Hello, I'm John Grisham
A short story contest entry. Write about this picture.25 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is a delightful read, Mikey, and excels in plot development, pacing, suspense, dialogue, description - the works. I enjoyed it very much. Highly creative approach to this prompt.
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This is a delightful read, Mikey, and excels in plot development, pacing, suspense, dialogue, description - the works. I enjoyed it very much. Highly creative approach to this prompt.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
Comment from Petriesan
This brings to me memories of the few writers conferences I have been to....at the insistence of a publisher friend of mine.... the females were....um... all too willing to invite me to their rooms..
nice piece
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This brings to me memories of the few writers conferences I have been to....at the insistence of a publisher friend of mine.... the females were....um... all too willing to invite me to their rooms..
nice piece
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from l.raven
OMG Michael...who would have known...what a surprising ending...what a write...don't know how you do it...so veryyyyyyyyyyyyyyy well told story...great job you...Luff Linda xxoo
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OMG Michael...who would have known...what a surprising ending...what a write...don't know how you do it...so veryyyyyyyyyyyyyyy well told story...great job you...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. She was a better player than you. She did trade you a story. You let us in on a secret. We save our best stories for when we are trying to impress the opposite sex. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the story. She was a better player than you. She did trade you a story. You let us in on a secret. We save our best stories for when we are trying to impress the opposite sex. Great work.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent, Mikey! This is one contest I will NOT be entering. The twist at the end was something else, a real brilliantly written story completely taking the illustration needed to be in the story, right over the top! Well done and good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
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Excellent, Mikey! This is one contest I will NOT be entering. The twist at the end was something else, a real brilliantly written story completely taking the illustration needed to be in the story, right over the top! Well done and good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Okay, you've tried this ruse before, haven't you? Next time, try on James Patterson - the man has more ghost writers than a haunted house and the deception would probably be complete. I liked the twist at the end. Just don't go riding naked in Amish country.
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Okay, you've tried this ruse before, haven't you? Next time, try on James Patterson - the man has more ghost writers than a haunted house and the deception would probably be complete. I liked the twist at the end. Just don't go riding naked in Amish country.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
Comment from closetpoetjester
OMG this was SIMPLY marvellous. I had NO idea where this was going, except for the bedroom of course and I was rooting for you the whole time as to how the hell you were going to explain everything ONCE she caught you out. Hopefully AFTER you'd made hot salacious love. I was really hoping for a giant face slap followed by a killer heel in the abdomen maybe! LOL
Seems like you had the wool pulled firmly over your own eyes by none other than the wife of the man himself. Now THAT'S an ending like no other and totally unexpected. Perfectly written and wickedly deceptive read for me and equally as deceptive write for you. Well done. I love the irony of this as you fooled your readers into the feeling and mindset that you were the one doing the fooling when in fact it was she who had you clearly flummoxed...AND yet as the author here you knew the whole time! So it was the audience who were well and truly on the end of this expert Tom Foolery by your er...nib. LOL Really terrific writing. Great premise and wonderfully sexecuted! LOL
Cheers P
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OMG this was SIMPLY marvellous. I had NO idea where this was going, except for the bedroom of course and I was rooting for you the whole time as to how the hell you were going to explain everything ONCE she caught you out. Hopefully AFTER you'd made hot salacious love. I was really hoping for a giant face slap followed by a killer heel in the abdomen maybe! LOL
Seems like you had the wool pulled firmly over your own eyes by none other than the wife of the man himself. Now THAT'S an ending like no other and totally unexpected. Perfectly written and wickedly deceptive read for me and equally as deceptive write for you. Well done. I love the irony of this as you fooled your readers into the feeling and mindset that you were the one doing the fooling when in fact it was she who had you clearly flummoxed...AND yet as the author here you knew the whole time! So it was the audience who were well and truly on the end of this expert Tom Foolery by your er...nib. LOL Really terrific writing. Great premise and wonderfully sexecuted! LOL
Cheers P
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from Ritsal
Okay, that tears it! I just ripped my draft entry from the typewriter and shoved it down the paper shredder, knowing there was no way I could compete with the Grisham "family."
This kept my rapt attention from beginning to end. When I first saw the prompt, I just knew it was an invitation for everyone to use the warning flags. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Rita
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Okay, that tears it! I just ripped my draft entry from the typewriter and shoved it down the paper shredder, knowing there was no way I could compete with the Grisham "family."
This kept my rapt attention from beginning to end. When I first saw the prompt, I just knew it was an invitation for everyone to use the warning flags. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Rita
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Love the description of women with natural charisma/magnetism - my older sister has always told me her college roommate was such a person
are you here for the lecture - Are
What evidence laid on the tables - lay/past tense of to lie
I'll be certain to do just that, Noni - add comma for direct address
LOL - love the closing :-)
Excellent dialogue throughout
Brooke
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Love the description of women with natural charisma/magnetism - my older sister has always told me her college roommate was such a person
are you here for the lecture - Are
What evidence laid on the tables - lay/past tense of to lie
I'll be certain to do just that, Noni - add comma for direct address
LOL - love the closing :-)
Excellent dialogue throughout
Brooke
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
Comment from Ric Myworld
LOL. Thanks for your outstanding read. I enjoyed every word and was engrossed from the first sentence. I can assume what happened, but I'm jealous that it didn't happen to me. Great job. :-)
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LOL. Thanks for your outstanding read. I enjoyed every word and was engrossed from the first sentence. I can assume what happened, but I'm jealous that it didn't happen to me. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
