Thursday's Child - Part 2
The Hatchet28 total reviews
Comment from damettagin
A wonderful continuance, well versed, rhymed and metered.
'That mark of red she came to dread
As surely as the pain'
Silent sorrow, poor little thing, so strong.
:) Dame
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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A wonderful continuance, well versed, rhymed and metered.
'That mark of red she came to dread
As surely as the pain'
Silent sorrow, poor little thing, so strong.
:) Dame
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you Dame for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from RGstar
I was fearing the worse. How happy I was in interpenetrating that of a brave child rather that the inevitable.
I guess the courage of the Thursday's child still lingers on today.
Good to read.
Have a great day,
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I was fearing the worse. How happy I was in interpenetrating that of a brave child rather that the inevitable.
I guess the courage of the Thursday's child still lingers on today.
Good to read.
Have a great day,
RGstar
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you RGstar for your thoughtful and encouraging review. This Thursday's child still has a long way to go.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Joan E.
I haven't thought about "rag-curls" in decades--my mother used to weave strips of old sheets into my hair. I admired your telling this story in rhymed quatrains and your poignant final stanza. It sounds like a sad but true tale. -Joan
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I haven't thought about "rag-curls" in decades--my mother used to weave strips of old sheets into my hair. I admired your telling this story in rhymed quatrains and your poignant final stanza. It sounds like a sad but true tale. -Joan
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Joan for your thoughtful and encouraging review. That's what my grandma and my mother did too -- weave strips of old sheet into my hair.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from grannyfrannie
Whew . . .started out charming but soon the mood changed and I dreaded a sad ending. Thankfully you put an explanation in the author's notes. Good job on the rhyme scheme and meter.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Whew . . .started out charming but soon the mood changed and I dreaded a sad ending. Thankfully you put an explanation in the author's notes. Good job on the rhyme scheme and meter.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Kingsland
This was a well written piece of poetic art with good emotions in its thoughts and phrases. It flowed and read easily. This was a well written piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This was a well written piece of poetic art with good emotions in its thoughts and phrases. It flowed and read easily. This was a well written piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you John for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Lovely poem about Thursday's child and the accident - but she made no fuss. As you say it was probably the handle of the hatchet that hit her otherwise the poem would have been very different. Well told in good abcb rhyme form an a good read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Lovely poem about Thursday's child and the accident - but she made no fuss. As you say it was probably the handle of the hatchet that hit her otherwise the poem would have been very different. Well told in good abcb rhyme form an a good read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Dorothy for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Zue65
Little children are too afraid to even sound out the pain. it speaks of hidden fear for a child to just hide the pain and cry in silence. It could be a previous experience or a trauma when children are denied the freedom to talk about themselves or speak their minds. The agony of the child is written on her face as the picture suggests. Excellent write.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Little children are too afraid to even sound out the pain. it speaks of hidden fear for a child to just hide the pain and cry in silence. It could be a previous experience or a trauma when children are denied the freedom to talk about themselves or speak their minds. The agony of the child is written on her face as the picture suggests. Excellent write.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from healfromwithin
The poem read well in pace in meter. I didn't get the pillow stain/came to dread part (maybe this is explained in part I)
The picture is beautiful. I didn't have any major SPAGS to nit-pick.
Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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The poem read well in pace in meter. I didn't get the pillow stain/came to dread part (maybe this is explained in part I)
The picture is beautiful. I didn't have any major SPAGS to nit-pick.
Good job.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Selina Stambi
I'm glad I caught the continuation of this poem.
I like the nursery rhyme, chant-like rhythm.
Enjoyed!
Janet .. right? :)
Love,
xxx
Sonali
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I'm glad I caught the continuation of this poem.
I like the nursery rhyme, chant-like rhythm.
Enjoyed!
Janet .. right? :)
Love,
xxx
Sonali
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Sonali for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in hatchet hit her head
good internal rhyme in red/dread
you convey so well her determination not to cause any trouble as she hides her wound
Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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solid use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in hatchet hit her head
good internal rhyme in red/dread
you convey so well her determination not to cause any trouble as she hides her wound
Brooke
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
