~ 'ANYWAY,' - I'LL CARRY ON ~
A silly carry on.26 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Why do I feel as though I was talking to myself as I read this...this...whatever this is? We'll say story, just for safety's sake, and leave it at that, lol.
Seriously, I enjoyed the dark wit and dry humor in this. A lot like Monty Python's Flying Circus, only in story form, rather than skits. Also, a bit sardonic way to respond to some other overly dramatic contest entry postings who seem to take themselves far too seriously, I should think.
I thought it was a great...oh hell, whatever it was!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Why do I feel as though I was talking to myself as I read this...this...whatever this is? We'll say story, just for safety's sake, and leave it at that, lol.
Seriously, I enjoyed the dark wit and dry humor in this. A lot like Monty Python's Flying Circus, only in story form, rather than skits. Also, a bit sardonic way to respond to some other overly dramatic contest entry postings who seem to take themselves far too seriously, I should think.
I thought it was a great...oh hell, whatever it was!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you Dean, it is a failing of mine, that I like to take the P**s. Yes some comps. are much too serious.
Don't know if it was just me, but I found the rules strange and illogical. So I wrote strange and illogical. Or maybe they flew right over my head. (or the cuckoo's nest) lol.
I do like your classic clip from M.P.F.C. they were always a favorite of mine. Appreciated...
:) ***.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Louise Michelle
I must say this is quite different. I suppose it's a bit of a story in a story because you are confiding in the reader how you are developing your piece. However, you have indeed written a story and I liked the ending. Lou
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I must say this is quite different. I suppose it's a bit of a story in a story because you are confiding in the reader how you are developing your piece. However, you have indeed written a story and I liked the ending. Lou
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you Lou, for your kind review.
Yes, I think a writing of this type requires a bit of depth to make it work.
:) ***.
Comment from adewpearl
a man called Anton, heard -drop the comma
woven loosely, around - drop the comma
I love the introduction of the multi-tasking fairy godmother LOL
Good dialogue
fun silliness :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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a man called Anton, heard -drop the comma
woven loosely, around - drop the comma
I love the introduction of the multi-tasking fairy godmother LOL
Good dialogue
fun silliness :-) Brooke
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke, your help is appreciated.
:) ***.
Comment from The Death
Hi, mystery writer.
It is a silly, funny write about something the prompt requires. I enjoyed your carefree, satirical take on this.
The opening is very interesting and makes one chuckle.
Notes:
A man didn't call.-- I should have written 'named' instead. Anyway, I'll carry on.
Drop period before(--).
"That's funny! I had a birthday last year,-- but-- was that one also funny?" he thought and questioned himself at the same time.
Drop comma before (--).
"Yes(,) you did, and don't even think of leaving home.
"Oh my goodness(,) you've got me doing the same."
As he grabbed--yes(,)you guessed. You know what happened(,) don't you?
If you are providing space on one side of dash, then you should have it on the other side, too.
The part time Fairy Godmother wanted to wave her wand again, but couldn't think of a reason to do so.
So(,) she looked glumly into her coffee cup and wondered how her glumly looked.
Somehow(,) I've got to follow the rules of this insane competition. lol.
Anyway(,) he opened his birthday cards successfully and without incident. He had no incidents(,) only cards for his birthday.
The plot is silly, of course! LOL
The dialogues are entertaining. Nothing to comment upon the absurd plot. ;)
Best of luck!
Warm regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Hi, mystery writer.
It is a silly, funny write about something the prompt requires. I enjoyed your carefree, satirical take on this.
The opening is very interesting and makes one chuckle.
Notes:
A man didn't call.-- I should have written 'named' instead. Anyway, I'll carry on.
Drop period before(--).
"That's funny! I had a birthday last year,-- but-- was that one also funny?" he thought and questioned himself at the same time.
Drop comma before (--).
"Yes(,) you did, and don't even think of leaving home.
"Oh my goodness(,) you've got me doing the same."
As he grabbed--yes(,)you guessed. You know what happened(,) don't you?
If you are providing space on one side of dash, then you should have it on the other side, too.
The part time Fairy Godmother wanted to wave her wand again, but couldn't think of a reason to do so.
So(,) she looked glumly into her coffee cup and wondered how her glumly looked.
Somehow(,) I've got to follow the rules of this insane competition. lol.
Anyway(,) he opened his birthday cards successfully and without incident. He had no incidents(,) only cards for his birthday.
The plot is silly, of course! LOL
The dialogues are entertaining. Nothing to comment upon the absurd plot. ;)
Best of luck!
Warm regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you Anupam, for your kind and helpful review. I want you to know that it is always appreciated.
I have made all the corrections you suggest.
This is of course just a fun write and I don't expect it to do anything.
Thank you for your kind wishes. :) mel.
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You aren't supposed to write your name while replying in these blind prompts. ;)
I think I have reviewed one of your work, too.
Enjoy the day!
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I'm afraid I do it automatically some times. I always sign with my real initials. This is not the name I write under. So there's no harm done...
Can't say if you reviewed me before because that's on the secret list. lol.
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Comment from Nosha17
This is hilarious, very tongue in cheek; I would imagine this to be written by a person with British humour! Great wit and use of interrupted conversations, must be hard to write. Good use of language in the narrative and it flowed along at a fast pace. Most enjoyable, good luck in the contest. I spotted an error, at the end it should be 'lose'-hope you didn't mind me pointing it out. Faye
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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This is hilarious, very tongue in cheek; I would imagine this to be written by a person with British humour! Great wit and use of interrupted conversations, must be hard to write. Good use of language in the narrative and it flowed along at a fast pace. Most enjoyable, good luck in the contest. I spotted an error, at the end it should be 'lose'-hope you didn't mind me pointing it out. Faye
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you Faye, you are right, I must admit to being a British person, but I write somewhere in the mid Atlantic. Best place for me some may say...lol.
You are the first to see it in it's raw state, just as it was dug out of the ground. So to speak. (laugh)
I could be worried about how easy I found this to write. Took no time at all,-- anyway (I'll carry on) Hah! Hah!
I never mind any help given. And it's always appreciated, be assured of that. The correction has been made.
It is a relief that I don't have to erase my work, and seek the sanctuary of anonymity and denial. LOL.
In other words I'm so pleased you enjoyed my writing. Many thanks for your good wishes.
Best regards. :) mel.
Comment from Ola Awakan
I am pleased by your innovative writing, you write, read and correct yourself in your piece. I think it is a development and your style is kind of cool. I am inspired!
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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I am pleased by your innovative writing, you write, read and correct yourself in your piece. I think it is a development and your style is kind of cool. I am inspired!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you Ola Awakan, I'm so pleased you like it.
:) mel.
