First Flight
Waiting a lifetime for your dreams...36 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
Yes, sometimes we have to ask ourselves, are our toils worth our dreams and plans we have promised and committed ourselves to take. The old woman in your poem represented that big question, after working hard everyday, saving every penny until we grow old before that grand vacation, can we still enjoy that fabled dream we dearly hoped for when our youth is already wasted? Your poem elicited that thought. thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Yes, sometimes we have to ask ourselves, are our toils worth our dreams and plans we have promised and committed ourselves to take. The old woman in your poem represented that big question, after working hard everyday, saving every penny until we grow old before that grand vacation, can we still enjoy that fabled dream we dearly hoped for when our youth is already wasted? Your poem elicited that thought. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful review. You perceived it, exactly. Have a great weekend.
Comment from seaglass
Oh yeas, retirement at last and she deserves it. The quick, rhymed list tasks and annoyances are amusing. I feared she was going to miss her flight or die before getting past check-through but she made it, that's good.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Oh yeas, retirement at last and she deserves it. The quick, rhymed list tasks and annoyances are amusing. I feared she was going to miss her flight or die before getting past check-through but she made it, that's good.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks for your review! Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from Willowsong
Though I can not figure out who the poem is about(I'm not too well versed in my history), it is exceptionally written. I'm new to FS, so I can't quite say if this meets the criteria for the contest seeing she actually fulfilled her dreams; however, I did quite enjoy the journey through her doldrum life up to the climatic adventure of her lifetime. You chose an equally suitable picture to fit. You can't go wrong with a Norman Rockwell :) Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Though I can not figure out who the poem is about(I'm not too well versed in my history), it is exceptionally written. I'm new to FS, so I can't quite say if this meets the criteria for the contest seeing she actually fulfilled her dreams; however, I did quite enjoy the journey through her doldrum life up to the climatic adventure of her lifetime. You chose an equally suitable picture to fit. You can't go wrong with a Norman Rockwell :) Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks for reading and enjoying the piece. Your low rating was a surprise. It does meet the contest criteria. (please re-read them-she hasn't YET lived.)
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Okay, I did go and reread the piece thinking I might have missed something. Perhaps I am jumping the gun a little. I do get the impression that her journey is starting, she's about to take off. Am I missing something in the interpretation?
Comment from honeytree
The art work is great and the words interesting.
The first time on a plane can be a bit scary
The next time is even better.
We sit back and relax and enjoy the ride
Seeing the world from the sky.
A great journey.
honey tree
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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The art work is great and the words interesting.
The first time on a plane can be a bit scary
The next time is even better.
We sit back and relax and enjoy the ride
Seeing the world from the sky.
A great journey.
honey tree
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. :)
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I am glad you liked the review.
honey tree
Comment from Leineco
What a great entry in the Life almost lived competition!
The driving rhythm sets the heart to palpitating (just like your subject)
and the acts of deliberate saving help build the suspense
And the final two lines, knit the whole poem together :-)
Nice write :-)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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What a great entry in the Life almost lived competition!
The driving rhythm sets the heart to palpitating (just like your subject)
and the acts of deliberate saving help build the suspense
And the final two lines, knit the whole poem together :-)
Nice write :-)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Leineco, for your thoughtful review!
Comment from Angel Debbie
Perfect write for this writing prompt. You nailed life right on the head. The picture does very well with this write. I wish you the best in the contest. Have a great day/night!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Perfect write for this writing prompt. You nailed life right on the head. The picture does very well with this write. I wish you the best in the contest. Have a great day/night!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your supportive review. I appreciate your positive remarks. :)
Comment from The Boy Whodunnit!
Wonderful expression of ideas and thoughts. This has an incredible rhythm that comes through well chosen words and phrases.
You have taken the writing prompt in an original and creative direction.
Good luck in the contest.
BW
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Wonderful expression of ideas and thoughts. This has an incredible rhythm that comes through well chosen words and phrases.
You have taken the writing prompt in an original and creative direction.
Good luck in the contest.
BW
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your supportive review. I appreciate your positive remarks. :)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I'm so glad she finally got to go on her flight. She deserved it after putting in her tune doing duty well. Good luck to you with this charming poem. Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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I'm so glad she finally got to go on her flight. She deserved it after putting in her tune doing duty well. Good luck to you with this charming poem. Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your supportive review. I appreciate your positive remarks. :)
Comment from rouskin
Nice contest entry The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams. I wish you the best of luck
Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Nice contest entry The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams. I wish you the best of luck
Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your supportive review. I appreciate your positive remarks. :)
Comment from Karen B.
What a wonderful story, though it's also a bit sad that she doesn't seem to have enjoyed life much up till then. Very well-written and an excellent entry into the contest. Best wishes with it!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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What a wonderful story, though it's also a bit sad that she doesn't seem to have enjoyed life much up till then. Very well-written and an excellent entry into the contest. Best wishes with it!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your supportive review. I appreciate your positive remarks. :)
