You have a friend
a slightly modified Octogram163 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
aaaww. such a sweet piece of poetic art! we all need friends like that, to pick up the pieces is something goes wrong and vice versa.
thank you for sharing brooke!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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aaaww. such a sweet piece of poetic art! we all need friends like that, to pick up the pieces is something goes wrong and vice versa.
thank you for sharing brooke!
rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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rebekka, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Brooke, this is a really great write. What more assurance does Sawyer need? To me, it is the top expression of unfailing love and support: no matter what. Thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Brooke, this is a really great write. What more assurance does Sawyer need? To me, it is the top expression of unfailing love and support: no matter what. Thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Bob, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generosity. Brooke
Comment from Autumn Splendour
A sweet, simple and childlike poem about a friend in need is a friend indeed.
The picture makes me think that the poem is meant for a child, like an adult comforting a child?
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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A sweet, simple and childlike poem about a friend in need is a friend indeed.
The picture makes me think that the poem is meant for a child, like an adult comforting a child?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Autumn Splendor, yes, the examples about balloons and kites demonstrate it's meant to comfort a child. Thank you for reviewing. Since a 4 rating indicates you believe the poem needs improvement, could you let me know what you would like revised?
Brooke
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Oh, OK. As I've said the poem is simple and childlike so it reads more like a nursery rhyme than a poem. I hope this explains
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
There's nothing I won't try to do
to keep a frown away from you.
On this you always can depend --
You have a friend.
this is such a simple little poem, but for me - it goes deep as I know it's written from your heart - what a friend!!
Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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There's nothing I won't try to do
to keep a frown away from you.
On this you always can depend --
You have a friend.
this is such a simple little poem, but for me - it goes deep as I know it's written from your heart - what a friend!!
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Margaret, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Bayberry
This is so precious. It's easy to tell that blanket is well-loved. A child needs security and what a joy to have a grandmother who understands. I enjoyed the terrific picture of Sawyer, too. Smiles, Janet
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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This is so precious. It's easy to tell that blanket is well-loved. A child needs security and what a joy to have a grandmother who understands. I enjoyed the terrific picture of Sawyer, too. Smiles, Janet
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Janet, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from expressions9
Beautifully written Brooke! I love this rhyme scheme and your words are heartwarming with great imagery. The message flows beautifully with nice alliteration and enjambment. What a wonderful photo of Sawyer ... you can just see those eyes getting ready to close!! :) (Should be a 6, but they've run out again!)
Thanks for sharing :) God bless, Christine
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Beautifully written Brooke! I love this rhyme scheme and your words are heartwarming with great imagery. The message flows beautifully with nice alliteration and enjambment. What a wonderful photo of Sawyer ... you can just see those eyes getting ready to close!! :) (Should be a 6, but they've run out again!)
Thanks for sharing :) God bless, Christine
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Christine, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
The art work here is so special.
Friendship is very special for us all
Also having lots fun we can become tired
Maybe needing a little rest.
Annie
I have no six
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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The art work here is so special.
Friendship is very special for us all
Also having lots fun we can become tired
Maybe needing a little rest.
Annie
I have no six
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Annie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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I loved what you wrote.
Annie
Comment from J.Byers
Sawyer looks like he needs a big sleep with his blanky when he gets home :-) A lovely poem, appropriate for all ages, as I feel the language would appeal to children, as well as adults. The situations you reference in your work are certainly focused very much on children, but, I don't imagine that's a coincidence, as I'm sure you wrote this with Sawyer in mind. Your love for him shines through in your poetry, and brings a smile to my face.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Sawyer looks like he needs a big sleep with his blanky when he gets home :-) A lovely poem, appropriate for all ages, as I feel the language would appeal to children, as well as adults. The situations you reference in your work are certainly focused very much on children, but, I don't imagine that's a coincidence, as I'm sure you wrote this with Sawyer in mind. Your love for him shines through in your poetry, and brings a smile to my face.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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J, thanks so much. Yep, he was all tuckered out after a very long day :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Quite a refreshing return to reviewing. I have been somewhat off the radar for the last few weeks, but hope to get back to more frequent site visits. Keep writing these little paeans to joyful life. They do this old heart good.
Best regards
Reg
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Dear Brooke,
Quite a refreshing return to reviewing. I have been somewhat off the radar for the last few weeks, but hope to get back to more frequent site visits. Keep writing these little paeans to joyful life. They do this old heart good.
Best regards
Reg
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Reg, how lovely to hear from you. I hope you are well, my friend. Thank you for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
This wonderful poem should be in a book of motivational verse for children; or be turned into a song for a musical about 'Friends'. It has an amazing rhythm that just lifts off the page as you read; and the concept of always being there to lift 'the friend' at a moment of need is just sweet. My favourite bit:and should a cloud conceal the moon,
I've light to lend.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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This wonderful poem should be in a book of motivational verse for children; or be turned into a song for a musical about 'Friends'. It has an amazing rhythm that just lifts off the page as you read; and the concept of always being there to lift 'the friend' at a moment of need is just sweet. My favourite bit:and should a cloud conceal the moon,
I've light to lend.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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mfowler, thank you so much :-) brooke
