Comment from bard owl

Exceptional

This poem is continuously clever. There is SO MUCH word play that I relished, I read your poem twice. You went far and above the contest basics and created a very humorous poem of what might have been. Excellent rhythm and rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014

Thanks Linda and good luck to you with your Inner Child - long may she flourish.

Steve

Comment from evilynne

Excellent

Yes, I got them all - after I stopped laughing (or maybe even while I was). What a wonderfully written verse. Good luck in the contest - you have my vote.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks a lot for the voe, but especially for the laugh.

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

To the author of "Jack". A handyman is a very important job. Everyone woman needs one! Your photo art makes your presentation exceptional for your poetic work. AND the play on the words are humorous. Great work. Carole

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Carole!

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Great job with your pun-mania filled poem. It flowed smoothly from start to finish with the AABB rhyme scheme. I loved it and it made me smile! 8-)

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, BG for the kind words and especially for the smile.

Comment from Pegcook

Excellent

This poem bounces along at a lively pace with rhythm and meter that urges this reader forward. The plays on words (oh, there are so many): matador/gore/bull;doctor/patience; cocktail waitress/shaken/stirred; and all the others had me shaking my head wondering how the author came up with all of them... they are delightful! I'm clueless about the Royal Mint; is it a drink or a place where money is printed? Oh that must be it 'cause of the potential for outsourcing.

A very clever twist on this writing prompt!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Peg - glad you enjoyed this piece of nonsense - a couple of the lines are even true. Yes, The Royal Mint is where the UK makes its money I believe...

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Nice rhyme and rhythm in this poem full of puns. Some worth a deep groan. Well this person tried and failed at so many things probably retirement is a good thing. To have tried so many things he had to have had money to begin with.

Apt artwork.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, DP

Deserves his retirement but has a year or two to go yet! :o)

reply by dragonpoet on 13-Apr-2014

Hopefully he'll get a job that will last until he retires. Maybe in food service. It seems the only thing he hasn't tried.

dragonpoet

Comment from Millibrad

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this very Witty poem. Seems you've outdone yourself in the puns department also. Good luck in the contest and thanks for posting.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thank you!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

solid rhyming couplets and strong meter
very clever punning :-)
good uses of alliteration like in taming tempted and the rhyming gore galore
I love groaner puns, so the podiatry line has me howling
each example truly is funny
good internal rhyme in stint/mint
You and Sally should team up and put a book together :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Brooke

Do you mean Cornish Sally who hasn't been seen in a while? Or some other Sally who likes the silly stuff as much as me?

reply by adewpearl on 12-Apr-2014

I mean Sally Yocum, whose punning poems have been delighting me for over five years, the same one who invented the octogram :-)

Comment from eugenus

Excellent

This could've been GREAT but you tripped me up a little with your punctuation and all those dashes and hyphens. I enjoyed reading it anyway and it had its "great" moments:

"I tapped a plumber once for work, but knew I shouldn't force it;
Then did a stint at The Royal Mint -- I knew I could out-source it.
A nanny once, I kid you not; a lawyer with no will;
I trained to be a dentist too; I'm sure you know the drill."

Good job though! Best wishes ...

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks for the kind words - sorry I'm a punctuation-maniac as well as a punnomaniac.

Comment from judester

Excellent

Cute poem with a rollicking beat. Very clever with the puns.Anything you haven't done? I wish you the best of luck in the contest.cheers Judester

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 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Jude!