What the Ducks Can Teach Us
quatrains in 8/7/8/7165 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Perfect poem Brooke,
telling us if we live with anxiety we will not feel the delight of as you say -
to be buoyant - which makes us happy.
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Perfect poem Brooke,
telling us if we live with anxiety we will not feel the delight of as you say -
to be buoyant - which makes us happy.
Gert
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Gert, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with teach/reach. Good alliteration with lead/lives...when/worry's...be/buoyant...hesitation/holds...with/worries...can/contentedly...with/what. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with teach/reach. Good alliteration with lead/lives...when/worry's...be/buoyant...hesitation/holds...with/worries...can/contentedly...with/what. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from amada
This is wonderful, I never thought about this, the humble duck teaching us a lesson; " They trust the pond will hold them up,
its purpose to be buoyant --" Oh yes, Brooke!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This is wonderful, I never thought about this, the humble duck teaching us a lesson; " They trust the pond will hold them up,
its purpose to be buoyant --" Oh yes, Brooke!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Such a beautiful poem Brooke.
If mankind only trusted life in the same way ....
Instead, at best we act as if we give the pond its buoyancy, at worst ... a few try to own the whole pond.
You have such a light touch with the heavy truths of life.
LOVE IT.
Hugs, your devoted fan,d
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Such a beautiful poem Brooke.
If mankind only trusted life in the same way ....
Instead, at best we act as if we give the pond its buoyancy, at worst ... a few try to own the whole pond.
You have such a light touch with the heavy truths of life.
LOVE IT.
Hugs, your devoted fan,d
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Munkysam
This is lovely :D I've been going back and forth with this, letting anxiety get the best of me. It's great seeing these reminders around, thank you for sharing it. The flow was great, the rhyme was great. Even the photo was great. Very nice work.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This is lovely :D I've been going back and forth with this, letting anxiety get the best of me. It's great seeing these reminders around, thank you for sharing it. The flow was great, the rhyme was great. Even the photo was great. Very nice work.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Munkysam, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gungalo
Anxiety can rule our days
with worries it has brought us,
or we can live contentedly
with what the ducks have taught us.
A wonderful write for those who have worries Brooke. The rhyming is great and the flow excellent.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Anxiety can rule our days
with worries it has brought us,
or we can live contentedly
with what the ducks have taught us.
A wonderful write for those who have worries Brooke. The rhyming is great and the flow excellent.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Gungalo, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Smiling Brooke.
Comment from royowen
There is an enormous wisdom woven into this poem written as an ode to the peace loving life of the duck! This is written in excellent, expressive language, has a variable rhyme scheme that works, the meter is nice and even! Well done, Brooke, blessings,, Roy.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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There is an enormous wisdom woven into this poem written as an ode to the peace loving life of the duck! This is written in excellent, expressive language, has a variable rhyme scheme that works, the meter is nice and even! Well done, Brooke, blessings,, Roy.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Such a lovely poem - and a wonderful picture
of Sawyer.
I noticed the Quatrians are 8/7/8/7, Brooke
are they also acceptable with 8 to each line or have
I got it wrong?
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Such a lovely poem - and a wonderful picture
of Sawyer.
I noticed the Quatrians are 8/7/8/7, Brooke
are they also acceptable with 8 to each line or have
I got it wrong?
Margaret
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Margaret, you can write poetry in 8/8/8/8 or in 8/6/8/6 or in 8/7/8/7 or in any other combination you like that sounds good :-)
8/6/8/6 is commonly called ballad form because so many ballads are written that way and 8/7/8/7 is often called hymn form for obvious reasons LOL On the other hand, many poems are written in iambic tetrameter, like Wordsworth's I Wandered Lonely... I love poetry for its range of choices. Thank you so much for your review :-) Brooke
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Thanks Brooke.
Comment from healfromwithin
Good pace, movement, storytelling and rhyme.
I liked the picture and the poem.
Well done.
Good luck on your writing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Good pace, movement, storytelling and rhyme.
I liked the picture and the poem.
Well done.
Good luck on your writing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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healfromwithin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
I really like this poem and how you see ducks as being a metaphor for faith in living our lives. This brings back a memory when a family of ducks was crossing the road and there were twenty or more cars waiting for them to cross the road. No one got excited or anxious. It was just a very cute sight watching those duck hold up traffic. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I really like this poem and how you see ducks as being a metaphor for faith in living our lives. This brings back a memory when a family of ducks was crossing the road and there were twenty or more cars waiting for them to cross the road. No one got excited or anxious. It was just a very cute sight watching those duck hold up traffic. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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John, thank you so much :-) I'm so glad you could connect with this :-) Brooke
