An excellent write indeed.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you nassus! :)Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
Welcome back! That time when your father's hand gave you dimpled afternoons to warm the cold beach certainly have not left you as you still see with the eyes of a child, this poem literally visions of sugarplums dancing in my head. Lollipop houses licking sugared miles, butterfly boats...and let's not forget the sound of enchantment. The lines beginning with soft ripples are stippled...exquisite. Always stay near water because it is your home. A six if I had not cast all mine to sea days ago.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Welcome back! That time when your father's hand gave you dimpled afternoons to warm the cold beach certainly have not left you as you still see with the eyes of a child, this poem literally visions of sugarplums dancing in my head. Lollipop houses licking sugared miles, butterfly boats...and let's not forget the sound of enchantment. The lines beginning with soft ripples are stippled...exquisite. Always stay near water because it is your home. A six if I had not cast all mine to sea days ago.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Why thank you Ed! I've never lived far from the water - I guess it shows! :)S
