They Try to Box Me In
Rhyming Quatrains193 total reviews
Comment from ElegantButler
Imagine what the world would look like today if we built with our imaginations instead of the structure the world thrusts upon us. This is a wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Imagine what the world would look like today if we built with our imaginations instead of the structure the world thrusts upon us. This is a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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ElegantButler, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from MelissaBickel
I love this. There is so much joy to be found within the walls of a box, especially when the imagination runs free. What a fantastic picture of Sawyer!
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I love this. There is so much joy to be found within the walls of a box, especially when the imagination runs free. What a fantastic picture of Sawyer!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Melissa, thanks so much :-) brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Four good stanzas in perfect abab rhyme form. The message is excellent - makes much sense - I thought your third stanza full of wisdom. Cleverly written, maintaining a steady seven syllables per line throughout. Good Read and cute picture. How children love to climb into boxes - I have pictures of my grandchildren doing just that. Regards Dorothy
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Four good stanzas in perfect abab rhyme form. The message is excellent - makes much sense - I thought your third stanza full of wisdom. Cleverly written, maintaining a steady seven syllables per line throughout. Good Read and cute picture. How children love to climb into boxes - I have pictures of my grandchildren doing just that. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
Those poetic thoughts are just what the doctor ordered for myself at least. I like this kind of thinking. The poem is well written and flows smoothly with its thoughts and phrases. I enjoyed partaking in this well written poetic thought transference... John
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Those poetic thoughts are just what the doctor ordered for myself at least. I like this kind of thinking. The poem is well written and flows smoothly with its thoughts and phrases. I enjoyed partaking in this well written poetic thought transference... John
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
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John, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Nice to hear you raised your daughter well. Take some time for yourself, there's a lesson there. lol
An enjoyable read with this quatrain style that serves your rhyming well.
An uplifting philosophical message to be learnt in this poem.
good work Brooke
lulube
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Nice to hear you raised your daughter well. Take some time for yourself, there's a lesson there. lol
An enjoyable read with this quatrain style that serves your rhyming well.
An uplifting philosophical message to be learnt in this poem.
good work Brooke
lulube
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Lulube, thank you so much :-) Miranda works so hard. Every second she carves out for herself is well deserved. Brooke
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welcome Brooke
lulube
Comment from victor 66
Children and their imagination, perhaps one of the most wonderful combinations in the universe. Over the years I have seen children come up incredible creations that boggle the mind. Too numerous to mention here. However, my favorite was a robot. Please, continue to write about the 'magic' of children. There is hope for the world.
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Children and their imagination, perhaps one of the most wonderful combinations in the universe. Over the years I have seen children come up incredible creations that boggle the mind. Too numerous to mention here. However, my favorite was a robot. Please, continue to write about the 'magic' of children. There is hope for the world.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'They Try To Box Me In" is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. To me a confined mind is much the same as a nailed coffin. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
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'They Try To Box Me In" is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. To me a confined mind is much the same as a nailed coffin. It was a pleasure to review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Brooke, you're very welcome :- the Duchess
Comment from arnie47
very sweet. I wish I had a box like that for my granddaughter, but I would insist on a lock so grandpa could watch something else besides SCOOBY DOO or PITCH PERFECT. Nice job.
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very sweet. I wish I had a box like that for my granddaughter, but I would insist on a lock so grandpa could watch something else besides SCOOBY DOO or PITCH PERFECT. Nice job.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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arnie, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from healfromwithin
Your piece was pretty cute ~ I like the mental picture you painted of this spunky guy...
I liked you opening lines the best. Verse 2 seemed to flow a little less freely.
Cute picture, too, by the way. :)
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Your piece was pretty cute ~ I like the mental picture you painted of this spunky guy...
I liked you opening lines the best. Verse 2 seemed to flow a little less freely.
Cute picture, too, by the way. :)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Thank you, healfromwithin, for your thoughtful feedback. Brooke
Comment from RGstar
Well said, and with much dignity. A resounding voice of confidence.
We are often contained and conformed by both word and deed, yet some strive to just to be, who they were meant to be, regardless of the boundaries set by others.
I like the emotion of your image as a guide.
Good write,
RGstar
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Well said, and with much dignity. A resounding voice of confidence.
We are often contained and conformed by both word and deed, yet some strive to just to be, who they were meant to be, regardless of the boundaries set by others.
I like the emotion of your image as a guide.
Good write,
RGstar
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
