In the Glow of the Midnight Moon
rhyming quatrains in mixed meter147 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
In the glow of the moon, so enchanting and tantalizing, we must have gone into a beautiful trance.
With the lunar moon and its gravitational pull, our minds can be put into a serene mood and be a bit lunatic.
Coupled with the swish-swash of the waves, WE looked out the vast ocean and find ourselves following the rhythmic yo-yo of the waves rolling in and then out to sea.
A very beautiful piece of poetry to let us appreciate the mood by the sea-side on a moonlit bright night, smiles.
Great work and truly enjoyable to read.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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In the glow of the moon, so enchanting and tantalizing, we must have gone into a beautiful trance.
With the lunar moon and its gravitational pull, our minds can be put into a serene mood and be a bit lunatic.
Coupled with the swish-swash of the waves, WE looked out the vast ocean and find ourselves following the rhythmic yo-yo of the waves rolling in and then out to sea.
A very beautiful piece of poetry to let us appreciate the mood by the sea-side on a moonlit bright night, smiles.
Great work and truly enjoyable to read.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Ritchie :-) Brooke
Comment from seaglass
This is so beautiful, it should be a song. Something sang softly to classical guitar. I love the ocean and just yesterday, I sat, mesmerized for much of the afternoon, feeling what you described.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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This is so beautiful, it should be a song. Something sang softly to classical guitar. I love the ocean and just yesterday, I sat, mesmerized for much of the afternoon, feeling what you described.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke,
This a great poem very good rhythm and rhyme. It reads well and romatically depicts a call of the sea to what purpose I cannot say. But does not seem to be that of a sailor.
Preston
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
This a great poem very good rhythm and rhyme. It reads well and romatically depicts a call of the sea to what purpose I cannot say. But does not seem to be that of a sailor.
Preston
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Preston, thank you so much for your thoughtful reading of this poem and your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Gladness
Lovely. Both the moon and the sea can be enchanting. In this poem they seem to work together to draw the writher, as under a spell, to the beckoning sea.
Well done,
Anita
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Lovely. Both the moon and the sea can be enchanting. In this poem they seem to work together to draw the writher, as under a spell, to the beckoning sea.
Well done,
Anita
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Anita, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Such a beautiful, haunting poem, Brooke. I can see that you too are under the spell of the moon. The crescent moon knocked my socks off last night and I am in the midst of trying to capture that feeling in a poem.
You do seem to have a gypsy's heart, Brooke. You may have been a tad more stationary than I have been in life, but your mind, heart and soul are born adventurers.
Hugs, your fan, d
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Such a beautiful, haunting poem, Brooke. I can see that you too are under the spell of the moon. The crescent moon knocked my socks off last night and I am in the midst of trying to capture that feeling in a poem.
You do seem to have a gypsy's heart, Brooke. You may have been a tad more stationary than I have been in life, but your mind, heart and soul are born adventurers.
Hugs, your fan, d
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Diane, thank you, my friend :-) Yep, I was born to be a world traveler but someone forgot to provide the budget. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Wow, Brooke--this is haunting and impressive. I LOVE how the mixed meter makes it SOUND like waves. Well done. Sounds great read aloud with the oceanic cadences and fine rhyming.
Excellent poetic devices, like alliteration and consonance (especially of S and L sounds). I particularly like the eloquent voicing of the repeated line:
In the glow of the midnight moon
Favorite stanza:
Like the tides from the ocean's depths
pull away at the moon's commands,
I entertain no thought at all
but to follow her demands.
Creative and unique.
And what a stunning presentation. I love Sharon's paintings. This one fits perfectly.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Wow, Brooke--this is haunting and impressive. I LOVE how the mixed meter makes it SOUND like waves. Well done. Sounds great read aloud with the oceanic cadences and fine rhyming.
Excellent poetic devices, like alliteration and consonance (especially of S and L sounds). I particularly like the eloquent voicing of the repeated line:
In the glow of the midnight moon
Favorite stanza:
Like the tides from the ocean's depths
pull away at the moon's commands,
I entertain no thought at all
but to follow her demands.
Creative and unique.
And what a stunning presentation. I love Sharon's paintings. This one fits perfectly.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, rama devi - I appreciate your thoughtful reading :-) Brooke
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:-))
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, a gently spooky ballad of the lure of sea and
moon. As always your rhymes and meters work naturally, without force or warp.
