You have a friend
a slightly modified Octogram163 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I know that this poem was inspired by and intended for Sawyer, but it a wonderful description of the value of having a loyal friend in any situation. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of alliteration and your rhymes. Many hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I know that this poem was inspired by and intended for Sawyer, but it a wonderful description of the value of having a loyal friend in any situation. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of alliteration and your rhymes. Many hugs- Joan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Joan. I hope people realize that about all my Sawyer-inspired poems. They are never intended to be about/for him exclusively or I wouldn't be posting them, just sending them to him in cards. LOL :-) Brooke
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Your collection will make several books, which he will cherish. More hugs- Joan
Comment from bloomingsun
thus is sweet and encouraging. Your little grandson is blessed to have your love in his life. Well written and cute word pictures, and the pic of Sawyer is darling as usual. nice write.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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thus is sweet and encouraging. Your little grandson is blessed to have your love in his life. Well written and cute word pictures, and the pic of Sawyer is darling as usual. nice write.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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bloomingsun, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
This is an exceptional poem as you can feel the raw yearning emotion of friendship oozing out. You have also described how real and true friends can lift us out of the pit of despair and depression. You are one friend in a million to that wonderful boy. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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This is an exceptional poem as you can feel the raw yearning emotion of friendship oozing out. You have also described how real and true friends can lift us out of the pit of despair and depression. You are one friend in a million to that wonderful boy. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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rod, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your generosity. Brooke
Comment from Sanku
Sweet and adorable way to confirm that you are his friend an would do whatever is needed to wipe his tears away .Balloons breaking, kites being 'eaten' by trees,flowers wilting ,singing out of tune...these are things that actually break a child's heart.You are so perceptive of a child's world,Brooke and Sawyer is very lucky to have you for his grandmother.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Sweet and adorable way to confirm that you are his friend an would do whatever is needed to wipe his tears away .Balloons breaking, kites being 'eaten' by trees,flowers wilting ,singing out of tune...these are things that actually break a child's heart.You are so perceptive of a child's world,Brooke and Sawyer is very lucky to have you for his grandmother.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Sanku, for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from smileycloud
I am in awe of your talent and bravery with all the poetry forms you show us wrapped in extremely beautiful words images and visions
I particularly like this one not only for all the excellent ways you have put it together but
BECAUSE AS I WAS READING I COULD ACTUALLY FEEL THE WORTH AND VALUE OF A FRIEND WHO MOVES HEAVEN AND EARTH
BUT YOU HAVE SAID IT IN THE SOFTEST SWEETEST WAY
HAVE A SMILEY DAY
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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I am in awe of your talent and bravery with all the poetry forms you show us wrapped in extremely beautiful words images and visions
I particularly like this one not only for all the excellent ways you have put it together but
BECAUSE AS I WAS READING I COULD ACTUALLY FEEL THE WORTH AND VALUE OF A FRIEND WHO MOVES HEAVEN AND EARTH
BUT YOU HAVE SAID IT IN THE SOFTEST SWEETEST WAY
HAVE A SMILEY DAY
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Smileycloud, thank you so very much for your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from ILovePoetry!
Excellent rhythm! It was spot on and I feel it really helped the message of the poem across perfectly. Since the theme of the poem is a little more typical, an atypical rhythm was just what you needed to make it more unique. Also, I like the examples you have given - they, too, are a little different from the regular examples given. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Excellent rhythm! It was spot on and I feel it really helped the message of the poem across perfectly. Since the theme of the poem is a little more typical, an atypical rhythm was just what you needed to make it more unique. Also, I like the examples you have given - they, too, are a little different from the regular examples given. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thank you, ILovePoetry, for your thoughtful and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
No one knows how to heal your wounds, better than a true blue friend :-)
Nicely done Brooke :-)
Particularly strong consonance with bright balloon / cloud conceal / should your songs slip / and assonance with breezes steal / clouds conceal / them mend-them blend.
Nice airy poem :-)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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No one knows how to heal your wounds, better than a true blue friend :-)
Nicely done Brooke :-)
Particularly strong consonance with bright balloon / cloud conceal / should your songs slip / and assonance with breezes steal / clouds conceal / them mend-them blend.
Nice airy poem :-)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Leineco, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Warren Rodgers
You know how much I love octograms and this one is superbly written. The modifications are slight but add to the flow of your words. Wonderful alliteration, meter, rhyme, and word choices. The message is clear and Sawyer's photo is fitting and really cute! I enjoyed it very much!
