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A Whole New Identity

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Comment from emrpoems
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Certainly a well written piece that held my attention right through.
Good use of dialogue
good story plan that develops and moves at a steady pace.Lots of intsrigue

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
    Thank you so much for the fine comments and review. Sorry it took so much time to reply. I really appreciate your input.

    Gayle
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I know I have missed a few posts. I will try to catch them, but I am so far behind, I have not clue even where to begin, but I still enjoyed reading this post.

And Papa.No one knows for sure who shot Ari, at least, not that I've heard or read." (space issue after the period)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
    Hi Barb, it's crazy when that happens. But fear not, when this one is published, I'll send you a copy! I know where you live, lol. Don't you just love FS? I've made so many great friends here and had so much fun!

    Thanks again,
    Hugs,
    Gayle
reply by barbara.wilkey on 19-Apr-2014
    I agree. I love all my friends I've met on FS. They are like family and I worry about them when aren't right with them. I am close to finished with my next novel. I will edit it over the summer and hopefully you will get it ready for publishing for me. I am going to try to promote Two Tattered Hearts. I have some ideas, just don't have any time. Do you think instead of daylights savings time, we could just add a few more hours to the day?
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
    I'm all for that, Barb. How about 6 hours! Good grief!
reply by barbara.wilkey on 26-Apr-2014
    sounds good to me
Comment from rwilliam
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Man I love your twist and turns. You're such a good writer and I truly get excited to read more of your story.
You keep me on my toes, that's for sure!!

Keep up the good work!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
    What wonderful comments, and thank you so much. Y'know, when I'm in a rut or the characters won't play nice, I go back and read the reviews and when I get to one like yours, I'm so encouraged! Thank you so much, Becca,

    Big hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from Writingfundimension
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I'm glad most of the truth is out and that Zak has been recognized. It makes the 'call' easier to make, and the two detectives know about his very particular skills. What an exciting post, Gayle. Well Done!

Hugs, Bev

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
    I was hoping you'd approve of this one. Some of the fans think I did it too easily, but my stories are never 'who done its' we all know who's done what, it's just a matter of who gets who in the end.

    Thanks so much for the support, my dear,

    Hugs,
    Gayle
reply by Writingfundimension on 18-Apr-2014
    You're welcome, Gayle. This is a terrific novel! :0)
Comment from Sylvia Page
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Jim and Lenny are quite smart to recognize Brad. That eases their task in solving the problem. That's an extra hand in the team. Good story build up.
Cheers
Sylvia

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
    Now you're all caught up! Thank you so much for the great comments, Sylvia, and the continued support. Means a lot!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from TervLass
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Great opening line!

Kudos for the creeping suppositions of Brad's familiarity in the dialogue between Jim and Lenny. Thoughtful and hesitant, until the "reveal" is accomplished as a by-product to their chatter. Nicely done!

And the chapter wrap up progresses the story just as you want to see it roll along. Another enjoyable read. I enjoyed, too, how you wove a few of the PI's escapades with Zack/Brad into the story - certainly provides a rational for the PI's comfort and willingness to partner up. The money helps, of course, but their working relationship is now known to be one of talent at risky moments.

Next, please :-)
Helen (TervLass)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
    Hey Helen, I'm so glad you liked that one. I wanted them to just 'fall' into it, so I let them go, kinds of even get sidetracked, and then one of those words that would jar their memories.

    I feel like I've finally hit my stride, lol. This was a hard labor, lol. I had to get them somewhere where they'd continue to work with Brad if and when they find out Julia shot Ari. Former cases worked in pretty good.

    I wish you could see the grin on my face when I get your reviews. Always pearls in there.

    Hugs and big thanks,
    Gayle
Comment from Ted T
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Hi Gayle :)

Got a "Sixer" for ya. Well deserved, there's a bunch of good facts in his one. The 'Cop-Shop' stuff feels right, I do know a thing or two in that department.

You have a good balance between description, dialogue and action.

This style is suited to the way you work. It takes a bit of experience to pull off effectively.

Good go.

Ted

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
    Ah, Ted, you sound so much better, my friend. So glad to hear it and a big hug for that gorgeous sixer. I got mine back, too, so weird, sixers.

    Thanks so much for the support, much appreciated,

    Hugs,
    Gayle
reply by Ted T on 17-Apr-2014
    You're welcome :)

    Yeah, it helped to get my Oxy a day earlier than expected.

    Thanks to the DEA, I now have to take two and a half a day instead of just two.

    Ted
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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I liked the drama building up at the same time relationships between Brad and the others are softening and it just feels as if the whole scene is being set up thoroughly before the action hits. Still waiting for action from Rex, LOL Giddy

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
    That's just about how it happens with the team finally in place. These other guys are all new characters to me and they're running amok. I think I've got them corralled now, lol. Thanks for the comments and stars,

    Hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from Ritsal
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If that photo is Zach, surgery was a raging success. Lucky Julia--lol. So, the plot continues to thicken. Good chapter.

Best wishes,
Rita

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
    Hey yes, I thought they looked good together. Leaf back through my chapters and you'll see a photo of Julia. Mmmm.

    Thanks for the stars, Twinnie,
    Gayle
reply by Ritsal on 17-Apr-2014
    I saw the blue veil one.
Comment from shelley kaye
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lenny and jim will figure out julia is the one who killed him. they're too smart not to figure it out lol

great chapter! didn't notice any spaggies or typos - can't wait to see what happens next! thanx for sharing :)



 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
    You bet they will! Like Ella, lol. Now that I've finally got the team out,we can move along. Thanks for the great review,

    Gayle