You have a friend
a slightly modified Octogram163 total reviews
Comment from Cogitator
Heartwarming... If only we could extend this feeling to every creature on earth, we would re-create the Garden of Eden... Great job! ...John
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Heartwarming... If only we could extend this feeling to every creature on earth, we would re-create the Garden of Eden... Great job! ...John
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from Rondeno
What a totally delightful poem, Brooke! The sentiments are beautiful and heart-warming, and the versification is utterly blemish-free. Perfect!
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What a totally delightful poem, Brooke! The sentiments are beautiful and heart-warming, and the versification is utterly blemish-free. Perfect!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Michael, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Nicely said, a friend is there no matter the danger, problem or threat. I this modified form. It doesn't look easy to maintain with the continuous matching endings. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Nicely said, a friend is there no matter the danger, problem or threat. I this modified form. It doesn't look easy to maintain with the continuous matching endings. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of poetry beautifully depicting the quality of a sincere friend - A friend in need is a friend indeed!
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Smooth and pleasant flow throughout the poem.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
"There's nothing I won't try to do
to keep a frown away from you.
On this you always can depend --
You have a friend."
Excellent!
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Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of poetry beautifully depicting the quality of a sincere friend - A friend in need is a friend indeed!
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Smooth and pleasant flow throughout the poem.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
"There's nothing I won't try to do
to keep a frown away from you.
On this you always can depend --
You have a friend."
Excellent!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from daeneam
The kind of friend you described in your poem is the kind of friend everybody want to have in their life. Someone who will truly love you and put your friend's needs first before your needs. Two thumbs up, Brooke! c", Mae
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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The kind of friend you described in your poem is the kind of friend everybody want to have in their life. Someone who will truly love you and put your friend's needs first before your needs. Two thumbs up, Brooke! c", Mae
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Mae, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Brooke, this is a lovely poem with such lovely chosen words to express the friendship strongly felt. Just as it should be felt. The photo of sawyer is a brilliant one. (is that his blankie?)
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke, this is a lovely poem with such lovely chosen words to express the friendship strongly felt. Just as it should be felt. The photo of sawyer is a brilliant one. (is that his blankie?)
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Mary, thanks so much :-) It is like a blankie - it's called a lovey, which is a small-sized blankie that has an animal head attached to the end. He has more than a dozen of them, like a dog lovey, a monkey lovey... Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, this has such an interesting meter. I liked the way it lilted and waned. The a-b-a-b-c-d-c-d and so forth rhyme flowed well. Sweet write. :0 GracieAnn
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Brooke, this has such an interesting meter. I liked the way it lilted and waned. The a-b-a-b-c-d-c-d and so forth rhyme flowed well. Sweet write. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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GracieAnn, thank you :-) I love the distinctive sound of this form. Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
hello. Will you be my friend when my ice cream melts and hits the ground? I am such a child at heart that this poem made me go...ah, yes, that's it.
Cute, but very sad and happy all at once.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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hello. Will you be my friend when my ice cream melts and hits the ground? I am such a child at heart that this poem made me go...ah, yes, that's it.
Cute, but very sad and happy all at once.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Padumachitta - love your new example :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
Such wonderfu lyrics to create a wonderful song. The poem flows so perfectly that I believe that it deserves to be sung. So cheerful and uplifting.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Such wonderfu lyrics to create a wonderful song. The poem flows so perfectly that I believe that it deserves to be sung. So cheerful and uplifting.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from JavaJunkie
This is such a sweet and precious poem with a sweet and precious picture. This reminds me of a song my mom used to sing to me about how she would fix the things in my life if they went wrong....lol, can't remember the title! Love this, such a nice message.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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This is such a sweet and precious poem with a sweet and precious picture. This reminds me of a song my mom used to sing to me about how she would fix the things in my life if they went wrong....lol, can't remember the title! Love this, such a nice message.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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JavaJunkie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