All the best, Rodger
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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You know how much I love octograms and this one is superbly written. The modifications are slight but add to the flow of your words. Wonderful alliteration, meter, rhyme, and word choices. The message is clear and Sawyer's photo is fitting and really cute! I enjoyed it very much!
All the best, Rodger
:)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Rodger. It is so easy to love a grand child, so innocent and perfect :-) I appreciate your generosity. Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Ah, I'm so glad I saved a six for this one, Brooke. So many of your poems remind me of a song. This one, of course, reminds me of James Taylor's "You've Got A Friend".
http://youtu.be/3WJ1cf3nrLE
Shortly after I became a Christian, around 1974, I was still at Moosehead Breweries and working with a bunch of old men, toiling in monotonous labour. I would stand at the soaker feed table, standing up bottles, picking out plastic and broken glass, and going quite cross-eyed and tired. I'd sing this song and change the words a bit,
"When you're down and troubled,
and you need a helping hand,
and nothing, no nothing is going right,
Put your hands together,
and call His name out low.
Soon, He'll be knocking on your door.
You just call out His name,
And you know, whoever you are,
He'll come runnin to see you again.
Winter, Spring, Summer, or Fall,
All you've got to do is call,
And He'll be there, yes He will.
You've got a Friend."
Singing those words got me through many days at the brewery.
I love the octogram poem. It might even be my favourite.
I like the alliteration in
"breezes steal your bright balloon"
"should a cloud conceal the moon,
I've light to lend"
"make them mend"
"songs slip"
I like the reference to the kite-eating tree from Charlie Brown comic strips.
"If trees reach out to snatch your kite
before it has a chance at flight"... actually, the kite-eating tree will also eat pianos!
Poor little Sawyer looks pretty tired here.
Great poem, Brooke. Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Ah, I'm so glad I saved a six for this one, Brooke. So many of your poems remind me of a song. This one, of course, reminds me of James Taylor's "You've Got A Friend".
http://youtu.be/3WJ1cf3nrLE
Shortly after I became a Christian, around 1974, I was still at Moosehead Breweries and working with a bunch of old men, toiling in monotonous labour. I would stand at the soaker feed table, standing up bottles, picking out plastic and broken glass, and going quite cross-eyed and tired. I'd sing this song and change the words a bit,
"When you're down and troubled,
and you need a helping hand,
and nothing, no nothing is going right,
Put your hands together,
and call His name out low.
Soon, He'll be knocking on your door.
You just call out His name,
And you know, whoever you are,
He'll come runnin to see you again.
Winter, Spring, Summer, or Fall,
All you've got to do is call,
And He'll be there, yes He will.
You've got a Friend."
Singing those words got me through many days at the brewery.
I love the octogram poem. It might even be my favourite.
I like the alliteration in
"breezes steal your bright balloon"
"should a cloud conceal the moon,
I've light to lend"
"make them mend"
"songs slip"
I like the reference to the kite-eating tree from Charlie Brown comic strips.
"If trees reach out to snatch your kite
before it has a chance at flight"... actually, the kite-eating tree will also eat pianos!
Poor little Sawyer looks pretty tired here.
Great poem, Brooke. Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I also love that song :-) Thank you so much, Kimbob. Every Friday Miranda takes Sawyer to work with her, and he and Nora play to the point of exhaustion. This photo was after the long drive home :-) It actually isn't that far from Beverly Hills to Encino, but to a toddler it seems like forever at the end of a play day. LOL Brooke
Comment from judiverse
That certainly is a precious photo. This is such a lovely poem. I remember the song with the title "You've Got a Friend," but that was so long ago I can't remember the words. These are wonderful, imaginative thoughts in your poem, especially stealing your balloon or snatching your kite. The narrator's good heart would prompt him or her to do anything for the friend--try to help an out-of-tune song blend or keep a frown away. These are precious thoughts. Of course told with excellent rhyme and flow. judi
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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That certainly is a precious photo. This is such a lovely poem. I remember the song with the title "You've Got a Friend," but that was so long ago I can't remember the words. These are wonderful, imaginative thoughts in your poem, especially stealing your balloon or snatching your kite. The narrator's good heart would prompt him or her to do anything for the friend--try to help an out-of-tune song blend or keep a frown away. These are precious thoughts. Of course told with excellent rhyme and flow. judi
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Judy :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. We can see how fast Sawyer is growing! judi.
