They Try to Box Me In
Rhyming Quatrains193 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Cute picture. It looks like he is on TV.
If imagination was boxed in there probably would be no poems, books, or TV recurring TV shows except News. That would be sad. Also, no one would think of cures for diseases. Imagination runs the world and makes it better.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Cute picture. It looks like he is on TV.
If imagination was boxed in there probably would be no poems, books, or TV recurring TV shows except News. That would be sad. Also, no one would think of cures for diseases. Imagination runs the world and makes it better.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from the blue pixel
Your pic reminded me when a few years older than your grandson, pretending to me a television announcer during a concert I put on at school. Thanks for the memory. I think you are reliving and relating to the things Sawyer is going through. We all see things differently and innocently when we view them through a child's eyes. We see things that we simply forgotten. When I took my daughter Edwina to see the ocean for the very first time, she asked me which end was the deep end I appreciated the sea all over again. Imagination cannot be contained and luckily, this is one of the few things that even as adults, still pertains. Nothing can "box" or fence a child in at least in his boundary-less mind. xx Carol
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Your pic reminded me when a few years older than your grandson, pretending to me a television announcer during a concert I put on at school. Thanks for the memory. I think you are reliving and relating to the things Sawyer is going through. We all see things differently and innocently when we view them through a child's eyes. We see things that we simply forgotten. When I took my daughter Edwina to see the ocean for the very first time, she asked me which end was the deep end I appreciated the sea all over again. Imagination cannot be contained and luckily, this is one of the few things that even as adults, still pertains. Nothing can "box" or fence a child in at least in his boundary-less mind. xx Carol
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Carol, thanks so much. I'm glad this triggers your own memories of childhood and of your little girl's childhood :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
A child refusing to stay within the limits and a writer's imagination that refuses to stick to the prescriptions of the norms- I see these two ideas juxtaposed here.Thoughts cannot be confined and imagination has to run wild .Sawyer needs his freedom and his grandmother 's pen too would not be contained by anyone .I loved this one.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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A child refusing to stay within the limits and a writer's imagination that refuses to stick to the prescriptions of the norms- I see these two ideas juxtaposed here.Thoughts cannot be confined and imagination has to run wild .Sawyer needs his freedom and his grandmother 's pen too would not be contained by anyone .I loved this one.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Sanku, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from Shirley B
This is a wonderful poem, Brooke. The best toys in the world are a cardboard box and pots and pans. Their is no need to spend hundreds of dollars of dollars on toys when they have a box. I love your rhyming lines. Great job. Sawyer is si cute. He is growing so much. :) Shirley
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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This is a wonderful poem, Brooke. The best toys in the world are a cardboard box and pots and pans. Their is no need to spend hundreds of dollars of dollars on toys when they have a box. I love your rhyming lines. Great job. Sawyer is si cute. He is growing so much. :) Shirley
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Shirley, thank you so much :-) You are so right. Sawyer is into common everyday things like fans and vacuum cleaners and suitcases. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Dibul
Short and sweet, this poem successfully conveys the message of living out of the box. True, especially for kids, that the imagination knows no boundaries. The quatrains are simple, rhythmic, and rhyme well. Sawyer, as usual, looks adorable! :)
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Short and sweet, this poem successfully conveys the message of living out of the box. True, especially for kids, that the imagination knows no boundaries. The quatrains are simple, rhythmic, and rhyme well. Sawyer, as usual, looks adorable! :)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Divya, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Harv
i know it is touchy to edit poetry but this is my two cents
If waves can stretch for miles
upon an endless sea,
no boundaries exist
to stop the likes of me.
If waves stretch for miles
upon endless seas,
should boundaries exist
stop the likes of me.
very good poem enjoyed all of it
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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i know it is touchy to edit poetry but this is my two cents
If waves can stretch for miles
upon an endless sea,
no boundaries exist
to stop the likes of me.
If waves stretch for miles
upon endless seas,
should boundaries exist
stop the likes of me.
very good poem enjoyed all of it
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful feedback, Harv. I tend to like my stanzas to follow the same syllable count and meter throughout the poem, and the others use six syllable lines :-) Brooke
Comment from maggieadams
Your poetry is always rock solid in rhythm and rhyme. Does it flow out easily? Guess that you have never lived "in a box" and have had the freedom to expand and explore. The theme of liberty to create is one of the most important aspects of our lives. As one says, "a mind is a terrible thing to waste."
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Your poetry is always rock solid in rhythm and rhyme. Does it flow out easily? Guess that you have never lived "in a box" and have had the freedom to expand and explore. The theme of liberty to create is one of the most important aspects of our lives. As one says, "a mind is a terrible thing to waste."
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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maggieadams, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from darling
brilliant! My favorite line: for minds were never made to have their thoughts confined.
Indeed boys and boxes will bring hours of entertainment but I love how you translated the child in a box into a mind not wanting to be contained. well written. write on!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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brilliant! My favorite line: for minds were never made to have their thoughts confined.
Indeed boys and boxes will bring hours of entertainment but I love how you translated the child in a box into a mind not wanting to be contained. well written. write on!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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darling, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DALLAS01
Sorry I am out of sixes. The rhythm and rhyme are always spot on. But it is the message conveyed that always captures my attention. Intrinsic lessons that one would think need not be explained, but in fact, we must be reminded of. Love the pic of Sawyer.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Sorry I am out of sixes. The rhythm and rhyme are always spot on. But it is the message conveyed that always captures my attention. Intrinsic lessons that one would think need not be explained, but in fact, we must be reminded of. Love the pic of Sawyer.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Dallas, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from twinklepoems
What is so darn cute about kids and cats in boxes? This is a lovely poem of rhyming quatrains. Cute double entendre with playing with the box and being "boxed in". I really like the line "imagination knows no boundaries or walls." I like the comparisons of being boxed in versus imagination being free.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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What is so darn cute about kids and cats in boxes? This is a lovely poem of rhyming quatrains. Cute double entendre with playing with the box and being "boxed in". I really like the line "imagination knows no boundaries or walls." I like the comparisons of being boxed in versus imagination being free.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Twinkles, thanks so much - it's true that kids and cats both have that same nesting impulse :-) Brooke
