Comment from RodG

Exceptional

You have definitely captured the essence of Rockwell's painting in this fine poem. We SEE this woman in both stages of her life: that as a tired, loyal, trustworthy worker and later that as the excited first-time traveler boarding a plane. Wonderful happy ending! Excellent use of rhyme throughout. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014

Thanks! I'm so glad you saw my vision. Thanks for the 6 stars. :)

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

It's a life she wanted to have. To free herself from the daily grind of the stone mill. She had worked thirty long years and she finally got what she wanted - to travel to the far corners of the world in a jet set life.
The question was - is it a life she almost lived or is living it right now?
The prompt is "The life he almost lived" - the lives they ALMOST lived (but didn't, presumably). Just my thoughts which might be important for this prompt requirements, smiles.
However if she had a stroke that took her to heaven then it will be a life she almost lived (but didn't make it at the last minute), smiles. But apparently she is living it right now - leaving on a jet plane, smiles.
Good write and well penned.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014

Thanks for the great notes and insight, I elude to heart trouble and dizziness but didn't have the heart myself to take it all away from her in the 11th hour...

Have a great weekend!

reply by 9999pool on 13-Apr-2014

That is so beautiful of you. There was another writer who did the same in another writing prompt that chose not to follow the word count for the poem had to be the way she intended, smiles.
Writing is not about winning. It's about writing our heart out even if that means losing out, :))
My salute and respect to you on this change of heart, big smiles.
Cheerio and have a wonderful Sunday.
Hugs, Ritchie. :))

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

I kept hoping that the woman in your poem would indeed get to do what she has been preparing for all her life. The flow of this work is very smooth and the imagery quite clear. I have been married to a pilot for over thirty years, so all the preparation sounded so familiar. Excellent entry. Best of luck to you.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014

Thanks for the great review, have a super weekend!

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hello mystery poet,

I just loved this. The picture absolutely put a face to the sweet, precious old dear you write about.

All the best - hope you win!

Have a great weekend. :)

Sonali


Now (e)ngines roaring

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014

Thanks so much! :)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi...

~ Your words capture the image for your poem, placing the reader right on that seat with the lady - very well done..!

~ You're right, too, about Norman Rockwell...

Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks for your great review! :)

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

You had me with Norman Rockwell. I liked the day in the life of this woman. SHe seemed to be every man or woman. I t seems we all have a secret life, filled with wishes and dreams unfulfilled. Great work.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks so much for your flattering review. :)

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

To the author of First Flight, How very cute. The presentation is perfect and illustrates the poetic words with old lady style. NO matter how much flying experience that one has, the roaring of the engine and vibration of plane as it takes off is scary. Nice work. Carole

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Carole. I appreciate your great review! :)

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I like the story you tell in your poem, of
a woman who scrimps and saves and fulfills
her dream, finally. It is a heartwarming tale
told with strong rhyme and and even meter.
Lots of good images as well. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, nancyjam. I'm glad you liked it. :)

Comment from damettagin

Excellent

I thoroughly enjoyed reading her life's journey. It's very captivating throughout, one doesn't notice the length because it reads quite well.

"Suddenly dizzy" - seemed so abrupt, it stopped me in my tracks and I went back to read it again.

Good luck in the contest
:)Dame

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thank you for your great review; I appreciate your kind words. :)

Comment from Pegcook

Excellent

Norman Rockwell captured the woman in the poem perfectly... and he didn't even know he was doing it!

Your story is so well told, even without Rockwell's illustration, this reader could see her. Your title, "Delayed Flight" adds a realistic touch to the poem.
The rhymes and near-rhymes help make this a smooth ride... uhh, read, I mean :-) Good work!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks so much. Have a great weekend. :)