This Cold Beach
memories rekindled ... travelling in Tasmania89 total reviews
Comment from James Dooney
Gosh yes you are so right about tassie ! Its cold down there huh ? You from Oz ? I am from adelaide, south australia myself ! I like your little work here !
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Gosh yes you are so right about tassie ! Its cold down there huh ? You from Oz ? I am from adelaide, south australia myself ! I like your little work here !
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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bloody FREEZING James! I'm actually from Queensland (warm blood) - but my parents moved to Tassie after I left home (thank goodness - I think the cold would have driven me crazy). Lovely to meet another Aussie on the site - I've not visited Adelaide! I'll look forward to reading your work.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'The Cold Beach' is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. My father did the very same thing. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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'The Cold Beach' is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. My father did the very same thing. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely sixer on this one, your Grace! :)Sharynh
Sharynh, you certainly deserved the six star review!
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Quite the world traverler aren't we. Didn't see that little devil running around, did you? Beautiful use of imagery and the father-daughter moment make this a truly skillfully composed poem, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Quite the world traverler aren't we. Didn't see that little devil running around, did you? Beautiful use of imagery and the father-daughter moment make this a truly skillfully composed poem, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you Debbie - haven't been back for a couple of years, but I actually feel like it's visiting a foreign country these days as I've been in the States for 27 years. Driving on the LEFT is now a challenge (to me AND the local population!)
:)Sharyn
Comment from tfawcus
How I love your poetry! "to watch the dark lady
in rose and golden sari stride along the tide-line" made me shiver with delight, as did your "butterfly boats... rainbow bellied", "lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands" and "dimpled afternoons". Such fresh images and yet so absolutely apt! Just marvellous, Sharyn - just marvellous!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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How I love your poetry! "to watch the dark lady
in rose and golden sari stride along the tide-line" made me shiver with delight, as did your "butterfly boats... rainbow bellied", "lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands" and "dimpled afternoons". Such fresh images and yet so absolutely apt! Just marvellous, Sharyn - just marvellous!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you Ray - I'm honored by a six from such an able poet as yourself and doubly delighted that I get to sit this one in your book case my dear.
:)Sharyn
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Sharyn, welcome home. This poem is so full of wonderful images:
Soft ripples are stippled with Saturday children,
butterfly boats
lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands
I could go on. Point is, you've taken me to this magical place. And I thank you for the visit. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Sharyn, welcome home. This poem is so full of wonderful images:
Soft ripples are stippled with Saturday children,
butterfly boats
lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands
I could go on. Point is, you've taken me to this magical place. And I thank you for the visit. :) Nancy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Nancy - I'm delighted to bring you to my magical place!
:)S
Comment from cory4
Dear visionary1234,
I loved the way you have written your poem. You are a brilliant poet. It is extremely descriptive and because of this very deep and meaningful as well. The way you described the beach was vivid and creative. I could not find any faults with your poem. Congratulations and well done!
Kind Regards,
Cory4
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Dear visionary1234,
I loved the way you have written your poem. You are a brilliant poet. It is extremely descriptive and because of this very deep and meaningful as well. The way you described the beach was vivid and creative. I could not find any faults with your poem. Congratulations and well done!
Kind Regards,
Cory4
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thx so much Cory4! :)Sharyn
Comment from jmdg1954
How my father loved to stand and watch them here!
I still feel his hand at rest upon my shoulder
ablaze with love enough to warm this whole, cold beach--
giving
one little girl
a forever world
of
dimpled
afternoons
This is a lovely poem written from childhood memories that last forever. I love walking on the beach. Just wish I had more time to do that. The part I inserted above warmed my heart as I could feel my little princess at the moment I gave her away in marriage on a beach in the Bahamas. It was lovely. A feeling I will never forget... John
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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How my father loved to stand and watch them here!
I still feel his hand at rest upon my shoulder
ablaze with love enough to warm this whole, cold beach--
giving
one little girl
a forever world
of
dimpled
afternoons
This is a lovely poem written from childhood memories that last forever. I love walking on the beach. Just wish I had more time to do that. The part I inserted above warmed my heart as I could feel my little princess at the moment I gave her away in marriage on a beach in the Bahamas. It was lovely. A feeling I will never forget... John
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you John - yes, our children always remain our children, don't they? I feel the same about my son. Glad I could warm the cockles of your heart today my dear.
:)Sharyn
Comment from omerta16
Great work here with the vivid imagery and feeling that you translated so easily. The presentation was done just right and I loved how the poem trickled down into a candid ending. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Great work here with the vivid imagery and feeling that you translated so easily. The presentation was done just right and I loved how the poem trickled down into a candid ending. Nice job.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Ekim777
Our poet is not shy to lay it on with a trowel. She creates images with an inimitable style all her own. I like her personification of a sunset/sunrise, in the first verse. (I hope I got it right) Even the adjectives have an originality about them and introduce something of the character both of object and personage. Our poet seems well practiced in her art. I saw reviewing this as a challenge. (Again, I hope I am doing it justice.)Ekim777
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Our poet is not shy to lay it on with a trowel. She creates images with an inimitable style all her own. I like her personification of a sunset/sunrise, in the first verse. (I hope I got it right) Even the adjectives have an originality about them and introduce something of the character both of object and personage. Our poet seems well practiced in her art. I saw reviewing this as a challenge. (Again, I hope I am doing it justice.)Ekim777
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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"Aloha" Ekim - and "mahalo" for your lovely review and your special sixer and no, I'm not shy about laying it on with a trowel sometimes and I'm delighted that you're not afraid to say so! :)Sharyn
ps: and yes, more than justice!
Comment from Janelle
lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands ...
Lovely picture perfect lines that I read again and again!
This is such a beautiful poem; it made me smile, it induced me to read it a few times and left me feeling sunshiney.
giving
one little girl
a forever world
of
dimpled
afternoons
and these words, placed carefully, lovingly like sea spray falling on the page, envoking loving memories of a special bond between a child and their father.
We have just moved to the seaside and I walk along or near the beach most days; often see these little vignettes being played out. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, it is really beautiful. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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lollipopped houses licking sugared miles
and curves of cream-with-coffee sands ...
Lovely picture perfect lines that I read again and again!
This is such a beautiful poem; it made me smile, it induced me to read it a few times and left me feeling sunshiney.
giving
one little girl
a forever world
of
dimpled
afternoons
and these words, placed carefully, lovingly like sea spray falling on the page, envoking loving memories of a special bond between a child and their father.
We have just moved to the seaside and I walk along or near the beach most days; often see these little vignettes being played out. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, it is really beautiful. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Bless you, Janelle, for your lovely, sympathetic reading. I've always loved beaches - they're different every day, aren't they? Which beach do you live near? Thank you so much for the honor of your special six! :)Sharyn
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It's a place called Warrnambool, on the south west coast of Victoria, Australia (faces Antartica!)and is in a rural area as well, so I have the best of both worlds! :)
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sure I know where you are - I probably flew over the top of you on my way back from Hobart!
:)S
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I thought you may be from Oz; the 'lollipopped houses' reference sounded like the beach boxes along the bay. How was Hobart? We're thinking of taking a look soon (haven't been there for 40 years!
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Actually I LOVED Hobart - I used to loathe it as I'm a warm weather person. But Hobart is quite charming and quite cosmopolitan and is especially lovely as EVERYONE is pretty well centered on the water of the estruary, so it's a nice 'boatie' kind of culture (not that I'm a 'boatie' - but I've always chosen to live by the water). Watch for those damned one way streets though! (Mind you, I was extra challenged after having driven in the U.S. for the last 27 years!)Well worth considering, though!
:)S
