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Acrostic - a little truth cloaked in anapaestic mumbo-jumbo22 total reviews
Comment from jadapenn
Haven't met the pope so don't care if he's Catholic. lol. I'm not. Loved you mumbo jumbo poem. Yes, I think the animals must think that humans are terribly stupid, crazy, numbskulls. We don't enjoy half the nature they do. We're too busy chasing other things. Well penned and best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Haven't met the pope so don't care if he's Catholic. lol. I'm not. Loved you mumbo jumbo poem. Yes, I think the animals must think that humans are terribly stupid, crazy, numbskulls. We don't enjoy half the nature they do. We're too busy chasing other things. Well penned and best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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jada, thnks for the kind words and the six stars!
Steve
Comment from Ben Colder
I'm voting for the fat lady. She has pizzas, The bears can do their thing where they please. Great poem. I find no fault. Best to you.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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I'm voting for the fat lady. She has pizzas, The bears can do their thing where they please. Great poem. I find no fault. Best to you.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Ah, but what happens when the Pope, the bear and the fat lady all meet up in the woods? Who gets the pizzas then?!
Steve
Comment from ennahanid
How funny this is and a fun read to boot. Loved your made up word 'betterer' to keep the rhyme going. What a super acrostic for the contest and I wish you luck and thank you for the laugh and the grin...just super - Dinah
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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How funny this is and a fun read to boot. Loved your made up word 'betterer' to keep the rhyme going. What a super acrostic for the contest and I wish you luck and thank you for the laugh and the grin...just super - Dinah
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Dinah!
Te laugh is what it's all about.
Steve
Comment from mfowler
It's good to see an accomplished poet taking on acrostics and making literature...well sort of. It's great when the acrostic has rhyme and rhythm which yours does in spades. And although you refer to it as "a little truth cloaked in anapaestic mumbo-jumbo", I think it works well as entertainment and food for thought. I like the way you wander from creature to creature extolling its virtues as something that when it comes to man "looks like they can do it much betterer." One such action is "the bear in the woods simply 'goes' where he likes, Serenity must be his lot". You have included some quaint lines which don't mean a great deal, but that fits. And so "Cor Blimey! Caramba! Let the fat lady sing!" Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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It's good to see an accomplished poet taking on acrostics and making literature...well sort of. It's great when the acrostic has rhyme and rhythm which yours does in spades. And although you refer to it as "a little truth cloaked in anapaestic mumbo-jumbo", I think it works well as entertainment and food for thought. I like the way you wander from creature to creature extolling its virtues as something that when it comes to man "looks like they can do it much betterer." One such action is "the bear in the woods simply 'goes' where he likes, Serenity must be his lot". You have included some quaint lines which don't mean a great deal, but that fits. And so "Cor Blimey! Caramba! Let the fat lady sing!" Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
Not sure if the judges will appreciate my blend of entertainment with food for thought, but I had fun.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
LOL You'll be lucky if they all understand this one, Steve! But hear hear! Let the fat lady sings indeed. If only the animals could talk they would be a political party to reckon with! Great poem, Giddy
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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LOL You'll be lucky if they all understand this one, Steve! But hear hear! Let the fat lady sings indeed. If only the animals could talk they would be a political party to reckon with! Great poem, Giddy
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Giddy
I just need one of the judges to get this and convince the othrs!
Steve
Comment from rama devi
Witty and extremely unique, this makes a memorable entry in the acrostic contest! Clever having the answer to the question in the title...though some sticklers might say you need the entire phrase there.
Superb flow and the bonus of outstanding rhyming mark this one a notch above most entries. Especially creative rhymes: Chooses and Amuses and the slant rhyme of etcetera and the inventive word: betterer.
Sounds good read aloud.
Solid imagery and theme thread. Love this commentary:
On the actions of man all the animals sneeze -
Looks like they can do it much betterer.
Bravo and good luck.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Witty and extremely unique, this makes a memorable entry in the acrostic contest! Clever having the answer to the question in the title...though some sticklers might say you need the entire phrase there.
Superb flow and the bonus of outstanding rhyming mark this one a notch above most entries. Especially creative rhymes: Chooses and Amuses and the slant rhyme of etcetera and the inventive word: betterer.
Sounds good read aloud.
Solid imagery and theme thread. Love this commentary:
On the actions of man all the animals sneeze -
Looks like they can do it much betterer.
Bravo and good luck.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Rama.
I'm still puzzling this one out myself!
Steve
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Comment from krys123
Steve, you have a major error here in your acrostic poem that you may want to fix before you enter the contest. In acrostic poem the title has to be written in your title is "Yes" And that "Is the Pope a Catholic". You need to change to that.
Otherwise I found a poem to be very illuminative and enriching and somewhat inspiring. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for everyone to make the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Steve, you have a major error here in your acrostic poem that you may want to fix before you enter the contest. In acrostic poem the title has to be written in your title is "Yes" And that "Is the Pope a Catholic". You need to change to that.
Otherwise I found a poem to be very illuminative and enriching and somewhat inspiring. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for everyone to make the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Alex.
I know it's usual to have the acrostic word(s) as the title, but I don't think it's a requirement, so I'm happy to leave it as it is.
Steve
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Steve you are right after looking up the acrostic poem in the encyclopedia it is known to have been done with the title but it is not necessary.
Alex
Comment from adewpearl
I'm laughing my head off at your illustration of the bear shitting in the woods as the acrostic asks a parallel question, Is The Pope Catholic LOL
I don't even have to read the damn poem itself to be laughing myself silly
great flow including the anapestic passages
excellent use of enjambment
good alliteration in phrases like perfumes is the path and skylark that soars
i'm loving the etcetera betterer passage
good stuff, my friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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I'm laughing my head off at your illustration of the bear shitting in the woods as the acrostic asks a parallel question, Is The Pope Catholic LOL
I don't even have to read the damn poem itself to be laughing myself silly
great flow including the anapestic passages
excellent use of enjambment
good alliteration in phrases like perfumes is the path and skylark that soars
i'm loving the etcetera betterer passage
good stuff, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Brooke.
Glad you got laugh out of this and appreciated the mumbo-jumbo.
Steve
Comment from Nosha17
That was an enjoyable acrostic, that rhymed and had good wit. Your rhymes worked well, good use of language to convey your thoughts and message. Illustration super cute and good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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That was an enjoyable acrostic, that rhymed and had good wit. Your rhymes worked well, good use of language to convey your thoughts and message. Illustration super cute and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Faye, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from GracieAnn
kiwi, this Acrostic Poetry Contest entry is fresh in its approach, solid in expressing the thought process and uses the acrostic to drive an important point home. Mankind is charged with taking care of creation not mangling it! Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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kiwi, this Acrostic Poetry Contest entry is fresh in its approach, solid in expressing the thought process and uses the acrostic to drive an important point home. Mankind is charged with taking care of creation not mangling it! Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thanks, GA
No reason why we can't laugh and think at the same time!
Steve
