The Cost of Liberty
Inspired by the Passover Eve killing spree in Kansas23 total reviews
Comment from Chap Man
Yes. Black, black as the hinges of Hell. What other could you have it printed on? Got to wonder if the Gov was listening in his/their conservations? Don't agree with your third line from the end, but it is your poem. Are we just scraping up the ones the kids shoot up, too? As a poem it follows along and expresses our strong feelings. Thanks for being there.
Chap Man
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Yes. Black, black as the hinges of Hell. What other could you have it printed on? Got to wonder if the Gov was listening in his/their conservations? Don't agree with your third line from the end, but it is your poem. Are we just scraping up the ones the kids shoot up, too? As a poem it follows along and expresses our strong feelings. Thanks for being there.
Chap Man
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Chap Man, for your review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Shirley B
This is a beautiful poem. The rhyming lines help move the message in a more sweeping emotional way. The grandfather that was killed graduated from the city in which I live now, Ponca City, Ok. The city is very sad. His grandson also died. His funeral was this afternoon in Kansas. It was made all the sadder because the hateful Westboro Baptist Church was supposed to be there to protest. Thank you for this beautiful poem, Shirley
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is a beautiful poem. The rhyming lines help move the message in a more sweeping emotional way. The grandfather that was killed graduated from the city in which I live now, Ponca City, Ok. The city is very sad. His grandson also died. His funeral was this afternoon in Kansas. It was made all the sadder because the hateful Westboro Baptist Church was supposed to be there to protest. Thank you for this beautiful poem, Shirley
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Hello Shirley B, Thank you for your wonderful and for sharing your thoughts and update concerning this tragic event. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
I like the proximate rhyme in thrive/cry and in meet/meek
good internal rhyme in states/hate
good alliteration in killing continues
and watch and wait
it's nothing - add apostrophe for contraction of it is
I've ask - I've asked
strong social criticism voiced with conviction
strong closing question that draws the reader in
Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets
I like the proximate rhyme in thrive/cry and in meet/meek
good internal rhyme in states/hate
good alliteration in killing continues
and watch and wait
it's nothing - add apostrophe for contraction of it is
I've ask - I've asked
strong social criticism voiced with conviction
strong closing question that draws the reader in
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello adewpearl, thank you for your wonderful review. Brooke, your skills and expertise stand out above the rest. Thank you for your review and for letting me see a few boo-boos that I overlooked in my haste. You are a true leader, and I am most appreciative. LateBloomer
Comment from lancellot
What happened is indeed a tragedy but what you are saying is downright scary as well, and just as much of a tragedy. Freedom, and liberty are lost when people give into fear, just as well as hate. If you strip one group of their liberty or lives because of what they feel or think, then who is the next to fall. Yes, I understand your anger, and I share it. But we must not allow our anger to cloud our reason. It is in that state that truly horrific acts are committed as well.
People can not be free to make good choices, unless they are equally free to make bad ones. I have read some of the reviews and they scare me. If you outlaw the KKK or lock them all up because of what they believe (misguided as it may be) who will be next, NAACP, LA Raza, NOW, LGBT who will be the ones who decide what is hate? And who do you have the right to hate?
We can not and should not honor those who have died by creating a repressive society and destroying Liberty in their names.
Oh, Our Government states that hate is a crime.
This part is not true. Hate is not a crime, that is not what hate crime enhancements mean.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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What happened is indeed a tragedy but what you are saying is downright scary as well, and just as much of a tragedy. Freedom, and liberty are lost when people give into fear, just as well as hate. If you strip one group of their liberty or lives because of what they feel or think, then who is the next to fall. Yes, I understand your anger, and I share it. But we must not allow our anger to cloud our reason. It is in that state that truly horrific acts are committed as well.
People can not be free to make good choices, unless they are equally free to make bad ones. I have read some of the reviews and they scare me. If you outlaw the KKK or lock them all up because of what they believe (misguided as it may be) who will be next, NAACP, LA Raza, NOW, LGBT who will be the ones who decide what is hate? And who do you have the right to hate?
We can not and should not honor those who have died by creating a repressive society and destroying Liberty in their names.
Oh, Our Government states that hate is a crime.
