A Heart so Cold
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Comment from Treischel
An excellent poem about a love and wedding proposal so cruelly dashed as to destroy him. Very well written in an aabb rhyme scheme, 4 quatrains with closing couplets in iambic pentameter. Written with compelling emotion. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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An excellent poem about a love and wedding proposal so cruelly dashed as to destroy him. Very well written in an aabb rhyme scheme, 4 quatrains with closing couplets in iambic pentameter. Written with compelling emotion. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you so very much, Tom! What a wonderful review. I am so pleased you liked this one. :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from Just2Write
This is a nice story in a poem. I liked your meter, and your use of mono-rhymed stanzas.
Some people are oh so cruel in romance. I hope she gets her just reward.
Rose.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This is a nice story in a poem. I liked your meter, and your use of mono-rhymed stanzas.
Some people are oh so cruel in romance. I hope she gets her just reward.
Rose.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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They usually do, or sail through life without a hitch. Thank you so much for your lovely review, Rose! :) Sandra
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah-h-h-hhhhhhhh, yes. Karma is a b!tch, is it not? All those old tried and true cliches work here; what goes around, comes around is another one that comes immediately to mind here.
A wonderfully rhymed, well metered piece that says, quite succinctly, revenge is best served cold-hearted!
Nicely done, Sandra...
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Ah-h-h-hhhhhhhh, yes. Karma is a b!tch, is it not? All those old tried and true cliches work here; what goes around, comes around is another one that comes immediately to mind here.
A wonderfully rhymed, well metered piece that says, quite succinctly, revenge is best served cold-hearted!
Nicely done, Sandra...
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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LOL, love this review, 'best served cold-hearted!' Very good, Dean. Thank you for this lovely review, so glad you enjoyed it. :) Sandra
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Ha ha, you're very welcome, Sandra.
Comment from Cogitator
Understanding that having sex is not "making love," is one lesson I learned early in my life. This poem is definitely worth five stars, but I see nothing wrong in the behavior...John
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Understanding that having sex is not "making love," is one lesson I learned early in my life. This poem is definitely worth five stars, but I see nothing wrong in the behavior...John
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I think 'making love' is just a by-product of being in love. To love someone is to love the whole, warts and all. Making love might be enjoyable, but it is not the B-all to love. To hurt someone is never acceptable, in any circumstance, you can turn someone down without being cruel. Thank you for your kind review, John. :) Sandra
Comment from Eternal Muse
You bring out well how the cold and cruel remarks of one can cripple the other, especially if that other is in love. Many have been there. And to have that done to you in front of others hurts twice as much. Excellent rhymes, flow and cadence. Great visuals. Yes, she might have her her karma and reap what she sowed one day.
You laughed at him when he came to your side
And asked you, on one knee, to be his bride
In front of everyone you stole his pride
And in that moment something in him died
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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You bring out well how the cold and cruel remarks of one can cripple the other, especially if that other is in love. Many have been there. And to have that done to you in front of others hurts twice as much. Excellent rhymes, flow and cadence. Great visuals. Yes, she might have her her karma and reap what she sowed one day.
You laughed at him when he came to your side
And asked you, on one knee, to be his bride
In front of everyone you stole his pride
And in that moment something in him died
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Yeltel, for this really nice review. I am so pleased you enjoyed it! :) Sandra
Comment from DonandVicki
A nicely composed sonnet about a cold and unfeeling heart. This must have taken you some time to compose with so much feeling. Don
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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A nicely composed sonnet about a cold and unfeeling heart. This must have taken you some time to compose with so much feeling. Don
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Don, for your lovely review. I am really pleased you enjoyed it. Sandra xsx
Comment from Dakota-TimeLady
I loved the rhyme scheme that you showed in this poem. I would reccomend this site to people just so that they could read your poem! This really shows your emotions, and you speak through this poem. Great writing! Keep writing, I would love to read more of your writing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I loved the rhyme scheme that you showed in this poem. I would reccomend this site to people just so that they could read your poem! This really shows your emotions, and you speak through this poem. Great writing! Keep writing, I would love to read more of your writing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hi Dakota-TimeLady, thank you so very much for your lovely review. I had a look at your profile as I hadn't seen your lovely name on here before, and see you are new to this site. It is nice to meet you! Welcome to the site and I hope you enjoy it on here. You will meet some very interesting people and learn loads. I hope to read one of your works soon. :) Thank you again for your wonderful review. :) xsx Sandra
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are clear and thought provoking. The poem is creative and descriptive. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are clear and thought provoking. The poem is creative and descriptive. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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thank you so very much, Harmony13, for your lovely review! :) Sandra
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Sandra...
~ I think we all have ran across a person who stomps on another's love for them, and it is so sad to see love being abused...
~ Your words ring so true, and the last line brings it all home...
Well done...
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hi Sandra...
~ I think we all have ran across a person who stomps on another's love for them, and it is so sad to see love being abused...
~ Your words ring so true, and the last line brings it all home...
Well done...
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hi Jax, Thank you for your lovely review, I am really pleased you liked it. :) Sandra
Comment from donaldww
This poem narrates an incident where a woman rejects a man's marriage proposal 'in front of everyone' such that his pride was 'stolen' and 'something in him died.'
He was 'just a bit of fun.'
The poet warns of a day when she may have the same thing happen to her, and will look back upon her own actions ruefully.
Cheers, DW
Nice picture of a swimmer doing a crawl stroke. That's what I do four days a week. LOL
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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This poem narrates an incident where a woman rejects a man's marriage proposal 'in front of everyone' such that his pride was 'stolen' and 'something in him died.'
He was 'just a bit of fun.'
The poet warns of a day when she may have the same thing happen to her, and will look back upon her own actions ruefully.
Cheers, DW
Nice picture of a swimmer doing a crawl stroke. That's what I do four days a week. LOL
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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You must be such a healthy fit young man, Donald!! Keep it up! :) Thanks for the lovely review. :) Sandra xsx
