Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Excellent write, Steve. Congratulations on your 2nd place finish with this wonderful Naani. It is a treasure and gives the reader plenty to think about.
Rose.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014

Thanks, Rose.

Steve

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi K...

~ This was absolutely a stunning poem, said with so few words but great impact..

~ The graphics with the lone tear on the child gave it an even more powerful impact...

Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014

Thanks, jax.

Steve

Comment from jgirlie152

Excellent

this is lovely and very touching. the fact that you combined the child and the angel's tears is heartwarming. Words selective and well put together.
Joan

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Joan - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

very good naani with a proper syllable count and the presentation of two contrasting images .children's joy and their sorrow -both are indefinable.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Sanku.

Steve

Comment from manicblue

Excellent

Words mean so much when arranged correctly to best describe a situation. These messages are priceless; they evoke emotions we all feel and that's what poetry does so well. Good job. I wish you well in this contest.
Lucretia xx

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Lucretia, thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

kiwi, this Naani Poetry contest entry fulfills the elements of the contest with proper line and syllable count. Yes, children can bring either laughter or tears. Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, GracieAnne

I know nothing about naani poetry and the instructions are fairly vague, but I thought I would have a go anyway.

Steve

Comment from the blue pixel

Exceptional

You are so unbelievably clever Steve. There's nothing new in that but in your Naani, your first two lines are the simplest of paradoxes, perhaps even oxymorons. "put into words the indefinable" and in writing this, you put into words the very thing that you say you cannot do. You could have chosen any number of beautiful things that would fit the bill but what you did choose, was wonderful Steve. I hope your poem receives the recognition it so richly deserves. xx Carol

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Carol.

I know nothing about naani and the instructions and definitions are themselves rather blurred. I think the word 'indefinable' came to mind as I was contemplating the form!
Again, I doubt whether this will do well, but I have other fish to fry...

Steve

reply by the blue pixel on 13-Apr-2014

Ii didn't worry about the form because I just didn't care. Hopefully, others who aren't form crazy will appreciate your poem the way that I did. xx

Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Lovely naani which tells all. Just love the comparison between "children's joy" and "an angel's tears." Clever wording, Deb

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Deb - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

What a beautiful Naani entry...these are totally indescribable, and you have put that across well...Blessings to you tonight!

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Jo.

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

What a sweet Naani poem you have here, Steve. It is the epitome of innocence and purity, so little difference between the joy of young children and the indefinable angels teens, Giddy

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014

Thanks, Giddy.

Steve