This part is not true. Hate is not a crime, that is not what hate crime enhancements mean.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello lancellot, I do hear you, and basically agree, but in my humble opinion, groups that meet and are known to plan killings or harm others should be stopped--not just the kkk, but terrorists, etc. As far as hate being a crime, I did take poetic license on that and, perhaps, I should have clarified it in my authors notes, i.e. crimes of hate are illegal. lancellot, the killing sprees are growing and something needs to be done. Luckily, we live in America and can write about this and have different thinking. I really thought that I would have received more reviews disagreeing vs. agree with my thoughts. I don't know what the answer is, but something has got to give--too many innocent people are being killed. Thank you for your candid review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Muffins
I shake and mourn as I read these powerful gut wrenching words. You have given the fallen an majestic tribute. These now souls of heaven were too good to remain here and that is how it has to be seen and taken to heart. Thank you for sharing your soul with us.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I shake and mourn as I read these powerful gut wrenching words. You have given the fallen an majestic tribute. These now souls of heaven were too good to remain here and that is how it has to be seen and taken to heart. Thank you for sharing your soul with us.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Muffins, Thank you for the heartfelt review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It is always the innocent that die in these senseless killings. No one wins. Why do people put up with this way of life that seems to be the norm in some countries. This is such a well written poem, with an important message to think on. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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It is always the innocent that die in these senseless killings. No one wins. Why do people put up with this way of life that seems to be the norm in some countries. This is such a well written poem, with an important message to think on. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello sandramitchell, Our Nation calls this way of life, "Freedom," and such groups are permitted to assemble under the First Amendment (freedom of speech) of our Nation's Constitution ... although hate has been deemed a crime. I've enclosed a link describing this Amendment. Thank you for your review and for sharing your thoughts. LateBloomer
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/First_Amendment_to_the_United_States_Constitution
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Thank you, I will look it up. :)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I agree, the organisation needs to have all its members go to jail because they are all guilty. Hate is such a destructive emotion and we need more organisations to promote love, especially at Easter when Jesus died to save us from our sins. God bless you, Giddy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I agree, the organisation needs to have all its members go to jail because they are all guilty. Hate is such a destructive emotion and we need more organisations to promote love, especially at Easter when Jesus died to save us from our sins. God bless you, Giddy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Giddy Nielsen-Sweep, I like your thinking ... all members go to jail ~ excellent thinking! Perhaps, you should be our next President. Thank you for your wonderful review and for sharing your thoughts. I only wish that those golden stars could revive those killed and return them to their families. LateBloomer
Comment from jgirlie152
You have written the truth about our country, our congress and the wars which just keep coming, killing not only overseas but guns and hate in this country going hand in hand. There is no excuse, except greed, for our country being in this position.
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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You have written the truth about our country, our congress and the wars which just keep coming, killing not only overseas but guns and hate in this country going hand in hand. There is no excuse, except greed, for our country being in this position.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello jgirlie12, Yes, the wars which keep on coming, and the mess-up-minds (not their fault) that keep returning from these wars with deep emotional scars that are embedded within them. This horrific aftermath becomes embedded into their families and society for generations to come. And let us not forget greed (and egos,) the root of many evils. jg152, Thank you for your review and for sharing your thoughts. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from royowen
A brilliantly written poem about the endemic hatred and unreasoning violence that ensues. But it is always the same story, that we live in a free country and they are entitled to their "opinion". The trouble with that argument is that their freedom becomes our enslavement! Written with great descriptive language, aabbcc rhyme scheme that is good, nice even meter! Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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A brilliantly written poem about the endemic hatred and unreasoning violence that ensues. But it is always the same story, that we live in a free country and they are entitled to their "opinion". The trouble with that argument is that their freedom becomes our enslavement! Written with great descriptive language, aabbcc rhyme scheme that is good, nice even meter! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello royowen, Thank you for your review and for sharing your thoughts, especially "their freedom becomes our enslavement!" I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
Comment from l.raven
Hi LateBloomer, you see more and more of this everyday...what I don't understand is why we can't stop gangs like this...we have an army...go into these gangs strong holds and break them up...it's like we have no way to stop them...and we do....it truly is sad...your poem is very well written with a great rhythm and rhyme....perrrrrrfect picture...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hi LateBloomer, you see more and more of this everyday...what I don't understand is why we can't stop gangs like this...we have an army...go into these gangs strong holds and break them up...it's like we have no way to stop them...and we do....it truly is sad...your poem is very well written with a great rhythm and rhyme....perrrrrrfect picture...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello man l.raven, the "why" is mind-blowing. We have puty man on the moon but can mange our own backyard. Perhaps, there is job security within the chaos. Thank you for your review. I truly appreciate the time spent. LateBloomer
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you are so welcome...xxoo
