In the Glow of the Midnight Moon
rhyming quatrains in mixed meter147 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The rhyme is perfect, Brooke, the rhythm, just like the rolls of the sea. It is true, the ocean and the moon connect to each other and together pull you in. Beautifully written and such a pleasure to read. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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The rhyme is perfect, Brooke, the rhythm, just like the rolls of the sea. It is true, the ocean and the moon connect to each other and together pull you in. Beautifully written and such a pleasure to read. :) Sandra
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Sandra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
"In the glow of the midnight moon"- sounds like many of us tugged into the tide on insomniac nights as our siren muse sings , write write write. It seems a bit ominous at the end, dawn no more hold and now only answering to the sea...
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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"In the glow of the midnight moon"- sounds like many of us tugged into the tide on insomniac nights as our siren muse sings , write write write. It seems a bit ominous at the end, dawn no more hold and now only answering to the sea...
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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ravenblack, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
There is indeed something haunting about the call of the sea, especially at night when the moon commands the tide. I especially like the simile of the lover "who can't resist a seductress who gets her way." Every rhyme is natural and the flow of each verse is like the rhythm of the sea. One of your best, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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There is indeed something haunting about the call of the sea, especially at night when the moon commands the tide. I especially like the simile of the lover "who can't resist a seductress who gets her way." Every rhyme is natural and the flow of each verse is like the rhythm of the sea. One of your best, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Rod, thank you so much for your encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
I don't live near an ocean, but I wish I did. I only strolled down a moonlit beach once, and it was so awesome. This is very well done.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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I don't live near an ocean, but I wish I did. I only strolled down a moonlit beach once, and it was so awesome. This is very well done.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
This is so enchanting and can be interpreted on different levels. From a mystical POV, the voice of the poem speaks to following the commands of God. From a pragmatic POV, I feel it is commentary on how we humans are simply a small part of nature. Despite our intellect, we (subconsciously perhaps) must follow certain cosmic laws on this planet. Well done!
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is so enchanting and can be interpreted on different levels. From a mystical POV, the voice of the poem speaks to following the commands of God. From a pragmatic POV, I feel it is commentary on how we humans are simply a small part of nature. Despite our intellect, we (subconsciously perhaps) must follow certain cosmic laws on this planet. Well done!
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Chris Petersen
A truly enchanting piece that stimulates the sensation of the rise and fall and spring and ebb of oceans deep. Rhyming pattern is consistent and solid throughout. A very enjoyable read. Nice one Brooke...Chris.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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A truly enchanting piece that stimulates the sensation of the rise and fall and spring and ebb of oceans deep. Rhyming pattern is consistent and solid throughout. A very enjoyable read. Nice one Brooke...Chris.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
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Chris, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
I really liked what you did in this poem metrically. It gave the stanzas a kind of syncopation, like African drumming.
It's been a while since I've given you any criticism, but I'd like to say, that as number one poet, acknowledged master of form and meter, I'd like to challange you to go beyond form and think of word choice. Words like "restless sea, roiling waves, ocean's depths are rather hackneyed. One can "dadda-dum" all day long, but is that all there is to poetry? I say this in some sense to the people that think free verse is not poetry (some of it is terrible), where it's metered OK, but there is clunky grammar, cliched word usage and lines where the main goal is to rhyme with a previous line.
I say this with respect to the depth and breadth of your talents--Ted
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Dear Brooke,
I really liked what you did in this poem metrically. It gave the stanzas a kind of syncopation, like African drumming.
It's been a while since I've given you any criticism, but I'd like to say, that as number one poet, acknowledged master of form and meter, I'd like to challange you to go beyond form and think of word choice. Words like "restless sea, roiling waves, ocean's depths are rather hackneyed. One can "dadda-dum" all day long, but is that all there is to poetry? I say this in some sense to the people that think free verse is not poetry (some of it is terrible), where it's metered OK, but there is clunky grammar, cliched word usage and lines where the main goal is to rhyme with a previous line.
I say this with respect to the depth and breadth of your talents--Ted
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Ted, thank you for reviewing Brooke
Comment from Rubylou
Beautiful words with a mystic feel is what comes to my mind as I read your poem. Enjoyable read as your words flow like the ocean waves. The artwork compliments the enchanting feel of the sea. Rubylou
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Beautiful words with a mystic feel is what comes to my mind as I read your poem. Enjoyable read as your words flow like the ocean waves. The artwork compliments the enchanting feel of the sea. Rubylou
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Rubylou, thank you so much for your encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from cantrhymetoogood
Beautiful! Listening to the sea is much the same as listening to the wind, the mountains, the forest and so many life forms that inhabit this planet. We need our special place to sit quietly and listen.
Thank you for this lovely write.
When the call of the Siren's heard
and the words of the sea are said,
I go to her as in a trance
with a soul that fears no dread.
Those 4 lines a poem in them selves.
I hope those darned "A's" don't pop up on my cut and paste. If they do please ignore them....Robert
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Beautiful! Listening to the sea is much the same as listening to the wind, the mountains, the forest and so many life forms that inhabit this planet. We need our special place to sit quietly and listen.
Thank you for this lovely write.
When the call of the Siren's heard
and the words of the sea are said,
I go to her as in a trance
with a soul that fears no dread.
Those 4 lines a poem in them selves.
I hope those darned "A's" don't pop up on my cut and paste. If they do please ignore them....Robert
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Robert, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A most enjoyable verse with a strong even flow. THe meaning can be direct or
interpreted as different readers find answers to their own needs. A
very enjoyable read and the art work is well chosen. Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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A most enjoyable verse with a strong even flow. THe meaning can be direct or
interpreted as different readers find answers to their own needs. A
very enjoyable read and the art work is well chosen. Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Robin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
