You have a friend
a slightly modified Octogram163 total reviews
Comment from fastdigits
Well, of course, before I read
even one of your poetic words, I'm
captured with the picture of Sawyer.
Then the curtains part, and the
artistry that is yours alone takes
the stage and suddenly the whole
world lights up and the audience
is on their feet clapping and yelling
author, author.
Well done
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Well, of course, before I read
even one of your poetic words, I'm
captured with the picture of Sawyer.
Then the curtains part, and the
artistry that is yours alone takes
the stage and suddenly the whole
world lights up and the audience
is on their feet clapping and yelling
author, author.
Well done
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much for your wonderfully encouraging comments and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is wonderful in my opinion.
A beautiful picture of a really handsome fella.
An octogram which I just happen to love to read.
It is so very lyrical! A refreshing poem to read
first thing this morning. Thank you Brooke.
I love it. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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This is wonderful in my opinion.
A beautiful picture of a really handsome fella.
An octogram which I just happen to love to read.
It is so very lyrical! A refreshing poem to read
first thing this morning. Thank you Brooke.
I love it. Nancy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
What a sweet poem you wrote for your darling grandson, Sawyer. I love the way you rhyme it too. It's a very interesting read. I'll have to try a Octogram poem some day.
Kat
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What a sweet poem you wrote for your darling grandson, Sawyer. I love the way you rhyme it too. It's a very interesting read. I'll have to try a Octogram poem some day.
Kat
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Kat, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Ooh! Poor little darling. Him all tuckered out, grandma! LOL! So cute, Brooke. I'd be writing him poetry, too. Those eyes!
Your protective instincts shine through your work, Brooke. I can almost hear your tone of voice as I read it. Wish I'd had a grandma like you. Mine was grand and scary. Very French Acadian and disapproving, mainly. Sad, uh? LOL! I'm over it, but I still envy Sawyer. Well done, girl!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Ooh! Poor little darling. Him all tuckered out, grandma! LOL! So cute, Brooke. I'd be writing him poetry, too. Those eyes!
Your protective instincts shine through your work, Brooke. I can almost hear your tone of voice as I read it. Wish I'd had a grandma like you. Mine was grand and scary. Very French Acadian and disapproving, mainly. Sad, uh? LOL! I'm over it, but I still envy Sawyer. Well done, girl!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much :-) My kids only had one grandma too, and she was a wicked witch. LOL That is why it's so important to me that Sawyer has a great grandma experience. :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
This is just darling...I wish I had a six to send...and if you thought you needed one, I'd be your friend...Sawyer is adorable as usual...my week old Granddaughter is sooooooo precious...I call her Little Squeak.
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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This is just darling...I wish I had a six to send...and if you thought you needed one, I'd be your friend...Sawyer is adorable as usual...my week old Granddaughter is sooooooo precious...I call her Little Squeak.
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Little Squeak, I love it :-) Thanks so much, fellow grandma :-) Brooke
Comment from Joy Graham
Lovely octogram, Brooke. Another delightful picture of Sawyer :) love your modifications on the repeated line. Good simple and solid rhyme choices. Terrific message that a friend is there for you even when the road is long.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Lovely octogram, Brooke. Another delightful picture of Sawyer :) love your modifications on the repeated line. Good simple and solid rhyme choices. Terrific message that a friend is there for you even when the road is long.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Joy, thanks so much :-) This picture just makes me want to scoop him up and cover him with kisses. Brooke
Comment from Cedar
I love the message behind your words. Wouldn't it be a wonderful world if we all felt like that? Little Sawyer does look wore out and ready for bed. Take Care. Bill
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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I love the message behind your words. Wouldn't it be a wonderful world if we all felt like that? Little Sawyer does look wore out and ready for bed. Take Care. Bill
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, Brooke, Sawyer's really getting to be a big guy. They grow up far too quickly, don't they?
I'm not sure what an Octogram poem is supposed to be, in technical terms, nor how this one is slightly modified. I'll have to do the research and see what you meant there.
What I DO know is that I liked the style and what this one had to say. It looks as if it's structure goes: 8,4,8,4,8,8,8,4 in syllable count, for each stanza, and I'm still trying to figure out iambic tetrameter, and all of that. I now know that iambic meter starts down and then up in two syllables known as feet. There's 10 syllables or 5 feet in pentameter (penta meaning 5), tetrameter is 8 syllables or 4 feet (tetra meaning 4 measures in music), but I'm learning this all on my own, and before coming to FS, I'd never really written poetry.
I'm thinking of taking a class here, to help me better understand and comprehend these concepts. Got any suggestions?
Anyhow, it was an excellent poem, another job well done!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Wow, Brooke, Sawyer's really getting to be a big guy. They grow up far too quickly, don't they?
I'm not sure what an Octogram poem is supposed to be, in technical terms, nor how this one is slightly modified. I'll have to do the research and see what you meant there.
What I DO know is that I liked the style and what this one had to say. It looks as if it's structure goes: 8,4,8,4,8,8,8,4 in syllable count, for each stanza, and I'm still trying to figure out iambic tetrameter, and all of that. I now know that iambic meter starts down and then up in two syllables known as feet. There's 10 syllables or 5 feet in pentameter (penta meaning 5), tetrameter is 8 syllables or 4 feet (tetra meaning 4 measures in music), but I'm learning this all on my own, and before coming to FS, I'd never really written poetry.
I'm thinking of taking a class here, to help me better understand and comprehend these concepts. Got any suggestions?
Anyhow, it was an excellent poem, another job well done!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Dean, thank you :-) You've done a great job in figuring out the structure. You have the meter and syllable count down. The rhyme scheme is aBabccbB ababddbB - the capital letters designate the refrain line, which is where I've made the modifications. I have a course in rhyme and meter scheduled for early May. I would love to have you join it :-) Brooke
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I'll be there, you can count on it. Just don't be too hard on me, lol...
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I have a bunch of former students who will attest to the fact that I am a nice person and patient teacher. :-)
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I'm sure you are. You've always been very patient with me, ha ha!
Comment from skye
I love this poem. If each person could count on one person to be there as a friend for any and everything, how lucky we would all be.
Perfect lines, perfect picture.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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I love this poem. If each person could count on one person to be there as a friend for any and everything, how lucky we would all be.
Perfect lines, perfect picture.
Excellent.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Skye, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
this poem sure fills a lot of good character. It's endearing, compassionate, supportive, loyal, loving and honest. Love the beat of the lines and the rhymes.
good one here Brooke
lulube
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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this poem sure fills a lot of good character. It's endearing, compassionate, supportive, loyal, loving and honest. Love the beat of the lines and the rhymes.
good one here Brooke
lulube
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Lulube, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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welcome
lulube
