The Ant
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6 and 8/7/8/7159 total reviews
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
Yet another beautifully written piece of poetry rich with descriptive images conveyed through precisely selected word choices. The photos accompanying this poem are precious allowing the reader to see how children view the world with a sense of wonderment, taking delight in all the world's creatures. Great use of repetition in the first and final stanzas with the line "and then, there is the ant." The repetition of this specific line allows it to take precedence in the poem and provides for a stronger impact on the reader. I especially love the way the writer describes the attractive attributes of various animals throughout this poem. My favorite lines are "the peacock is pizzazzy, and the rainbow blooms of jellyfish are positively jazzy". These types of word choices make the poem fun and lively, while supplying the reader with details about each creature. The rhythmic pattern woven throughout this piece, creates the upbeat tempo with which this poem flows. The use of alliteration in peacock/pizzazzy, cackling/crows, and humongous hippopotami to name a few examples, is obviously evident in every stanza of this poem. The meter of this quatrain poem is solid and consistent creating a nicely cohesive unit of poetry. The tone is light, lively and informative in a fun and interesting manner. An exceptionally well written and formatted quatrain.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Yet another beautifully written piece of poetry rich with descriptive images conveyed through precisely selected word choices. The photos accompanying this poem are precious allowing the reader to see how children view the world with a sense of wonderment, taking delight in all the world's creatures. Great use of repetition in the first and final stanzas with the line "and then, there is the ant." The repetition of this specific line allows it to take precedence in the poem and provides for a stronger impact on the reader. I especially love the way the writer describes the attractive attributes of various animals throughout this poem. My favorite lines are "the peacock is pizzazzy, and the rainbow blooms of jellyfish are positively jazzy". These types of word choices make the poem fun and lively, while supplying the reader with details about each creature. The rhythmic pattern woven throughout this piece, creates the upbeat tempo with which this poem flows. The use of alliteration in peacock/pizzazzy, cackling/crows, and humongous hippopotami to name a few examples, is obviously evident in every stanza of this poem. The meter of this quatrain poem is solid and consistent creating a nicely cohesive unit of poetry. The tone is light, lively and informative in a fun and interesting manner. An exceptionally well written and formatted quatrain.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Rainbows, I always appreciate your attentive, insightful reading of my work. Thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome I always enjoy the positive upbeat nature of your poetry! :-)
Comment from write hand blue
There is something about ants that attract children.
A nice pleasant children's poem, perhaps good to read out at bedtime.
Interesting, concise and visual. Eloquently written, as we come to expect from your pen. Good luck.
:) mel.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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There is something about ants that attract children.
A nice pleasant children's poem, perhaps good to read out at bedtime.
Interesting, concise and visual. Eloquently written, as we come to expect from your pen. Good luck.
:) mel.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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mel, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from elchupakabra
Ants are awesome! They're insanely strong, and like you mentioned they help the soil, but most of all, they're voiced by lovable neurotic funnyman Woody Allen :) Just kidding. What's not a joke is how talented you are and how glad I am to be able to read your work again, Brooke. Best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Ants are awesome! They're insanely strong, and like you mentioned they help the soil, but most of all, they're voiced by lovable neurotic funnyman Woody Allen :) Just kidding. What's not a joke is how talented you are and how glad I am to be able to read your work again, Brooke. Best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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elchupakabra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from victor 66
Your poetry is always so well done and heart warming. I think of my youngest son who is thirty-six now. One day when he was 3 or 4, he had a magnifying glass and burned himself on his bare foot while trying to burn an ant. I asked him,
"What are you going to do, if in your next life, you come back as an ant? And you crawl up some little boy's foot?" Now, as a man, he sees no reason to kill anything. Fact is, he and his family are vegans. It is interesting how things turn out. Sorry about the rambling. Your poems always bring memories or experiences I've had with my children or grandchildren. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Your poetry is always so well done and heart warming. I think of my youngest son who is thirty-six now. One day when he was 3 or 4, he had a magnifying glass and burned himself on his bare foot while trying to burn an ant. I asked him,
"What are you going to do, if in your next life, you come back as an ant? And you crawl up some little boy's foot?" Now, as a man, he sees no reason to kill anything. Fact is, he and his family are vegans. It is interesting how things turn out. Sorry about the rambling. Your poems always bring memories or experiences I've had with my children or grandchildren. Best wishes.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Don't be sorry about the rambling, Victor - it always touches me if something I've written triggers memories in one of my readers - it means so much to me to connect on that level :-) Brooke
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Thank you for your patience and tolerance.
