In the Glow of the Midnight Moon
rhyming quatrains in mixed meter147 total reviews
Comment from 1954speed
What can I say? My inexperienced heine has no business rating this excellent work. I can certainly feel the rhythm as I enjoy this poem. Just wanted to let you know I liked this!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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What can I say? My inexperienced heine has no business rating this excellent work. I can certainly feel the rhythm as I enjoy this poem. Just wanted to let you know I liked this!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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1954speed, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. I enjoyed reading this out loud. The meter is good for that:-)
I love the ocen, I could her the sirnes call. I know the seduction strenght of her touch on the beach.
Your poem captured the moment of ocean and night, a little magic.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Hello. I enjoyed reading this out loud. The meter is good for that:-)
I love the ocen, I could her the sirnes call. I know the seduction strenght of her touch on the beach.
Your poem captured the moment of ocean and night, a little magic.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Liandra
Enjoyed this poem, it followed the beat of the words and sounds in my mind.
The moon and the sea have held hidden temptations for anyone who has an open mind. You have found the right words to describe the lure of the sounds of the Siren.
Well done,
Liandra
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Enjoyed this poem, it followed the beat of the words and sounds in my mind.
The moon and the sea have held hidden temptations for anyone who has an open mind. You have found the right words to describe the lure of the sounds of the Siren.
Well done,
Liandra
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Liandra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the call of the sea that will not let go of the heart. i love the next to the last quatrain the best
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the call of the sea that will not let go of the heart. i love the next to the last quatrain the best
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from the blue pixel
I really enjoyed this unusual metre Brooke. "the words of the sea" - what a creative way to describe the noises of the ocean. I don't believe I have ever read a piece quite this from you before and it was somehow, conversational, more prose like perhaps than your usual style. I am sure that these are not good words to use for what you have done here but I liked it a lot. xxx Carol
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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I really enjoyed this unusual metre Brooke. "the words of the sea" - what a creative way to describe the noises of the ocean. I don't believe I have ever read a piece quite this from you before and it was somehow, conversational, more prose like perhaps than your usual style. I am sure that these are not good words to use for what you have done here but I liked it a lot. xxx Carol
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Carol, thank you so much for this thoughtful reading :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme.
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Smooth and enchanting flow
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
The most striking lines are:
"Like the tides from the ocean's depths
pull away at the moon's commands,
I entertain no thought at all
but to follow her demands."
Excellent!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme.
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Smooth and enchanting flow
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
The most striking lines are:
"Like the tides from the ocean's depths
pull away at the moon's commands,
I entertain no thought at all
but to follow her demands."
Excellent!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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RP, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I love this. The ocean has this affect on many including myself. Maybe it is an artists thing since standing in front of it feels like being in the middle of a giant living metaphor. The flow of this struck me immediately. THIS is how I would naturally write meter. I struggle with iambic terribly. A meter class would be a great thing...hint, hint, hint. There are a lot of us metrically challenged here. Maybe it is a U.S. thing since we have an aversion to the metric system and can't make a distinction. Nah. I don't go off on tangents! Love this beautiful piece, mikey
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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I love this. The ocean has this affect on many including myself. Maybe it is an artists thing since standing in front of it feels like being in the middle of a giant living metaphor. The flow of this struck me immediately. THIS is how I would naturally write meter. I struggle with iambic terribly. A meter class would be a great thing...hint, hint, hint. There are a lot of us metrically challenged here. Maybe it is a U.S. thing since we have an aversion to the metric system and can't make a distinction. Nah. I don't go off on tangents! Love this beautiful piece, mikey
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, mikey - I teach a class in meter and rhyme in poetry. Another session starts in early May, and this is one of the classes I have listed :-) Would love to see you there! Brooke
Comment from marijmd
Great rhyme scheme! What a lovely flow to the words - definitely a piece to be read out loud. I love the line of the crashing sea being a voice in the waves!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Great rhyme scheme! What a lovely flow to the words - definitely a piece to be read out loud. I love the line of the crashing sea being a voice in the waves!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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marijmd, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Brooke, this is a true masterpiece. I have been listening to the Atlantic waves all last week and they did have a broken but repeated pattern just the way your poem does. While reading your write, I had to check to see I was truly home and not hearing the ocean waves. I like your personifications and the overall experience of the picture poem pair. Thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Brooke, this is a true masterpiece. I have been listening to the Atlantic waves all last week and they did have a broken but repeated pattern just the way your poem does. While reading your write, I had to check to see I was truly home and not hearing the ocean waves. I like your personifications and the overall experience of the picture poem pair. Thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Bob, thank you so very much, my generous friend. I truly appreciate your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
In the Glow of the Midnight Moon is another outstanding rhyming quatrain. Perfect rhythm, rhyme and prose. I could hear the waves. Well done as always!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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In the Glow of the Midnight Moon is another outstanding rhyming quatrain. Perfect rhythm, rhyme and prose. I could hear the waves. Well done as always!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Steve, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
