The Ant
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6 and 8/7/8/7159 total reviews
Comment from Connie C
There is so much I like about this poem, Brooke. I like how in stanza 4 you give the poor little ant credit for being a worker. I like your mention of so many different living things in nature. And I like the way you end line four and the last line the same.
This was a delight to read. I'll never look at an ant the same now. LOL
Connie
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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There is so much I like about this poem, Brooke. I like how in stanza 4 you give the poor little ant credit for being a worker. I like your mention of so many different living things in nature. And I like the way you end line four and the last line the same.
This was a delight to read. I'll never look at an ant the same now. LOL
Connie
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Connie, thank you so much :-) I am such a hypocrite - I posted the poem and then stomped on an ant that had invaded my living room. LOL I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
I love this poetic tribute to " the ant" The bible uses the ant as an important lesson for the working principle of life! I remember my own youth, being fascinated by the ant and a large spider called a trapdoor spider which built its lair underground with a trapdoor to ensnare its prey! Great natural rhyme, description, and meter! Easter Blessings, Brooke,....Roy.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I love this poetic tribute to " the ant" The bible uses the ant as an important lesson for the working principle of life! I remember my own youth, being fascinated by the ant and a large spider called a trapdoor spider which built its lair underground with a trapdoor to ensnare its prey! Great natural rhyme, description, and meter! Easter Blessings, Brooke,....Roy.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Yes, and we can see he got right down with them to check out the hard working ants. A nice fun read with the platypus and plant
crocodiles and cackling crows
and the pizzazzy peacocks. Enjoyed the read Brooke,
valda
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Yes, and we can see he got right down with them to check out the hard working ants. A nice fun read with the platypus and plant
crocodiles and cackling crows
and the pizzazzy peacocks. Enjoyed the read Brooke,
valda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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valda, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from 9999pool
A truly great poem filled with joy and wonderment of nature - from the very big to the very small in the size of an ant.
Yes, the ant is one of the smallest creatures to walk this earth and it is everywhere all over the world.
They are looked upon as pests in the household and we will stomp them out as soon as we see them.
What a life to have - being small and bullied the world over, smiles.
The words used in this write are very breezy and bouncy with the overall feel of a happy and joyful poem to read.
Excellent writ and well penned.
Good luck to the contest.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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A truly great poem filled with joy and wonderment of nature - from the very big to the very small in the size of an ant.
Yes, the ant is one of the smallest creatures to walk this earth and it is everywhere all over the world.
They are looked upon as pests in the household and we will stomp them out as soon as we see them.
What a life to have - being small and bullied the world over, smiles.
The words used in this write are very breezy and bouncy with the overall feel of a happy and joyful poem to read.
Excellent writ and well penned.
Good luck to the contest.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Ritchie :-) Brooke
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Hi Brooke,
Loved this write and this can win the contest and especially great for children too. Smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie :)). Hugs.
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I loved this, it's like a nursery rhyme its so cute, the thyme was spot on and the flow was really good and fast, I really enjoyed it, great job ,
Andrew
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I loved this, it's like a nursery rhyme its so cute, the thyme was spot on and the flow was really good and fast, I really enjoyed it, great job ,
Andrew
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Andrew, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Beautiful quatrains Brooke. I'm with your grandson, what's more interesting than ants? They're fascinating to watch. Best of luck. Kenny
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Beautiful quatrains Brooke. I'm with your grandson, what's more interesting than ants? They're fascinating to watch. Best of luck. Kenny
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Kenny :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with platypus/plant...crocodiles/crackling/crows...whale's/wonder...peacock/pizzazzy...ant/an/annoyance...watch/work...making/more...polliwogs/puffins...humongous/hippopotami...then/there/the. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with platypus/plant...crocodiles/crackling/crows...whale's/wonder...peacock/pizzazzy...ant/an/annoyance...watch/work...making/more...polliwogs/puffins...humongous/hippopotami...then/there/the. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
Where are your picture books? This would make a wonderful children's colorful book....all your poems like this would...tell me you have sought publishing this way...love it ...I wish I had a six
God bless
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Where are your picture books? This would make a wonderful children's colorful book....all your poems like this would...tell me you have sought publishing this way...love it ...I wish I had a six
God bless
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Kiwijenny, thank you for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Brooke I love you poem-
Sounds like your Grandson is busy viewing nature.
So are the ants.
The question is: now Sawyer should learn what are they so busy about?
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke I love you poem-
Sounds like your Grandson is busy viewing nature.
So are the ants.
The question is: now Sawyer should learn what are they so busy about?
Gert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Gert, thank you so much :-) I think at 23 months Sawyer isn't quite ready to understand the finer points of being an ant, but that will come soon :-) Brooke
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Smiles you are right he just to me acts like a brilliant little boy
Gert
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He is brilliant - at 23 months he sings the full lyrics to a whole bundle of songs, including baa baa black sheep. He has great conversations with me on the phone. His vocabulary is astounding. He's just not quite ready for science yet. LOL :-)
Comment from Adri7enne
So cute, Brooke. "peacock is pizzazzy" and the jellyfish are jazzy." Great fun.
He's bound to be a little different since he is your grandchild. LOL! Cute!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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So cute, Brooke. "peacock is pizzazzy" and the jellyfish are jazzy." Great fun.
He's bound to be a little different since he is your grandchild. LOL! Cute!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much :-) Brooke