Comment from amahra
What a nice ode to the ant. I have always loved the ant. It's the most energetic creature on the planet. There's working ants and army ants. I don't like to kill them unless there's an infestation. Sawyer is really getting tall.
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What a nice ode to the ant. I have always loved the ant. It's the most energetic creature on the planet. There's working ants and army ants. I don't like to kill them unless there's an infestation. Sawyer is really getting tall.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Yes, Sawyer is tall and lean. He started off much smaller than most babies in our family, so I'm thrilled he is so tall and healthy :-) Brooke
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
The humble ant is tiny and yet such a fascinating and annoying insect.
This series of descriptive and vibrant quatrains is full of energy and life.
There's so much to captivated and entertain yet still sometimes the ant
Is more fascinating than most.
Clever and thoughtful and a very worthy contest entry.
Good luck.
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The humble ant is tiny and yet such a fascinating and annoying insect.
This series of descriptive and vibrant quatrains is full of energy and life.
There's so much to captivated and entertain yet still sometimes the ant
Is more fascinating than most.
Clever and thoughtful and a very worthy contest entry.
Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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seken, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
FK! anyone who can make a ditty as joyous as that over a bloody ant has got my vote!
you could give me a thousand poems from a thousand unknown
poets and I could pick the ADEWPEARLER! lol
You have such a way with flow and rhythm which I instantly can recognize as yours!
well done Brooke! definitely one for the book! lol
dipster
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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FK! anyone who can make a ditty as joyous as that over a bloody ant has got my vote!
you could give me a thousand poems from a thousand unknown
poets and I could pick the ADEWPEARLER! lol
You have such a way with flow and rhythm which I instantly can recognize as yours!
well done Brooke! definitely one for the book! lol
dipster
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Dip, thank you so much - if this made you laugh, I've done my job :-) I so appreciate your generosity and comments, my friend. Brooke
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always a pleasure
xxdip
Comment from Pegcook
This light hearted children's poem is delightful. It skips along with excellent cadence and rhyme. The alliteration platypus/plant, peacock pizzaazzy. The contrast between the exotic creature and the ant brought more than a chuckle to my day... I am still laughing! The photos of Sawyer help tell the story of the ant.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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This light hearted children's poem is delightful. It skips along with excellent cadence and rhyme. The alliteration platypus/plant, peacock pizzaazzy. The contrast between the exotic creature and the ant brought more than a chuckle to my day... I am still laughing! The photos of Sawyer help tell the story of the ant.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Peg, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Good fun rhyming in this one Brooke. Very colorful and full of imagery. The problem with the wonders of the ants is that if you find one there will be a hundred that are close by., lol And some of the larger ones bite and they are nasty. Behind a glass enclosed is the best way to observe their busy life.
good luck in the contest
lulube
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Good fun rhyming in this one Brooke. Very colorful and full of imagery. The problem with the wonders of the ants is that if you find one there will be a hundred that are close by., lol And some of the larger ones bite and they are nasty. Behind a glass enclosed is the best way to observe their busy life.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Lulube, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jmdg1954
It's amazing what catches there eye and attention. Even the littlest ant will emit a vibe saying, "hey, kid, come look at me." Those are cute pictures to accompany your poem.
John
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It's amazing what catches there eye and attention. Even the littlest ant will emit a vibe saying, "hey, kid, come look at me." Those are cute pictures to accompany your poem.
John
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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John, thank you so much. Yesterday it was a baby goat at a petting zoo - his little body was shaking with excitement. LOL :-) Brooke
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Funny you say that. My wife is in Florida this week visiting. Yesterday, my son Rob, the two little ones and grandma went to the zoo. Aiden was so excited anytime an animal got close by.
