You have a friend
a slightly modified Octogram163 total reviews
Comment from Cajungirl
Exceptional poem. Whst a wonderful short read just before bedtime. Would also make a great little song. I will be sharing this one.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Exceptional poem. Whst a wonderful short read just before bedtime. Would also make a great little song. I will be sharing this one.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are welcome
Comment from Alan K Pease
I have borrowed a verse from a recent poem written by John Kingsland that describes you and your writing;
"Reality is a personal perception of life
Life is a perception of a personal reality"
We look at Sawyer and see you
We look at you and see Sawyer
Your devotion to family have brought us riches.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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I have borrowed a verse from a recent poem written by John Kingsland that describes you and your writing;
"Reality is a personal perception of life
Life is a perception of a personal reality"
We look at Sawyer and see you
We look at you and see Sawyer
Your devotion to family have brought us riches.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Alan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
If you have a friend, that's a lovely picture of Sawyer,looks like he is tired. that's a beautiful expressed
poem, nice form and rhyme, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!Lakeport.+
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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If you have a friend, that's a lovely picture of Sawyer,looks like he is tired. that's a beautiful expressed
poem, nice form and rhyme, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!Lakeport.+
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Lakeport, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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your welcome,Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment from ravenblack
Figuratively, this applies to all true friendships be the between kids or adults. I know there is at least one red balloon I would like back. My only small nit is in " and should your songs slip out of tune, I'll make them end". Why not something like I will bring them into harmony or I will harmonize? Not those actual words as that would throw off the rhyme scheme , but just cutting the song off- and I know you did not mean it this way-sounds harsh.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Figuratively, this applies to all true friendships be the between kids or adults. I know there is at least one red balloon I would like back. My only small nit is in " and should your songs slip out of tune, I'll make them end". Why not something like I will bring them into harmony or I will harmonize? Not those actual words as that would throw off the rhyme scheme , but just cutting the song off- and I know you did not mean it this way-sounds harsh.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, ravenblack. I have since changed that line :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi,Brooke :-)
"You Have Friend" is an excellent celebration of love for a young child. It has delightful rhyme and meter, It has good figurative language and imagery (breezes steal your bright baloon.)The whole poem is a metaphor for the ways in which an adult helps a child.
Preston
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Hi,Brooke :-)
"You Have Friend" is an excellent celebration of love for a young child. It has delightful rhyme and meter, It has good figurative language and imagery (breezes steal your bright baloon.)The whole poem is a metaphor for the ways in which an adult helps a child.
Preston
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Preston, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
What a precious picture of Sawyer and a perfect prompt
for your charming poem about friendship.
The examples you mention would give anyone
a boost, especially a sweet little boy.
Great rhyme and meter and a super repeating line.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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What a precious picture of Sawyer and a perfect prompt
for your charming poem about friendship.
The examples you mention would give anyone
a boost, especially a sweet little boy.
Great rhyme and meter and a super repeating line.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from annie-angel
this is just lovely! I enjoyed reading it several times over. it was simple, loving, touching, and flowed beautifully. thank you sharing and enriching my day! annie
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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this is just lovely! I enjoyed reading it several times over. it was simple, loving, touching, and flowed beautifully. thank you sharing and enriching my day! annie
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Annie, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
A friend indeed, and what more could a little cherub need?
A nice little write with emphasis on the child. Something after my own heart.
The little man is a charming as ever.
He will have great memories to cherish.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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A friend indeed, and what more could a little cherub need?
A nice little write with emphasis on the child. Something after my own heart.
The little man is a charming as ever.
He will have great memories to cherish.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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RG, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
What a beautifully crafted poem. I love the language you used and of course the rhyming was true to the story, nothing forced as usual. Sawyer looks comforted by his security blanket. I hope that's right. I'm still looking out of one good eye without my glasses. Smile
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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What a beautifully crafted poem. I love the language you used and of course the rhyming was true to the story, nothing forced as usual. Sawyer looks comforted by his security blanket. I hope that's right. I'm still looking out of one good eye without my glasses. Smile
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
A beautiful poem Brooke, I think maybe, for someone who lives a few kilometres away! I love, particularly the way you have used the descriptive language, the rhythm is variable but works! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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A beautiful poem Brooke, I think maybe, for someone who lives a few kilometres away! I love, particularly the way you have used the descriptive language, the rhythm is variable but works! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
