Comment from donaldww

Excellent

This poem uses mono-rhymes, internal rhymes, and assonance to make a point about vanity.

The person in the poem has gotten dimpled dots, the picture has a picture of two women superimposed on it.

Cheers, DW

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks a lot DW for affirming the message of this poem. God bless.

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

I enjoy this piece and the message behind it. I've always been of the opinion that natural is better, that's just my style. I think the image you used really conveys the sense of the piece overall, it's definitely on point and hits home with the reader. Great work, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks my friend for considering this poem a great work and thanks too, for the five stars.

Comment from annp

Excellent

this is a great verse
just eight words that convey so much about the perils of vanity
the picture is brilliant almost a story in itself
very enjoyable
regards
annp

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks annp for considering this a great and very enjoyable verse. I do appreciate it. God bless.

Comment from Armagin

Excellent

Yes. It's amazing the lengths people will go, to try and look young. You captured it well in this 4-7-3. Nice alliteration with the b's and d's and good rhyme with the last word of each line.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Yes, people will do everything for that elusive fountain of youth. Thanks for affirming the message of this poem.

Comment from JeffreyVPerry

Excellent

Wow! How riveting your message. They would just say that there is always a price to pay for everything. Maybe that is why Free-Dom does not cost us a dime. Freedom is a choice of the mind. It is the vanity that we all have to pay for. We need to learn to count our blessings so we know what we first have because looking for what we don't.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks a lot JeffreyVPerry for the insightful review of this poem and thanks too for the generous stars. God bless.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I for one kinda like the walking dead look.

Seriously, though, a well-written 3-liner, with the alusion to Beverly Hills not lost.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks Jay Squires for considering this a well-written 3-liner. Thanks too, for the generous stars. God bless.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

LOL... And the sad thing is, some people do not fair so well from these procedures they have done... Thx, but no thx, I'll stay with what the good Lord gave me... At least I know who I'm looking at in the mirror..!

Good one...
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks for confirming the message of this poem. Thanks too, for the five stars, God bless.

Comment from Terrie DeGolier

Excellent

Wow you sure startle your readers but you message is powerful and to the point. Why people can't accept who they are and not use all that crap including makeup they would have such inner peace trying not to please everyone but themselves. Beauty is within that simple. Great picture, brilliant words, sadly but true.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks a lot for confirming the message of the poem, thanks too, for the generous stars. I am planning however to change the picture with a more tempered one. I am still searching though. Thanks again for stopping by.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

vanity shots
Beverly's hot botox clots
dimpled dots

Soooooooooooo true. LOL what a way to describe it. The artificial way is not always the best way.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Yes, my friend, thanks for affirming my message toooooooo. Natural is always better, I believe so. God bless.

reply by Gungalo on 15-Apr-2014

Smile.

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

Very good I liked all the rhyming and the alliteration with dimpled dots,
I thought the message came across really strong,I loved the picture it was perfect for this piece,
Andrew

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks a lot Andrew for affirming the message of this poem. I don't really like the shock value of the poem, but I can't find a more tempered alternative to drive my point. But i will definitely click on edit mode, once I find a suitable picture. God bless.