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Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "The Best Laid Plans"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from royowen
I haven't read any of the other chapters, but I found this quite absorbing, and I seem to have stumbled onto the business end! I hope I remember to read the next important instalment of this fine novel. Blessings, Roy.
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I haven't read any of the other chapters, but I found this quite absorbing, and I seem to have stumbled onto the business end! I hope I remember to read the next important instalment of this fine novel. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Things are now really getting hairy. At least it looks like there might be some help. Yes, it is better to go down fighting than to just roll over. Another great chapter.
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Things are now really getting hairy. At least it looks like there might be some help. Yes, it is better to go down fighting than to just roll over. Another great chapter.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
That was an exciting chapter, very well written with great descriptions and narrative. It has reached its climax, the build up was good and the revelation of the innermost thoughts of the main character give us hope that all will be ok. Great write. Faye
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That was an exciting chapter, very well written with great descriptions and narrative. It has reached its climax, the build up was good and the revelation of the innermost thoughts of the main character give us hope that all will be ok. Great write. Faye
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Crap, there is boo coo of live action going on here. So, the Canadians have come to the rescue. I didn't see this coming, either. I got plenty of room for you in my novel. i can easily erase and add a name? Canadian subs kicking ass! I'm glad you got trust in Rickey. He must have found some SAM's and harpoons. Harpoons are the missiles that sink ships. That take off at a high altitude, plane off, then they hover feet over the water below enemy radar. they are devastating to ships. i loaded a few on our planes when I was on the bomb squad. How did you know I was in Guam. We had to refuel there on the way to the Philipines. On a six month deployment to Diego Garcia, Dodge. That rock was hard to find, we were lst at one point and the Nav/com had to use some sort of gadget using the stars to find our location. I thought we were going into the drink but luckily we found Guam. Where men are men and women are too? ha!ha! Wall biters we called the women because they had flat faces and could bite a wall. I'm liking this big time! I don't know what to think about Gomer Pyle. I got a surprise for you, I will add you to my novel when you least expect. Maybe, you can replace Grizzly Adams since his name is already well known. Yep, that's it. he is a funky guide, mountain man from Alaska.
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Crap, there is boo coo of live action going on here. So, the Canadians have come to the rescue. I didn't see this coming, either. I got plenty of room for you in my novel. i can easily erase and add a name? Canadian subs kicking ass! I'm glad you got trust in Rickey. He must have found some SAM's and harpoons. Harpoons are the missiles that sink ships. That take off at a high altitude, plane off, then they hover feet over the water below enemy radar. they are devastating to ships. i loaded a few on our planes when I was on the bomb squad. How did you know I was in Guam. We had to refuel there on the way to the Philipines. On a six month deployment to Diego Garcia, Dodge. That rock was hard to find, we were lst at one point and the Nav/com had to use some sort of gadget using the stars to find our location. I thought we were going into the drink but luckily we found Guam. Where men are men and women are too? ha!ha! Wall biters we called the women because they had flat faces and could bite a wall. I'm liking this big time! I don't know what to think about Gomer Pyle. I got a surprise for you, I will add you to my novel when you least expect. Maybe, you can replace Grizzly Adams since his name is already well known. Yep, that's it. he is a funky guide, mountain man from Alaska.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from Sankey
Good work again old friend. Getting really dramatic and exciting now for sure. Can't wait to see where it all goes. One spag only a punctuation error..."You,(')re looking at a couple hours until visual.
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Good work again old friend. Getting really dramatic and exciting now for sure. Can't wait to see where it all goes. One spag only a punctuation error..."You,(')re looking at a couple hours until visual.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh dear. Don't tell me you are going to get real on me? Hell no. You pull a rabbit out of your hat. This beautifully written. You never fail to address mankind' nature and potential and that raises the stakes. Please...I want to believe. They must win!!! NG
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Oh dear. Don't tell me you are going to get real on me? Hell no. You pull a rabbit out of your hat. This beautifully written. You never fail to address mankind' nature and potential and that raises the stakes. Please...I want to believe. They must win!!! NG
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
i have gotten bits and pieces of the book and when i Can read i can I it is horrigying and well written pieceand i am happy with the style
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i have gotten bits and pieces of the book and when i Can read i can I it is horrigying and well written pieceand i am happy with the style
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from nor84
Looking out at this angry ocean(,) a sense of lonely despair came over me.
"What's out (our)status, Nikolai?"
Our back up (backup) is still up in the air, Johnny, no>>>>When he speaks to Johnny in this passage, he says 'Johnny'. We don't normally do that, at least not so often.
A few paragraphs later, he's still using Johnny's name to speak to him.
In the paragraph beginning 'I could hear seals barking', I see 'out of place' three times. Might want to look at that.
daydreaming eyes >>one word
'some kind of dance' is in here twice.
Any word from Edward's>>>Edwards >>no apostrophe. Not a possessive, just a last name (my maiden name).
Vessels of every shape and size, some military some commercial.>>>that sentence needs to move up to follow '...bearing down from the north'.
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Looking out at this angry ocean(,) a sense of lonely despair came over me.
"What's out (our)status, Nikolai?"
Our back up (backup) is still up in the air, Johnny, no>>>>When he speaks to Johnny in this passage, he says 'Johnny'. We don't normally do that, at least not so often.
A few paragraphs later, he's still using Johnny's name to speak to him.
In the paragraph beginning 'I could hear seals barking', I see 'out of place' three times. Might want to look at that.
daydreaming eyes >>one word
'some kind of dance' is in here twice.
Any word from Edward's>>>Edwards >>no apostrophe. Not a possessive, just a last name (my maiden name).
Vessels of every shape and size, some military some commercial.>>>that sentence needs to move up to follow '...bearing down from the north'.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