It's the mood that enthralls in this poem. At once trance-like, and rueful. Something unsaid. Perhaps, something unsayable. Like the tide.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Ah, a gently spooky ballad of the lure of sea and
moon. As always your rhymes and meters work naturally, without force or warp.
It's the mood that enthralls in this poem. At once trance-like, and rueful. Something unsaid. Perhaps, something unsayable. Like the tide.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Lee, thank you so very much, my thoughtful and generous friend :-) Brooke
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Thoughtful? I hope so. Generous? When deserving. As you usually are. L
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I lovvve the rolling rhythm, like waves itself, so very fitting here. The content is a bit creepy, as it sounds like the person is going to her death, but hopefully she's only taking a walk on the beach. :)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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I lovvve the rolling rhythm, like waves itself, so very fitting here. The content is a bit creepy, as it sounds like the person is going to her death, but hopefully she's only taking a walk on the beach. :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Phyllis, thank you :-) The meaning is open to interpretation :-) Brooke
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Did you invent that meter mix or see it somewhere? Does it have a name? I really like it and would like to copy it sometime.
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using mixed meter is not uncommon - Twas the night before Christmas mixes anapestic and iambic meter - it is very difficult to do a poem in ALL anapestic meter - as to whether anyone has ever mixed the two meters in this exact pattern, I have no idea. :-) Brooke
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Isn't a limerick all anapestic? Maybe that's why I like that form so much. Too bad it's used for off-color stuff. I've used it for "normal" topics, and so has Louise.
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there ONCE was a MAN from nanTUCKet
lots of lines in many limericks are mixed meter including some anapestic feet :-)
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If the WORLD'S greatest POet ain't BROOKE
then I THINK you should TAKE a new LOOK
for her MEter is FINE
along EVery LINE
It's too BAD she has NO time to COOK
There.. all anapestic. Not well thought out, but it's all dah dah DUM. But you're right, of course, one more or less dah here and there makes no difference.
Comment from RYME4U
I love the rhythm, IT is symbolic of the way the waves go up and down. Very appropriate match to your words. This is a delightful read with a kind of yearning to it. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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I love the rhythm, IT is symbolic of the way the waves go up and down. Very appropriate match to your words. This is a delightful read with a kind of yearning to it. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, RYME4U :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
I'll be honest, Brooke, this was exceptionally lovely, a beautiful poem. However, when someone spells out just exactly how the cadence goes, i.e., "dadaDUM dadaDUM daDUM", etc., I often find myself concentrating more on that than I do on the actual words. I'm just being honest here, and not trying to be critical.
I write poetry in much the same way, as I'm sure you can probably tell, being the learned teacher that you are. I'm sure it's probably just me who feels this way, but I just felt I'd relay that to you.
All that being said, this was one whale of a sea going tale! And once I read the poem aloud, and quit worrying about the cadence, it really resonated with me. Being a sea lover myself, I could certainly relate to this alluring call.
I wish I had a sixer to give you, but a virtual one will have to suffice for now. Mine were all used up around Wednesday. You know how we men are when it comes to saving, LOL...
***** +
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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I'll be honest, Brooke, this was exceptionally lovely, a beautiful poem. However, when someone spells out just exactly how the cadence goes, i.e., "dadaDUM dadaDUM daDUM", etc., I often find myself concentrating more on that than I do on the actual words. I'm just being honest here, and not trying to be critical.
I write poetry in much the same way, as I'm sure you can probably tell, being the learned teacher that you are. I'm sure it's probably just me who feels this way, but I just felt I'd relay that to you.
All that being said, this was one whale of a sea going tale! And once I read the poem aloud, and quit worrying about the cadence, it really resonated with me. Being a sea lover myself, I could certainly relate to this alluring call.
I wish I had a sixer to give you, but a virtual one will have to suffice for now. Mine were all used up around Wednesday. You know how we men are when it comes to saving, LOL...
***** +
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Dean, for your feedback. I find that many readers/reviewers on this site try to overlay iambic meter on whatever they read, so if I don't head them in the right direction, they end up telling me they couldn't find the rhythm.
I figure it's easier to explain the metrical pattern once than explaining it to eighteen folks who ask. LOL :-) Brooke
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Or, you could do like me, and say ..."I don't know." (LOL!)
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LOL - maybe I will try that next time :-)
