The Ant
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6 and 8/7/8/7159 total reviews
Comment from akulkumol
Beautiful description of nature's beauty. Really your work is remarkable writing a poem on ants, it never came to my mind any one can do this. Lovely, enjoyed it and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Beautiful description of nature's beauty. Really your work is remarkable writing a poem on ants, it never came to my mind any one can do this. Lovely, enjoyed it and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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akulkurmol, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Riss Ryker518
If I could have given this ten stars I would have! This was absolutely delightful, enchanting, and fun to read. I would so buy this as a kids books for my grandchildren! Outstanding!!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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If I could have given this ten stars I would have! This was absolutely delightful, enchanting, and fun to read. I would so buy this as a kids books for my grandchildren! Outstanding!!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Riss, thank you for your wonderfully encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from barleygirl
Enjoyed your imaginative description of all the creatures we adore & yet the lowly ant is barely noticed. Loved the rhyming, especially: "pizazzy/jazzy" . . . "flamboyance/annoyance" . . . Many other fresh, original word choices, thru-out, as well as fresh, unusual choices in the creatures described. Thanks for sharing & reminding us to look beyond the obvious beauties in life! *smile*
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Enjoyed your imaginative description of all the creatures we adore & yet the lowly ant is barely noticed. Loved the rhyming, especially: "pizazzy/jazzy" . . . "flamboyance/annoyance" . . . Many other fresh, original word choices, thru-out, as well as fresh, unusual choices in the creatures described. Thanks for sharing & reminding us to look beyond the obvious beauties in life! *smile*
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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barleygirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from healfromwithin
This was cute and sing-songy; it would be a cute read for toddlers-preschool.
Flamboyance / annoyance were the best lines IMO.
It would be nice if you could provide an ant pix. For the piece.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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This was cute and sing-songy; it would be a cute read for toddlers-preschool.
Flamboyance / annoyance were the best lines IMO.
It would be nice if you could provide an ant pix. For the piece.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, healfromwithin. The photo of Sawyer lying on his tummy shows him examining ants on the sidewalk. Brooke
Comment from alexgeorge
Yep. Just goes to show that there is room in this world for all of God's creation, and it takes a pure heart, like Sawyer's to show us the way.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Yep. Just goes to show that there is room in this world for all of God's creation, and it takes a pure heart, like Sawyer's to show us the way.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Alex, thank you so much for your generous and encouraging response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
The ant is an annoyance to adults because it ruins our pride in our housecleaning ability. It is just in the house helping us clean the crumbs we leave so it has food. Well that's a kind way of putting it. Adults think of ants as invaders. The child sees an ant as a superhero who can move things much heavier than itself and hurt those much bigger than itself with a little nip.
Thanks for more cute and apt pictures of Sawyer.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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The ant is an annoyance to adults because it ruins our pride in our housecleaning ability. It is just in the house helping us clean the crumbs we leave so it has food. Well that's a kind way of putting it. Adults think of ants as invaders. The child sees an ant as a superhero who can move things much heavier than itself and hurt those much bigger than itself with a little nip.
Thanks for more cute and apt pictures of Sawyer.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Joan, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from robina1978
Lovely photo's indeed that complement your quatrains so well. Sawyer likes watching the ants and many more things. Good entry for the contest. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Lovely photo's indeed that complement your quatrains so well. Sawyer likes watching the ants and many more things. Good entry for the contest. Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Ine, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) It is always so good to see you. Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Delightfully written, Brooke. What ever happened to our excitement over little things like ants. I remember watching them with fascination as a child, and yes now they can be a crisis when they come in the house. Cute picture paired with cute poem. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Delightfully written, Brooke. What ever happened to our excitement over little things like ants. I remember watching them with fascination as a child, and yes now they can be a crisis when they come in the house. Cute picture paired with cute poem. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Debbie, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke :)
and then, there is the ant.... hmm, the ant. I hate ants, especially in my house. We had some building work done over the winter and now the warmer days are here, the ants have reappeared. Thing is, they used to be outside but now they are in :( We have installed bait stations which seem to be doing the trick.
Anyway, now I've got that off my chest(!) I'll get back to your poem :)
I loved your poem in its entirety... the rhythm and rhyme, the alliteration (I particulately enjoyed the pizzazzy peacock!) the enjambment and also how you engage the reader. The poem is snappy and entertaining.
Good luck in the contest :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke :)
and then, there is the ant.... hmm, the ant. I hate ants, especially in my house. We had some building work done over the winter and now the warmer days are here, the ants have reappeared. Thing is, they used to be outside but now they are in :( We have installed bait stations which seem to be doing the trick.
Anyway, now I've got that off my chest(!) I'll get back to your poem :)
I loved your poem in its entirety... the rhythm and rhyme, the alliteration (I particulately enjoyed the pizzazzy peacock!) the enjambment and also how you engage the reader. The poem is snappy and entertaining.
Good luck in the contest :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Debra - my sympathies on the ant invaders. When they come inside my home, I stomp them. I'm more sentimental as a poet than as an actual person. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Minglement
Sorry no six stars left for this fun poem. Very lyrical and fun, and sooo much like a curious little one. You have a way of capturing magic.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Sorry no six stars left for this fun poem. Very lyrical and fun, and sooo much like a curious little one. You have a way of capturing magic.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Marcia, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
