From our soul.
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Comment from Olufade Sola
Anyone who reads this Poet's works might naturally have a feeling that the poem is too clear, 'easy', perhaps to mean easily decipherable. It is a deep and delectable poem.
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Anyone who reads this Poet's works might naturally have a feeling that the poem is too clear, 'easy', perhaps to mean easily decipherable. It is a deep and delectable poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from Zenbud
A fine plea to meditation - I found it peaceful and graceful in presentation. Your words have a way to bring me to the valley of peace. Sigh, Zen
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A fine plea to meditation - I found it peaceful and graceful in presentation. Your words have a way to bring me to the valley of peace. Sigh, Zen
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from bfonf
Muy bien, Pili. A mi me gusta este poema. Hah! I know a bit of Spanish. Did I say it right? Summer has been too long, I haven't taken a Spanish class in 3 months. Awesome poem.
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Muy bien, Pili. A mi me gusta este poema. Hah! I know a bit of Spanish. Did I say it right? Summer has been too long, I haven't taken a Spanish class in 3 months. Awesome poem.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from Seabreeze
Let my soul
arrive
to shores
of calmness,
The alliteration of the "s" sound here really softened this section, which fit the subject matter perfectly. This reads almost like a prayer - a prayer for clarity and lucidity, to better oneself.
Thanks for sharing.
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Let my soul
arrive
to shores
of calmness,
The alliteration of the "s" sound here really softened this section, which fit the subject matter perfectly. This reads almost like a prayer - a prayer for clarity and lucidity, to better oneself.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from Wendyanne
This poem has a very prayer-like quality to it Pili. I could imagine people reciting it out loud in church or quietly to themselves. "The wisdom to never reject truth." How wise.
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This poem has a very prayer-like quality to it Pili. I could imagine people reciting it out loud in church or quietly to themselves. "The wisdom to never reject truth." How wise.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from Elven Hope
That's brilliant, I like the way the single words on the line make them stand out more, great job. I like the lines 'Let my soul, arrive, to shores, of calmness.' Very good, keep on writing.
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That's brilliant, I like the way the single words on the line make them stand out more, great job. I like the lines 'Let my soul, arrive, to shores, of calmness.' Very good, keep on writing.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from Black Locust
This paints a clear image of truth with beautiful metaphors and a very nice flow. I really didn't find any errors, it's in very good condition. I enjoyed this fresh and brilliant poem, and the picture compliments it, very well. Thanks for sharing!
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This paints a clear image of truth with beautiful metaphors and a very nice flow. I really didn't find any errors, it's in very good condition. I enjoyed this fresh and brilliant poem, and the picture compliments it, very well. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from TR Stagner
Very nice. Has perfect flow and the wording is beautiful. I think the subject is just great. I think that this is an ethereal struggle we all have. To not be victims of all the lies and deceit that humanity can dish out. Very well done Pili.
TR
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Very nice. Has perfect flow and the wording is beautiful. I think the subject is just great. I think that this is an ethereal struggle we all have. To not be victims of all the lies and deceit that humanity can dish out. Very well done Pili.
TR
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from Jewell McChesney
...the clarity to distinguish
without doubt all that is false,
and the wisdom
to never reject truth.
Wonderful points to ponder.
I wonder though why you break up your words into
one word lines? just for looks?
Just wondering...too much time on my hands again.
he he
I still absolutely love what you share with us.
thank you. I needed to think today.
Jewell
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...the clarity to distinguish
without doubt all that is false,
and the wisdom
to never reject truth.
Wonderful points to ponder.
I wonder though why you break up your words into
one word lines? just for looks?
Just wondering...too much time on my hands again.
he he
I still absolutely love what you share with us.
thank you. I needed to think today.
Jewell
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
Comment from volunteer angel
That picture is a maze of color and movement in the mind's eye. It often takes meditation to get ideas that are workable for the day. I like your description "distinquish without doubt, all that is false". Good job! V.A.
p.s.
Did you see the challenge poem that I wrote after you wrote one with the words, barren, margarita, nunnery and wasted? It's called Margaritaville.
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That picture is a maze of color and movement in the mind's eye. It often takes meditation to get ideas that are workable for the day. I like your description "distinquish without doubt, all that is false". Good job! V.A.
p.s.
Did you see the challenge poem that I wrote after you wrote one with the words, barren, margarita, nunnery and wasted? It's called Margaritaville.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2005
