Comment from healfromwithin

Good

Cute idea. I had some suggestions:

to drip(,) drip(,) drip
(same with clack and snip)
Wowwie... the (I don't know about "Wowwie;" maybe, "Hey, Dude, or something more current.)

To think about:
In rap, one line flows smoothly from one to the next, often in rhyme, both at the closing word and within each line.

Good luck on your writing.

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 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

"Hey dude!" works in really cute. I like that too. kitchen 'rock' is a whole other poem. Thank you.

Happy Easter :)

Comment from Petriesan

Excellent

when I am cooking, I love the sounds and scents and feel of the kitchen. When I am doing the dishes, not so much. Emptying the dishwasher --- enough reason to go to the restaurant.

your piece made me think and smile

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Thank you
Happy Easter :)

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Sunni,
"Kitchen Rap" meets the requirements of the writing prompt by being terza rima with aba...rhyme scheme. Good luck in the contest.
Preston

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you
Have a good afternoon :)

Comment from Terrie DeGolier

Excellent

I never thought of it before but your right there are so many different sounds in a kitchen. You could actually form an orchestra if you chose too. I enjoyed reading your poem and can picture myself singing as I prepare a meal. :) Terrie

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you
Have a good afternoon :)

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

Love the sounds in this poem, it reminds me of a kitchen filled with busy children. Nicely written with good flow and excellent rhyming.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you
Have a good afternoon :)

Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

Thanks for the serenade and encouragement to play our own rap in the kitchen! I enjoyed your use of sound effects and your rhyme scheme. Here's to more spoon playing! Hugs- Joan

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you
Have a great afternoon :)

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

haha, this is a lovely entry! i could imagine it would go down with children:) nice one.
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

I'm not married with children yet. The idea came from a new coffeehouse by my home, CityDrip. Thank you. :)

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Kitchen rap...now there's a new one! Loved this original piece of lightness...love the noise that it makes!!! Well done, blessings to you tonight!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you
Have a great night :)

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

RAP A TAP TAP TIME FOR A SNACK SO FIT ME IN I AM COMING OVER TO HEAR YOU PLAY HEHE THE SONG GOES ON AND ON FROM MORNING TO NIGHT

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Got that right... You're funny. Thank you :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A well written poem in your series of poems. A lot of people seem to be writing series of poems, much like chapters in a book! It's a very likeable poem, amusingly entertaining and non angst in content! Well done, blessings,Roy.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

National Poetry Writing Month is a yearly event. It's open to everyone around the globe. Here's a link to the website; http://www.napowrimo.net/

Thank you. Peace be with you :)

reply by royowen on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks Alicia, but I've missed a couple of days! Thanks, anyway! Bless you!