Comment from J. Grubbs

Excellent

I thought this poem was well written and thought out. I also thought to be good advice for anyone. Most of us are afraid to see or acknowledge the truth. It takes a strong person to not only seek it out, but to accept it as well. Thank you for sharing this piece with me.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2005

Comment from Thomas Raine

Excellent

This is a great example of free verse used wisely by a poet who writes each following line with feeling. The lines flow into each other nicely.

- TR

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

oooh this is good
kinda sounds like a mantra or chant you would do doing meditation lol
excellent flow and rhythm all the way through
perfect word choice
definently one of your best!!
great job


fav parts.............
"Remove
the clouds
from my path
to awareness,
Let my soul
arrive
to shores
of calmness,"


thanx for sharing :-)

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2005

Comment from Lisloh

Excellent

I receive this one!

This is getting printed, memorized and used as my new affirmation.

to distinguish
without a doubt
all that is false
and the wisdom
to never
reject
the
truth

Oh yeah, I call that freedom.
This is an awesome write! No techy problems here.
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2005

Comment from proffburd

Excellent

This is a beautiful piece of work. Eloquent use of descriptive words and style. Nice flow and the photo you have with the work is also beautiful.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

Oh, what a realization of life. Truth or Falsehood are just deeply mixed in our life, in such an intricate way...we really need some special eyes to detect the true or the false.

Pure and clear vision are the things, two very important points emphasised by you are very useful part of your poem. We need to walk along a path which will head us towards the wisdom and for that journey it's not that easy as you wrote... Remove
the clouds from my path to awareness, ...."

Let this meditation come in everybodies life and the truth which is really there but overcast with shadows of falsehood and fakes and needed to be rediscovered again to make our earth a beautiful abode.

Great message conveyed through your poem and I liked it and accepted it too.

Gautam

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2005

Comment from Jayje

Excellent

interesting. i've come to enjoy your style of poetry. this tells of a heart yearning for personal and spiritual freedom. and i really like your coice in artwork! this is wonderfula all the way around.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2005

Comment from Sandisan

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem. It speaks to the mind and soul with it's descriptive words. There is not a thing that I would change about it....it's perfect the way it is.....just beautiful.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2005

Comment from brightside1099

Excellent

WOW, what a beautiful thought. Your imagery is wonderful. Certainly a condition each of us can dream of. Wonderful work! ? BB

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

this is a very well written piece of poetry
you have some good wisdom in this piece
there is nothing to suggest
as this poem stands on its own quite well... John

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2005